Nearly waited 2 years to see it continued haha. Wished it had been differently though because I hate chewing, I am just a fan of vore not chewing, and digestion gore. Still hope youll continue. Because this was always one of my fav stories on here. You have amazing skills to  extend the situation.

reaaaly great plot idea

I CANT wait for the "fun" ith the boyfriend! I already loved your other story. MAybe try to write a biit longer. But your stories are amazing. Keep going! Would love to see the boyfriend be a total asshole, cocky, maybe on the football team, and the little brothr ends in his condom, which would be casually thrown away into the toilet or waste bin. Or worse, ends in a cum droplet ruing don his scrotum into his ass.

!!!! !!!!!!! What a surprise. YEES!! Thank you so so so much. You made my day with this, I couldnt believe it when I saw it and was so happy when I saw you had began a new tf mm story, and I began reading it and just "swallowed" it up in minutes and read it like three times in a row. You are an incredible author. You just did it RIGHT again. I am usually a fan of pure unaware stories, but this one got totally to me too and I even enjoyed it somehow incredible much. Know what I love so much of your style? How you just have this talent of writing these teenagers totally plausible and logic. It is the simple things you think about and do just RIGHT. How he just got home after classes, and how he got the two slices of pizza and casually ate him in a bored way while going to his room? THAT I already loved! It would have been even more ironic and funny, if he maybe chewed with open mouth, scratched at his ass, and maybe even burped when he swallowed. I have actually a question here, which is really interesting to hink about. Is Ashely gay or straight? I actually would love to see him being straight, that would be really cruel to hink about how he enjoys and it makes him plesure, to torture some innocent random guys. The fact why I ask was, how he made this guy shrink and eat at work LOL, when he touched him on his butt or something, and was like the fuck, I am a guy. And then the part with the phone and he jerked off? I actually thought of, was he looking at some girl on there? But then he had pink bed covers, so this might be hinting he was gay. I actually would enjoy both, where both would have its own different kind of aspects. The idea with the tissue and the waste bin was so so so so hot. I even thought of him drying and then maybe one of the roomamtes would come in and use it too, maybe toilet paper was empty in the dorm toilet, and he takes it and use to wipe lol. Actually I find the idea of a college dorm plot incredible hot. I would totally wish for so many tf ideas, but also, hopefully his roommates wont be changed! I would prefer them be around, and be used in cruel unaware plots. For example turn some college class teacher maybe they all have together into an asshole of them, then also a tight underpants for him, maybe Ashely places in their room with laughter, then also maybe one of the roomates has a girl over to have sex with, and one unluck guy ends as his condom, and he casually removes it from his dick aftewards and throws the full used condom in his rooms bin too, where it would slowly sit, and the guy just "stare" in his head... silently... plop, plop, a bit of of cum dropping out of his "mouth". Then also turning maybe some asshole college jocks into two flys, who would end in a cruel way, when they try to get help from their best friends aka the roomaates of Ashely. Some food tf like the popcorn one with one ending as a kernel, that was so hot, would be cool too. Someone ending as a tiny little dingleberry in ones ass. One ending as a cum stain on one of the jocks bed covers, or drying in their boxers. UGH a college plot is so AWESOME. Imagine them having Friday Night parties in the college all the time, and just ugh... somany hot unlimited tf arcs imaginable. Rude cocky other college guys, a random guy, the pizza delivery man, teachers. I am so happy right about this story happening. I also liked how he made the guy just into a tissue for no reason, the begging was so hot, and just someone ending in a waste bin is so cruel to think about. Someone ending as a boxer for one of the roomates on the other end of it with his face in the ass area would be so cruel. Especially when college guys maybe are lazy, and not showering so much, and the dirty pants laying around in the room or dirty cloths bag for weeks. Maybe even with cum stains in them.

!!! Seriously... I liked the first half of the chapter, how you made a flip in time, and told how he got his power, and how you first had no idea bout it. The part with the ant was soo good, wish somehow he would have stayed unaware about his powers, but I also like it now he does know, I will tell in a bit why. I loved how you said he hated every kind of insect, that could be used later lol.  Maybe if he turns some bullies into pesky tiny flys, brings them back, and his roommates exterminatem them with a rolled up magazine, and one ends eaten by a gold fish, or bird, or whatever. The part with his parentes died in a car accident was really upset to read. Here comes the reasn why it is also awesome to think about he is awre. I love how he enjoyes it more and more and literally now is at this point, where when he turned someone into an object, he wont ever turn them back anymore, and to him they arent humans anymore. So awesome. The part with the pie accident was so funny, just one bite, one more, oops all gone, lol. And the cinema one, how he lied, soo awesome, and how she was like youre the best friend ever. So mean!!

And now I have to totally tell you, youre just an incredible author. Why? Dude.. this idea? With he turns someone... into a drawing on a paper in class, in his notebook? That is one of the most original ideas I ever read in an transformation story. I think I never read anywhere before someone did this. Normally people just become objects, but here, this guy literally became a drawing ON a paper... this... is so fucked up and awesome. It adds so many cruel possibilites. Like you did with the eraser... or adding new things to the drawing... or... overdraw it. !!! LOL! Too bad this part was so short. I would love to see that again. And it actually even made me think, what if he turns someone into a girly poster for his roomates, which he would use as a masturbate material to look at. Or imagine someone becomes a little drawn person on a paper, and he rubs the paper part into a little ball he uses to slime up in his mouth and spit in class at someone through a straw.

Tell you what I think of this story? Endless cruel possibilities. I am so happy you decided to write it. And this notebook idea is awesome. Remindes me somehow of the anime Death Note.

I have no idea how to start or where to begin, this is your darkest one you did here and the sammy one I think, I absolutely love it, please continue like it. It cant get cruel enough for me. I absolutely love everything in this chapter. But it is not just the most darkest, it is also your lognest I think, the best plot, the longest plot the most deep characters (I loved the talk of the characters, you have this incredile talent of creating a realistic plot, you are an incredible author...). I hope to see more party plots like this, it is a college right, dorm parties like this happen mostly every Friday.

There are so many examples I found incredible, I would need a marker to mark them all and speak about every single one, sigh. I wish I could just hug you for hours so you know how much I LOVE this chapter.

Oh that horrible fantastic irony, of the 'that pretty little ass of your' in the intro, and than in the ending... I love it when you do this, this is already such a great sign of a great author, connecting plots and making them logic, and have some little part the reader will remember and then be like FUUCK, this is so AWESOME now after I read the chapter. I always loved these ironic parts so much, for example in the popcorn chapter, with those lines like 'I dont want it to go to WASTE' HA. And now I imagine Ashely also as this kind of skinny as fuck kid, with a little skinny ass, maybe like Yugi from Yugioh, something like this, wearing tight a fuck black or gray jeans:

https://i.imgur.com/VmjQmif.jpg 

That ARSE!! And because of this skinny jeans, he might look like a girl maybe from behind, haha, this is so ironic and pure awesome, I love it.

AND I love how you created Ashely SO differently from Sammy. I loved Sammy, you know this, but Ashely I also love maybe even more already. Because he has a large ego, and he is some how totally sadistic towards shitty people or just random, he doesnt 'give a shit about' LITERALLY. How he reacted to this rude customer was the best example. Sammy maybe would start to cry, but Ashely was just pissed and moody, didnt show it much to the customer (or he didnt get his ironic remark) I LOVE this so MUCH, please continue like that. AAAAAND, here comes a HUGH turn of for me: How he uses these teen slang words like 'meh, duh' SO GOOD! The part here: 

"W-w-what..." Tucker said shocked more than anything else. "You can understand me?""Duh," Ashely told.

The idea with the 7 years instead of the guy thinking, thanks god, 7 days... one of the best things you ever came up with, SO ironic, and SO fitting, I love how cruel Ashely reacted there, not much emotions, how he just was like duh... then also just looking down into the toilet with no words, this horrible long silence. Then just this sentence: "Now," Ashely said pulling down his underwear and presenting his ass to Tucker. "get ready for my pretty little ass, just like you wanted." pure horror so hot. And it comes back to the intro part, with the 'pretty little ass'. So sad you skipped him taking that shit, but I am sure there is lots of more to come in upcoming chapters.

Oh this EPIC ironic remark afterwars but of him be like 

Ashely walked out the bathroom, "Nothing like taking a good dump."
SSSOO HOT, please let him talk like this more, so dirty and just vuglar I love it. And how you made it continue of the girls reacting

"Eww," Clair said. "that's disgusting.""What? You're acting like you didn't take a shit this morning.""I mean..." Clair started."It felt like my anus threw up," Monica said as she didn't seem to hide what happen to her."Same," Debbie replied.Clair didn't say anything but Ashely knew for a fact that she did too.

The idea with the toilet seat breaking of two having sex in the bathroom... EPIC, and SO HOOT. I am sorry I am jumping around but my mind is like 220mph racing right now. All the dirty talk, for example nope I dont have a condom, and give it me in the ass... and then

"Come on," Debbie said getting her clothes on."Don't you want to," Zach said nodding his head toward the toilet."I'm tired, in the morning," Debbie said almost falling down from the intense sex and the amount of alcohol in her system.

You did it just perfectly of the conversations in this chapter. And please let me say, I think this chapter is the best you wrote ever, you literally learned to evolve and put all into this chapter to make it all even better. I was already such a fan of your work in the Sammy plot, but this is now on a new level.

Then Phil ... thank you so much for introducing him as a football player and him being the captain and quaterback of the team, I love how he is all friendly actually towards Ashely, please dont make Phil transform, he has to stay one of the shielded characters, him, Ashely, Frank, and the girls. I want them stay the good protagonists of the plot, who are anharmed. And it would make things so much fucking better, and I have already one of the most cruel ideas, I want to share in a moment with you.

I loved how Phil was all cringe at the party with the dare to kiss and how you 'came to a rescue' with the epic mirror idea, LOL! Like Ashely is in love with himself, that fits so perfectly with the characteristics of a psychopath.

Know what the best was of this chapter? How the 'toilet' didnt see it coming what eventually would happen, how he was so innocent, of course, he was human not a toilet, and he was in shock, and confused... but you sir are a genius... you literally thought of EVERYTHING. This is by far the best horror plot I read and this example, and so many more, add to it. How he was all like at first experiencing the girls peeing, and then after the 3rd or so, be like let her finishing peeing let her finish, thanks god, shes done... .... nothing happens. Wh-whats going on, why isnt she wiping, is she taking a nap? This horrible silence... of looking up, into her ass, crotch, vagina. More time flows... him totally still NOT getting it, his brain just cant put two and two together why she isnt moving. This is by far the best anticipation you ever did, MORE LIKE IT. And I have a good idea for using it actually again.

I cant think how you could have done this chapter better... except one little detail, and I would love to see it happening in a future chapter. I told you how fantastic the sex in the toilet idea was, and the fuck me in the ass idea. And how it was Debbie who ironically used the toilet later. But you forgot a little gross detail, which had made the plot EVEN better. What was it? Well... think about it. What might could have been happened, which would make it even 100 times more horrible, especially for the straight guy who was now her toilet? Debbie was fucked in her ass, so there should be still lots of gross, slimy cum in her rectum. You could have written out, how she farted and cum came out of her anus, in a thick honey gorss slimy cum thread with horrible thick viscosity. Imagine the horror, of cum out of a girls ass, by a college jock, who fucked her a bit eariler, givin into this straight guys mouth. It would be the ultimate horror. And you should use it maybe in a future chapter. Imagine, how he still doesnt get what was about to happen, and then suddenly a gigantic slimy creamy turd comes out of her anus, OH GOD NO OH GOOD NO NO N OOT THIS GOD NO HELP ME ANY ONE GOD NO- and the snake of cramy shit suddenly keeps acceleration then comes out in a steady speed, and the worst? The creamy shit had CUM around it, white cum, the guy totally saw glued to it. Imagine the horror... the pure horror.

I loved everything how you made the guy imagine him gagging, vomitting, choking, but he cant of course, he had just the feeling in his head, of gagging, and choking and vomitting, and of course, he had all the taste and smell senses. PURE EPIC. AAANd he also would never die, this is by far the best. Imagine what would happen to his brain, his personality, after a week... two weeks... a months? He would be a shell of his former self. He would literally become a LOW IQ drooling mindless thing, totally broken out of shock. Even if Ashely remembered it, and turned him back after 7 years, he wouldnt be able to speak anymore, he would be need to put in a mental hostpial, never be able to speak anymore, just drooling, opened wide eyes, of the horror he went through. I love this so much. Especially of guys using him... this part... so fucking hot: "I got to take a shit," said a male voice. I wish who it was, was it Phil maybe, that would have been so epic.

I can go on like this for hours, see, there are so many parts in this chapter, just these little details like, 'I got to take a shit' a male voice said, making the horror so good. Or the ending of the chapter:

Ashely couldn't help but giggle at that thought, "I don't know, he looks like he can take it.""He?" Clair asked confused."I just like to think of it as a he," Ashely answered.Clair and the other girls couldn't help but laugh as they headed out of the dorm room. Debbie said, "Then he is in for a long month."

The idea of the other toilet broken... and they would use this one, all together, boys and girls, SOOO EPIC! And Ashely not having the slighest regret, no emotion, not giving a shit. What if he would come to it too randomly, to take a shit, not even speaking to him, just to show off his 'cute little ass', and what comes out of it.

This is so evil making it so good, how Ashels 'plays' with it here, he knows, no one else does, no one else would ever, he is the only one who can hear those objects speak, making it so fantastic. And this idea hea? 'I just like to think of it as a he' SOOOOO EPIC! And how the girls then laughed and asnwered in an ironic way back, like teenagers jues do: 'Then he is in for a long month.' You have to continue like it, if you asked me, how to continue, LIKE THIS, this chapter is like the best example 'template', but also, maybe even go beyond, and make it even more horrific, more cruel, more evil and more dirty. And mix it with Asheley just be cold, sadistic, and not giving a shit.

Here is this idea I had actually out of this chapter. I spoke about how epic it would be, if he turns someone into a flesh-light. And how Phil would totally be the best candidate for gifting it to. What if it was Phils 18 birthday, this is actually how I imagine Phil looking like, body shape, not too muscular, but all skinny and sporty of course, like a typical quaterback:

https://i.imgur.com/7iQUmOx.png

https://i.imgur.com/InkilWf.png

I also thought of him maybe swimming too.

So it's his birthday, and Ashely gifts him a fleshlight, maybe even with some ironic remark and laugh, saying, he knew how they (the former fleshlights of him) never last long, and Phil is just like yeah, I use them just too often I guess. Too often, you mean daily? Then it would be some douche, maybe who hates Phil or even worse, maybe a friend of his from the football team, who was rude to Ashley, or maybe a teacher of his. But I think the teacher idea would be epic of used to turn someone into Phils anus, and also using the concept of them not seeing what eventually would happen, and them vomitting a long creamy turd. Then imagine Phil never cleans his fleshlight, and it rots in his room after being used, with thick slimy cum all inside, deep in the mouth/throat, and the guy totally with wide open eyes sitting there in silence... some gag nosies ciming from it, which no one can hear of course, just some vomitting wet noises coming from it... no one can hear, and Phil just sitting on his computer, maybe browsing some straight porn or tumblr. Then I think, what if you would switch to the flesh light randomly in seperate chapter, you never did this before. I had actually this cruel idea I spoke about eailer: what if someone else uses Phils flesh light or he takes it to a party and shares it (the female blow up doll would be awesome for this idea though too), and then something nightmarish would happen. Phil sitting in his room, and someone be like, the dorm toilet is flooded, just great, but Phil had to take a shit badly. He looks around, and notices his fleshlight, and makes a disgusted expression, seeing how it looked totally wearn out alrady after a week of being used. He lifts it up and laughes and gives it a shake with a finger, and speaks to it, hey there little buddy, you totally went through a lot already huh, Ashley was right, my fleshlights never last long laughing. And then the pressure in his rectum gets more intense, shit... he says, and then looks at the fleshlight, and gets an idea. It was so worn out and dirty and smelly anyway already, he would have to throw it away anyway soon. So... he useses the fleshlight as a contained to take a shit into. Crotching, and pressing the opening hard on his anus, and then emptying his bowls into it, filling it to its rim with shit, then uses a tissue from his desk to wipe his anus, and plop the dirty tissue into the opening, pressing down, so it was all filled with shit and on top the tissue. Him looking at it with disgust and then throwing it into the waste bin, he would empty the day or so anyway. Then Ashley could also ask about the fleshlight at some point and Phil scratching his head and be like you were right, they never last, I need a new one I guess, sorry, I hope it wasnt too expensive. And Ashley is like oh it wasnt, actually it was a cheap sale, it wouldnt be too hard to get a new one, cool, thanks bro, where can I order it, dont worry Ill get you a new one.

Ugh I could go on like this forever I love giving reviews! Thank you so much for this chapter, I am in love with it, by far far far. Would love to see you maybing taking off this idea, but also lots of chapters to come. This story is already better than the Sammy one, or at least same level.

hii! Did you like my ass long review I left the other day? hope so! took me some timr to write. I would give eanything for this flesh light idea and it being used to shit into, especially if it would have a mouth like in that picture. But to this, are you kidding me? I love mind control, yes it is called mind controle, youre right. But it would be some really cruel mind control. Imagine some jock straight of course would become an espanic escort girl, smaller of course, and now he finds out he was a girl, he had a vagina, and him totally crying about it, but then the mind control takes over, like hey you got a job for tonight, some jock party. And suddenly he cant control any longer, he was like watching a film from his eyes, and he hears himself speak, and he cant control his body. Imagine how he would be seen as some stupid espanic escort girl, who then would be booked for a jock party for some younger boys wanting fun, and he had to give blow jobs, but also would be used for cheap sex. And him puking in his mind, especally the next morning, groggy, thinking he was still a boy, then wake up with a dick in his vagina... vagina?? totally panicing and running to the bathroom to puke. And then all the horrible (to him) talk, of the boys, calling him a chick, babe, she, the hooker, look shes wet, hey babe want to give me a blowjob, youll love this (whisper into his ears), giving him a kiss on his neck, a boy kissing him, and he wants to puke, get me out of heere, get the tongue out of throat, and one beginning to finger his vagina, and the panic of him realizing, he had no penis anymore, no this cant be happening... stuff like this. You write it so awesome in this chapter with the toilet. But I think this idea with the blow up sex doll would also be great, no the same of course, maybe you could do both over time. Always nice to hear back from you!
Oh you got me wrong there I think. The warping wasnt a good idea actually, because it would change the characters. Thats not what I meant here! He would be still himself in his head! But he had no control over his body... so he would totally be like in a horror movie, watch it happen to himself.

I have no idea how or where to start again because this chapter was absolutely EPIC, and SO much BETTER, even BETTER, than what I had in mind, when I wrote about this fly tf idea once in an older comment. You absolutely mastered it in every direction I thought it through actually, and you have no idea how happy I am right now!! Thank you so much of youd used this idea.

Please let me say, I think I told before how much I loved the Sammy story and how it was my favorite story of yours. But now, I think I can say for sure, the new favorite story of mine by you is this one. Sammys story is for sure now my 2nd fav one. It is so ironic, how I had seconds thoughts at first of this story, because Ashely is aware, instead of Sammy was totally unaware. Both have their own unique flavor. But I have to say, I just am right now in love, of how sadistic Ashely is, and how he plays with these victims. And I want to say a few words on this actually, because it reminds me actually of the movies SAW. And I am right now purely in love, with the concept you created in this chapter, of Ashely starting the tf of introducing to his newest victim, what he did, and what will be happening. It is literally in the style of SAW, “I want to play a little game”. I give you a fair chance to win the game, you can get back to normal / win your life, I give you a fair chance... well of course this is totally a lie, which makes it so fucking epic and hot. Because it is literally a no win scenario. And Ashely is literally getting a boner from this cruel game. I have to actually beg you, to use this concept again during future chapters, I already have some idea how actually, later more on this.

The pure epicness of this sadistic game of life or death actually is, that Ashely is playing a foul play, the transformed dont see coming. Of him literally throwing in stones for him, making his chances to win this game near zero chance. And I absolutely love this unfairness. The pure irony here is, that Ashely actually told or “warned” him. I give you two options, stay, and find out what I will do with you when I come back and lets have some “fun”, or leave this room. But I warn you, if you leave this room, I will threat and think of you just as an ordinary fly. This... was... fucking... EPIC. I cant even tell how awesome this was, and this talk of Ashely to his newest random victim, was actually already one of the best parts of the whole chapter.

Coming over the term random. Because this is like one of the best parts of this story now, and you totally have to hold on it. I love the idea, how literally everyone who isnt a friend of Ashely, or a teacher he likes, could literally become his next victim... and Ashely wouldnt give a shit about his fate. And... he gets a wank off about seeing him “lose” in his sadistic games. And I have to say, it is way better, when he turns boys into some nightmarish objects or body parts, then girls, and I hope you continue of this. It is so much more cruel in my opinion, especially of them being straight. I loved for example this little detail you mentioned, of Brandon thinking about his girlfriend and what she wants to do later.

See... details. This is another thing I want to talk about. You just have this incredible talent of throwing in details. Stuff so many bad authors forget. It is the little things in your story telling, which just make the whole chapter always great. It is a minor part, but it just adds to the compilation of things you are so great in. For example, how you made Brandon tell out of his perspective of a now fly, how the rooms and dorm structure looked like. I just loved this part, even if it was nothing special happeing there, I just loved it... should I go this door, or that, this door was closed, it may be the bathroom, better go this way, here the room was a kitchen, and stuff like that, it just... created a picture in my mind while reading, how the dorm looked like, and I just loved it. It actually reminded me a bit of books I read in the past by Michael Chrichton. The irony actually is, one of his last books before his death is the novel Micro, I have to read / listen to it again.

Coming back to the idea of SAW. I think it would be awesome to see Ashley do something like in this chapter again. Maybe he turns some random guys 2-3 into ants, and they are set free in the dorm, told how they had a chance to be turned back, just if they “somehow” would get in contact with some of Ashleys friends, or maybe tiny little baby cockroaches. It actually could end in some cruel crush scenarios, of the friends finding out, they had a nasty little bug infestation going on. Maybe not let food laying around all the time, right... and how Phil totally be like I fucking HATE bugs especially roaches, fucking little shit, where did it ran to. Ashely maybe be like Ill help looking.

I actually loved your idea, of Ashely giving Brandon the ability to still speak. I actually thought of, it would have been really ironic, if that was actually a lie, or lets say, a semi lie. I could have actually seen Ashely telling the truth about it, yes, he still was able to speak. But with speak, it meant bug language, and when Brandon spoke to humans other than Ashely, it would just sound like typical high pitched insect noise, hahaha

See these kind of unfairness is awesome, where Ashely could be at some point whispering to him, huh, oh didn't I mention it would be like that, or, I didn't lie, oops, didn't I tell about this, my bad.

I absolutely just fell in love of the part, where suddenly two hands slaped together in mid air, nearly killing Brandon, and to his pure horror, finding out, it was Ashely. I actually just loved this so much, of Ashely literally throwing stones in his way, making his chance to win this sadistic game near impossible. The same went for the part of Ashely mentioning, oh would you eat a bug? … pure... epic. Wasnt it for Ashely and him had spot the fly on the pizza... maybe Brandon had still a chance to win the game. Especially after Phil wanted to throw the pizza way into the trash. Obviously Brandon would had maybe a chance of getting free in the trash bin over night, and try again the next day.

And... bad luck. Pure fantastic little thing to play with. Like the boys wearing headphones, or the other being stoned. Just great. Then this irony... of Ashely be like “oh there is a fly around here” and Frank added to it, oh yeah, the little shit wouldnt get off the TV before. This all plays just together... against Brandon.

This kind of manipulation of the conversation of Ashely is fucking fantastic, and gave me such a thrill, mostly same as it gave to Ashley. I loved how he actually got a boner from this entire talk, and the things his friends said... and how his sadistic plan literally became more and more sadistic, played out by his unaware friends.

You totally have to use this now actually in every chapter hopefully. It is so much fun of Ashely manipulating his friends, and use them as unaware exterminators or players in his game. They wont get hurt of course, just these random guys, no one would care about. Some students no one would give a shit about, or lets say, Ashely wouldnt.

It would be actually ironic, if Ashely unintentionally turned some friend of Phil into some horrible thing, or some fanboy who had a crush on Phil, a bit more about this later of some ideas I would love to be used actually.

The way how Frank and Phil spoke... was so fucking hot, them laugh, joke, even Phil was a bit vulgar and cocky, so fucking hot. How they joked about the bug and Phil was like “that was a one-way trip”... actually I had the idea of them had told like, Ashely maybe throwing in a sentence like, what you think will happen to the fly? And Phil just with a cocky smirk be like “shit dude”, huh, what you mean? “Well I told ya it was on a one-way trip. Next step for it my ass to kiss the toilet tomorrow.” and Frank just gag with a sad expression. Talk like this would for sure give Ashely again another boner thrill. Maybe you could actually use a talk like this in a cruel sadistic TF, which I would love to see honestly, of some very unlucky student becomes Phils anus. And Ashely plays out some conversation like bringing up a talk about how the toilet needs to be cleaned again, and Phil asnwering like, whoops my bad, I have really soft shits lately, Frank be like thats fucking disgusting one, maybe is eating something and is like, hey I'm trying to eat here. Phil be like, what, it's just I eat lots of fiber and all, giving really creamy shits you know whispering into Franks ear with a smirk, which gags on his spoon or drink poking out some drink on the table, Phil just laughing. And this conversation was of course be able to be hearn from the poor new anus of Phils in his pants. I even had this cruel idea, made of your addition to this chapter... how Ashely could always change things he wants during a TF. What if he warps into the tfed mind of the anus, and speaks to him, yes I can hear you, and after some talk, hes like, fine I will help you so you want need to whine anymore. I will change you so I cant hear you anymore, from one on... youll just be his anus, and no one, not even me would ever be able to hear you talk again. Enjoy your next meal... or should I say, next thrown up meal.

The burp parts of Phil were amazing, and how Frank got really sick of the talk.... even ran to the bathroom, totally amazing. And how it all gave Ashely a boner he tried to hide in his boxers...

The part where one of the flys leg was already melted away... was so awesome. How he sobbed and wished for someone to hear him … and how he actually got an answer... in the form of the stomach just gurgle around him, LOL.

I loved the after talk so much, of Ashely literally enjoying it to the bone, or should I say boner... he even played and manipulated the conversation after the fly was swallowed, and I thought of, how cruel it would be, if Brandon actually was able to hear the conversation outside happening.

The whole time Frank was like this is disgusting, and Phil just be like, what, it's just more protein, fair enough. Dude you cant be serious... this conversation was my favorite. It is so cruel if you think about Brandon hearing them talk about his fate... and what was about to happen to him.

And the best and most irony? The most cruel thing? His life was sealed for a single can of soda. LOL! He was literally sold for a can of soda, worth maybe $1. His life was sold away for $1... this was the best part of the entire chapter.

And this is totally the best chapter so far. Close near on the same level as the previous.

I could literally go on like this for some more time, and pick little parts out and tell you how great they were. But I hope you got an understanding of the most important things I wanted to tell... and you just have to continue like this, because... it is just perfect like it is. Ashely is perfect, and I love Phil already so much too, of him be the typical straight guy, and him also be the quarter back of the football team, making him already hot.

I have to say I am not a fan of this pet teacher concept and Ashely has a crush on his male math teacher, but I guess you have a little kink for it so why not, ha.

Ugh this talk is just SO good, the wait for me from Ashely... lol, I could just go on forever picking out parts I loved SO MUCH.

Coming to a closer, I want to end this review with a few tf concepts I would totally love to see as standalone chapters:

baby cockroaches tf

Phils anus tf, or Ashelys, whats better? Could fit actually if it was Ashelys, that hes like fine I will help you... help us both, because to be honest, I find it wear if I can hear my anus talk to me. So I will change you into that I wont be able to hear you anymore. Enjoy your stay, you liked my ass you said before, so I'm happy to fulfill your wish. Sorry to tell you this, but I had really creamy shits lately, meh, better out than in I guess, right. Hey maybe it tastes like chocolate syrup, too bad you cant tell me about it anymore though.

Boxershort tf, and some really cruel one, of them end with cum stains on the room under ones bed, mostly Phils

female blow up doll of course, and it also ends really cruel, used with cum in its mouth and vagina, shared maybe on a party

Ashely gifts Phil a “flesh light”, and the flesh light is used after a week or two like I wrote before in a comment, ending as being used to take a shit into it, because the dorm toilet is clocked, and Phil fills it to its rim with shit, and throws it in the trash, sealed with toilet paper

mind control tf into a hooker, and the pure straight boy would be the same in his head, but cant control his body, he would literally see and hear through his eyes and ears, the boys talk cheap about him, and he would scream in his mind, and no one would hear him, Ashely though would play with this, whisper into him of course, maybe on this party, of Phil be like chill dude, shes just a low iq hooker, she can give you a blowjob if you want, maybe the hooker cant even understand English properly, so it looks to the outside people, and also had a really low IQ... which was all fake of course, and part of the MC

someone ends as a bacteria inside ones large intestine or rectum, cursed to live in there as a ass bacterium

someone ends as/inside a giant cum stain, maybe shrunk to the size of a amoeba inside it

I actually had this idea of Ashely shrinking someone to microscopic size, like the size of a dust particle, and giving him a chance to win the game, if he could get to a specific point in the room, or send a signal through a key stroke of a PC keyboard. The poor guy would learn too late it was impossible of his size to use the keys though. Or turning someone into a mite and placing him in his roommates boxers. Or gluing them in place in it.

Thanks for reading. THANKs a billion times for writing. You made my day with this chapter.

Totally re read the chapter and had to tell a few more things. I like most the parts in all chapters so far where the transformed guys are like please no why is this happening, or screaming, are in pain, tears, throwing up, gaging, are losing their mind, scream for help, are like oh please no no, oh god n- and then are interupted, by some just casual normal event, by the unaware people, this is so written well, I honestly havent read something like it before and I am just loving it. You should totally focus on this and maybe make it even darker. And then as a toping of the cake, Ashely just ignore them, or find it thrilling how they suffer. Or even doesnt care, and just forget about them from one instant to another as just nothing happened. I liked how this William guy for example just... poof, became trashed by him, even he was a person before in a chapter, but he literally ruined the exam learn phasse for Ashely, so he became just trash... or actually shit in this case. I liked how Ashely just wanted him to end in a trash can, maybe had talked to him actually then, but it went totally different and he just laughed about it, oops. I liked how Phil was like this asshole, I then thought of, what if someone became one actually... or when someone says something like this shit mouth/breath. I also think a very cruel transformation would be, turning someine into a portable toilet box, maybe they go on a camping trip or bike trip, and Ashely offers this box to Phil to take a shit into when they are with bikes on the road. I think a very cruel contrast would be having the sobbing transformed guy somehow having false hope, sobbing and tearing up, maybe he like please, I dont deserve this, wh whats going on? And then the boy above just presses him on his anus to take a shit into, OH GOD NO PLEASE GOD NO. Then having hist Phil above txt casually with one hand holding his phone maybe, while slowly he slides out a large turd like from a soft ice machine, and it is like 3-5" long, and creamy soft. It would also work great for this idea with the fleshlight, but also with someone turns into his anus. I think this concept of SAW like with the fly would also be awesome to focus on again, maybe turning someone into a cockroach. Ashely gifting Phil a fleshlight would also fit great, because of the part where Ashely spoke to him and he didnt want to use the doll first, then later how he said yes it was good a bit shy. Ashley removing the capability to understand someone too is also a nice way of torture I think, like whispering to him oh dont worry, I wont be able to hear you anymore after this, enjoy being his/my asshole. Then also cruel would be Ashely looking through a microscope maybe in biology class, and watching someone being the size of a amoaeba or actually became one. Turning someone into a little grub and having him feed to a bird or goldfish by his unaware friends would also be cool, then being digested by the bird or goldfish intestine ending as a liquid withis yellow poop. The best is totally of the unaware boys and them doing stuff, joking about or using vulgar language, which indirectly mocks the transformed people.

So happy you wrote back, you have no idea! I would honestly love more than anything to see these ideas I talked about as chapters, there are so many ideas to write for hot chapters. I think I asked this before but would you maybe do a story commission for me maybe by time? We could maybe talk via email if you want, how could I reach you? I cant wait for the next chapters honestly.