Reviewer: NotSirk Signed
December 22 2018
Chapter 29: Chapter 29
Ah, so the title "A Charmed Life" is like irony. I see. Well played.
I really liked this story. Did it really take ten years to finish? I feel I've been reading it from the beginning was that ten years ago? How long have I been on this site?!
Love your detail work in this story. You really know a lot about horses, or have researched enough to appear like you know a lot about horses! Detail work like that really fleshes out the setting and it's something I'd like to know more about. Why do the giants seem more American expansionist western of the 1800's while humans seem like midieval europe? Maybe I'm just imagining that. It's cool I like it!
The characters are really strong. Especially the relationship of the main two. Tor and Eric have such a wonderful and intimate friendship! I originally thought it was heading toward romance, but what has formed it delightful. I wouldn't hesitate to call her princeling a pet but it's also clear he's more than that to her. They've both changed each other and in some ways not for the better. The prince of chapter one might have been able to evade capture. Too many flapjacks and warm baths huh, prince boy? Soft! You can't afford to be soft on the frontier!
Tor's brothers are well done too. Well at least the one's that matter. I honestly have trouble remembering anyone but Jason and Mick. Jason is delightfully slimey and entitled. I like that it doesn't just show in his personality but by the way he breeds his horses relying on his father's work. Mick is well....Mick.
I'm kinda disappointed in Mick, and in Tor to be honest. She see's him with such contempt now as a spineless failure. (which he is) but I 'd argue she's failed him just as much as he failed her. They were both discriminated against for being children from a different mother. It feels like he took the brunt of that bullying. I kind of wonder what's been happening to Mick when we don't see him from Tor's perspective. This may be giving him too much credit, but I don't think he actually wanted to sign over his horses or even go on whatever that errand was. And Tor seemed too busy with her own horses and her rivalry with Jason to actually help him. Not everyone can be a tough, independent, cowgirl like her! Some people need help and Tor wasn't offering much. Just my hot take on that. I still have hope for Mick to redeem himself in part two. If he's not dead by then anyway. Tor's gone and even if she wasn't she's done with Mick. If Jason's still alive his anger's going toward someone.
Great story. I feel the ending was a little abrupt, but I can understand that if you're planning a part 2! I look forward to it! :DAuthor's Response: Yes, it really did take ten years! The first chapter of this story was published on DeviantArt in September 2008. I am so very flattered youíre reading my story! I started reading MAJOR/minor the other day. Itís very interesting. I adore Izzy so far. Yes, I do know a fair bit about horses and do thorough research when Iím not sure. As for the ending, I do know I needed to work on the flow but figured I would do that in the next round of edits. When it comes to Mick, Iíll look at fleshing out his side of the story where it fits. I do think he has a tale to tell but frequently gets drowned out by his stronger twin. Again, Iím so glad you enjoyed my story!