Reviewer: TinyMan23 Signed
Date: June 30 2009
Title: Chapter 3: Worse for Tableware
Once again, I love this story.
This is probably my favourite story, even better than one of Cayce's stories and he IS the man.
I love the way you have brought Arrie to life. Shes so majestic. She's gentle, yet playful and naughty, but then again she has her darkside, like when she punishes him.
Also, at the ending, you add just a little more to her personality "She regarded him with surprising shyness." These little things.
That last sequence of with all the mouthplay, oh god you have a way with words. I love your use of vocabulary, keep updating soon, amazing story.
Author's Response: I apreciate the love.
Wow, even better than one of Cayce's stories? I just read Humonculus not too long ago, so I'm especially grateful for such a high compliment.
I'm glad you like what I'm doing with Arrie. I'm trying to craft a very specific personality type for her, so it's good to hear feedback about her character. Based on your synopsis, I'd say I'm doing pretty good so far.
Your kind words pertaining to the mouthplay portion of the chapter are highly valued as well. I never know when I'm being too wordy or focusing too much on mundane things, so every validating comment regarding my descriptions is a real confidence booster. Thanks for that.
I'll try to be more timely with my next update than I was with this last one.