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GH-X2 by imagin8 Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 287]
Summary:

Jack, a 'regular'-sized 17-year-old in a world now populated predominantly by humans twice that height, struggles to cope with life in a school and society built for people far larger than he will ever be.


Categories: Breasts, Teenager (13-19), Giantess, Adventure, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Muscle, New World Order, Unaware, Young Adult 20-29
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/m, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 37 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 111020 Read Count: 396279
[Report This] Published: September 12 2013 Updated: March 30 2018
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Date: March 02 2018 Title: Chapter 35: Expectation

A commotion and then Hannah pick up Jack, who, what a surprise, was the one sent flying ? I smell some kind of conspiration... I wonder if Caitlin asked one of her crony to provoke it or if she went herself to deal with Penny, but I got the feeling that our little protagonist will trade one pair of very perk breasts to the knockers of his tormentor really soon...

I wonder how the redheaded sport addict is right now... I suspect that while she may try to torture Jack some more she'll finally admit to herself that she fell something for him. In any case, I know I won't be disappointed by your work !

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: January 28 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Introduction

Yes ! GH-X2 has returned ! I can't tell you how happy I am to read a new chapter of your awesome story. Concerning the situation... I must say that Jack was very, very lucky that Caitlinn didn't notice him. If I were here, I would probably look very closely each and every Beta around to find my prey back... but perhaps that she did it the morning and grew bored or that she herself is too agitated to to do right now.

In any case, I expect something big in the library. Probably Penny, but who knows ? A certain redhead could barge in...



Author's Response:

I suspect Caitlin may have been a lot more observant on Monday, or even during Tuesday day, but by Tuesday afternoon, with school over, she could have reached the conclusion Jack's not coming back or is herself preoccupied or tired.

Then again, who's to say she didn't actually spot him, even more than once, but is simply biding her time... *mic drop*

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Date: January 30 2018 Title: Chapter 33: Affection

Wow, things are progressing quite well between Penny and Jack. I'm really glad to see them both growing as characters like that. I really feel that a girlfriend who truly loves and cares about him will do wonder for our little Beta's main character, especially when she has basically told him that she loves him the way he is and wouldn't want him to be an Alpha ! In the meantime, I would really like to see Penny talking with her newly found boyfriend's parents, I think she could help them realize that their son doesn't live in the same world they grew up. Now, the question is, will we have a battle of the century between Mama Bear Penny and Feral Wolf Caitlinn ? I suspect that the answer is a yes, but I can't wait to read it anyway ;)

Speaking of the resident red-haired Queen of the school, I can't help but feel that you present her overwhelming presence so well. Just the sight of her sneakers terrified Jack, and Delon got afraid just seeing her face hovering above the rest of the Alphas. It really gives her an aura of intimidation which makes her so much more than simply a bully. For Jack and even Delon, she seems to be more of a mythological threat than anything normal, and I find it awesome. I also can't help but notice how, when something physically bad happened to Jack when he was abducted, Caitlinn face was almost always obscured.

I really does wonder to add layer to this character. I'm thinking especially about the pool scene (which sent Alex over her friendship to help rescue Jack). For the Beta, Caitlinn was cold and emotionless, not caring at all about his suffering, and we assume it is the case, because he couldn't see her face and we follow his point of view. But we don't know how she reacted truly, and it adds this veneer of mystery, at least for me. Basically, it boil down to two simple questions :

-Does Jack knew Caitlinn as a child but forgot about her like he did Penny ? It was implied in their first encounter that Caitlinn may know him before hand, at least it was my impression reading it again recently.

-Is she in love with him but unable to express it in a healthier way ? There is several indications that it could be the case in the story, and considering their world, the very little tidbits we know about her parents and what she told about men and how she feel about them... It wouldn't surprise me that she felt sick harbouring feelings for a Beta, that she has been abused or at least used by men when she was younger and that her pouncing on Jack is both her way to express her love and her pain. She needs to sort out her feelings anyway, that's for sure.

I think I must also comment on Delon. That guy is basically the best friend everyone would love to have. He's calm, collected, cool under pressure, caring about his buddy and always willing to help as best he could. I really think that him being a solid rock for Jack will help our main character as much as Penny's love.



Author's Response:

The fact she made a point of saying she categorically liked him as a human being is a huge one. There have also been hints that she perhaps is quite fond of Betas or Beta-sized things anyway, but it's yet to be explored... might be a red herring (I've thrown in a few)!

Caitlin is, as you say, practically a supernatural force from the perspective of the Betas. It's not just that she's bigger and stronger than the other Alphas (who are in their own right supernatural-seeming) - but it's her capacity to 'go there', inflict pain, not give a damn about the consquences. Her social standing, aggressive behaviour and connections just make her this perfect storm-like package if she decides to train her sights on you. 

Your point about her face is semi-deliberate, but you've definitely given me food for thought. I've tried to portray Caitlin as someone who presents herself off as terrifying, but has glimpses of humanity, which you've speculated on. Your ideas are ones I have explored in my notes. 

As for Delon, he's an amalgamation of several traits that make him solid 'best friend' material without being a particularly well-rounded or pivotal character. Compared to Penny, he simply hasn't been explored in the same detail, as the plot hasn't required it. In addition, it has to be said that in some respects, Delon and Jack's friendship is a marriage of convenience - two Betas mostly in the same classes - they were bound to be friends even though they're not terribly alike. He's not completely sure how to help, or how to support his friend other than to try and do what's right, but he is a likeable and conscientious fella and gives 100%. He'll never let you down, and that's worth a lot.

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: December 11 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Introduction

Any hope for a new chapter before the 31st of December ? It would be a great way to end the year :) !

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: February 01 2018 Title: Chapter 34: Eruption

Well, I hadn't expected it but it's probably the best which could happen to Jake. His family knows about Penny (partially) and while he erupted at their poking, it's a reaction I can perfectly understand (I've that kind of temper myself, even without traumatic rape event). I must say I'm surprised at his Mom's insistence that he should be with a Beta girl however... Madame, where do you expect him to find one ? It's mandatory for girls in the U.S. to become Alpha, at least since your son's generation ! Get a grip on reality !

Now, I can't wait for them to actually meet Penny. But I think that this chapter foreshadow a confrontation with Caitlin, somehow. Jake is coming together, even if he hasn't realized it yet. I think that if Penny manage to protect him publicly from the redheaded's attention, we could go be sailing for some serious nightmarish stuff for our hero. I don't know why, it's my guts talking I guess...

Anyway, keep the awesome work. Also, I you could loan me a tenth of your writing skills, it would be great !



Author's Response:

The increased awareness now takes the story into interesting territory - his parents don't *know* anything about the girl, but they know Jack has a female Alpha friend - and this opens up avenues in future, even if it's just them asking about her. Up until this point they only really know Jack has Delon as a best friend, so this is a big development for them, which they'll interpret as a big positive, and maybe see as validation that Alphas and Betas get along and their boy is just fine (little do they know). 

Jack is an introverted, sensitive type anyway, so don't expect sunshine and rainbows from now on, but there is now a solid core to his self-belief; Penny has validated that he is a good person, and worthy of love and respect. Caitlin still lurks around the corner, but he has Penny and Delon both fully aware and ready to act, so it just remains to be seen what will happen next... oooooh!! 

Summary:

Two girls from different backgrounds come together only to have evil forces target them.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Fantasy, Humiliation, Slave
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 23022 Read Count: 18922
[Report This] Published: February 25 2017 Updated: July 06 2017
Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: February 19 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

We want a next chapter! I can't wait to read it, come on ! A follow up ! Please ?

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Date: December 13 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Uuh... I had totally missed this story. A shame, really, because I've read it in one go today, and I really want to learn what will happen next.

I want to know who are those dark wizards or something and what they want. I want to know what will happen to Sondra once she'll gave in and becomesWendy's familiar. I want to know how Wendy will make it work, if she'll regrow her friend/lover/pet one Sondra will be hers body, mind and soul, or if doing so would break the link between witch and familiar... I want to know so many things !

Overall, awesome story, keep going please !



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for commenting.  It means a lot.

I'm glad you are inspired to questions.  Yes, I have more story to tell and yes I will continue.  I'm really glad you're curious about the agents of darkness, cuz the next chapter is about them. You said you are a wanna be fantasy writer, so I'm really pleased you are enjoying this. 

Wendy and Sondra's relationship has only begun to be complicated.  I hope it's clear how truly deep their feelings are for each other.

Thank you again, coming from an author who's work I enjoy, your comments mean much to me.

pix

Mediation by Ecstacy Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 69]
Summary:

Born with a genetic defect that's caused him to shrink throughout his life, we follow the story of  3 1/2 inch  tall Tanner and his adoptive family consisting of his high achieving step-sister Ingrid and widowed step-mother Ivory as they try have functional lives.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Butt, Entrapment, Feet, Humiliation, Maternal, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 68463 Read Count: 138413
[Report This] Published: March 01 2017 Updated: August 09 2018
Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: January 29 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Date Night

Excellent chapter, as always ! I wonder how Blake will be around Tanner now, after the realization of what que was doing to him dawned on her. I also hope that Gail won't give up on Tanner and manage to steal his heart



Author's Response:

 Hopefully they patch things up.  And they'll be on hold for now, but this won't be the last of Gail and Tanner

Summary:

As a short man, having a tall girlfriend can be interesting.  When she can shrink you, you might need to reconsider just how much that height difference bothered you.

 

Edit: When I had this idea it was going to be a one-off with the protagonist getting crushed right after he shrinks, I never expected this to grow to a novel-length story!  Thanks to everyone for the support as I continue writing this.


Categories: Feet, Giantess, Teenager (13-19), Breasts, Butt, Couples, Crush, Entrapment, Footwear, Instant Size Change, Legwear, Mouth Play, Muscle, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m, FF/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 92513 Read Count: 159709
[Report This] Published: May 15 2017 Updated: November 27 2017
Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed starstarstarstar
Date: October 26 2017 Title: Chapter 1: The Big Dance

Hello Vintovka ! 

I'm a long term lurker who'se been reading and enjoying your story. I like the original ending (because it open ups possibilities for future stories) but I also liked a lot this bonus. As for another alternate ending, FUlda giving her ex-boyfriend to Anni could actually be great, to end on a "happier" note... or she could give him and Anni to Gina to make "ants" babies ; ) !

 

Anyway, keep the good work !



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!  I expected someone to request one with Anni since she was sort of a fan favorite, and a happier ending with her makes sense.  Stay tuned!

MAJOR/minor by NotSirk Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 115]
Summary:

Izzellah Ivory struggles to cope as a minority in a world of superior beings.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Gentle, Humiliation, Muscle, Slave
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 20 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 99115 Read Count: 29514
[Report This] Published: October 11 2017 Updated: May 18 2018
Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 31 2017 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: MAJOR/perspective

Another awesome chapter ! I can't wait to meet Randalf and his wife, it would be kind of cool to have their vision of how an actual functional couple works between MAJORS and minors. Plus he looks like an awesome character and so does his wife. A MAJOR actually supporting her minor's mate aspirations would be quite interesting, and her experience could make for a great addition. And her age also means that she's bound to know so much about history, first hand... I want to learn more about her !

That musclehead and his girlfriend are sooo annoying... I love it ! It was a damn good piece of propaganda for MAJORS, but hey, at least it's mostly harmless for minors, so... Also, Damn, Sabrina is a lot more stronger than I thought she was. It makes me a litte afraid of what Shannon could do... Well, snaping an arm as if it was nothing is probably already some crazy shit, considering how tough MAJORS are. great use of this character ^^

Poor Ignacio can't catch a breath. Just talking about the Dark Age really hurt him, he clearly care about his daughter. He may not be the most reliable guy out there, but I don't think that Izzy would trade him for any other parent... and not Lisa's mom, that's for sure. For fuck sake, what's the deal with the Watermeine, they're clearly overprotective. threatening to call the cops on Iggy ? That's not how you win Izzy's affection, Madame !

But damn it, now I want to see how Alejandro and Lindsey would fare at Winton High ! I may do a special on that, one day. Operative word being may :p

PS : I shouldn't tell you that, but you may want to follow's Dinner-Kun Deviantart gallery in the coming days/weeks :p



Author's Response:

Randalf and Summer will probably show up briefly since Izzellah made it one of her goals, but they probably won't be focused on. I like adding characters to make the world feel lived in but I also just try to focus on a core few to not overwhelm people. I wouldn't blame people for forgetting most of the names. Only the important ones matter

MAJORS are pretty strong. There's a reason for that you may be able to infer. That being said adrenaline is still a thing. I doubt Sabrina could mimic that feat of strength at will. Shannon?! Who knows? She's terrifying!

Linda Watermiene is just an average concerned MAJOR parent. She's done nothing wrong. Ignacio is a negligent father who should be reported to minor protection services! 

Thanks for the comment. Alejandro and Lindsey at school? I'd read it!

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Date: March 11 2018 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12: what/MAJORS/want

Well; Pix said it all, didn't he ? The last chapters have been a delight because of how insightful they have been. I can't help but notice that Tier 3 doesn't seem to be so happy with their lot, we've got three now (Brenda, Samantha and the one of the M/m one-shot in my random factory thread) and their lives aren't as awesome as other MAJORS think they are. Sometimes, being the apex predator can be tiring !

A little sad to see Summer Bradbury going all domination on her little husband, especially since Randalf clearly still sees her as a mostly positive force in his life. I hope she'll get her act together and realise that as small as Minors are, there is no need for all this violence and humiliation (if it isn't thought after by the Minor) for her to be the overpowering part of her family.



Author's Response:

Yeah being tier 3 may not be such a walk in the park. Eill Brenda come into her role? Who knows? I'm interested in Samantha, she seems more comfortable as a tier 3.

This is one very specific situation that portrays Summer as an antagonist, mostly for humor. She's being forceful but Randalf's being a bit of a coward. They both love each other and he knows he's in no real danger. Don't think he doesn't have a few kinks in bed either. It's all a game they play!

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Date: May 18 2018 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20: MAJOR/minor

NotSirk, you rascal ! How can you end this story on such a high note ! Damn, it was awesome, the penultimate chapter was so great, I couldn't help but read it at work ! And I'll read it again and again and again and again and... well, you get it.

 

I loved all the characters. yes, even Mei, in the end, who seems to have some serious chip on her shoulder, considering what she said in Izzy's "mental fortress" when it came to other makig mistakes if she isn't here... but now I want to know why Izzy hinted that she was her first in the SPecial ! Damn it !

Seeing Brenda's loveable attitude was so great, I ended rooting for her seriously... I wonder if we'll ever see a glimpse of her future, she deserves to find happiness, after how great a character she turned out to be. Not like Romeo "I fall for boobies" Watermiene, or Rebecca "I can't distract anyone if I don't use sex" Swann ! Kidding, I loved them too, and Lisa was the best best friend ever. 

Don't worry for the Special, we have time, I want to explore the whole first day of school and afterward for Alejandro, so at least a mont and a half more of story, I8 would say, and then I would like to write some unrelated stories in ly Random Stories Factory, so I'm pretty sure you'll get to write some, don't worry :p. It's more important that you get healed and well on your feet. I need my dose of story by NotSirk and your drawings !

I noticed the little description Izzellah's perfect minor material for boyfriend, strangely, it reminded me of somone, but I wonder who :p ! 

Anyway, get well and thanks for the story !



Author's Response:

Well to answer your question about Mei. Not to tease but I had a bit of an epilouge planned involving the true results of the game if you paid attention. I was purposefully a little vague but there is a clear winner. I didn't have time to do it though sadly. I like the story being open ended on that though. I trust you to make inferences. Thanks for the support and reviews.

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: December 01 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise

First thing first... I love your story ! It's one of my favourite, with GH-X2. I just like NWO stories which go out of their way to truly flesh out a world (especially non-post apocalypse ones).

Now, time to dive into what I want to say concerning the world and then the characters.

1. I can't help but feel that the MAJORS are the result of a super-soldier experiment gone wrong. First because of the Dark Age mystery. If Mei can go out saying that minors evolved through the centuries because they were hunted down, the inability of the MAJORS to even talk about the Dark Age is quite suspect. Furthermore, their abilities (size, strength, low-level psionic powers) and behaviour (highly competitive, prone to resort to violence) really scream "super-weapons" for me. I wouldn't be surprised to learn that if minor were not exterminated proper, it was because some MAJOR leader discovered that, when bonded, minors had the ability to "tame" MAJORS, because so far, the bonded giants seems far calmer and less prone to violence.

2.Excepting the most vile, the Winton and Titzilla for the most part (but also Gloria to some extent, for her sneaky and underhanded behaviour), I find all the other MAJORS to be potentially good for Izzy's personal growth. The poor girl was in a bad position : too sheltered to truly understand her world, too independant to fit into the mold that minor are expected to be, which saddens me because she should have been better prepared. Then again, it's already hard to educate children in our world, so I won't judge her father in hers.

So far, if Izzy has to bond with someone at least for a time to truly learn what it is and be able to go above that, Mei is really my favourite. While she uses her abilities to gauge Izzy, and all MAJORS do the same really, she is the most respectful of her. I don't think she's Endgame, but I really think that both Izzy and her could only grow as characters if they were togethor for a time. Mabel's sister is also a strong contender, if only because I want to learn more about Tier 3 and the feedback her and Izzy now have.

Bonus : if (when?) other independant minor characters are introduced, I expect to see a lot of tensions from the MAJORS. Especially if Izzy and one of the newcomers beging to be attracted to each others. The dynamic of the story will become even more complew, and I like it.

Overall... Keep going strong !



Author's Response:

Thanks for the praise but I'm nowhere near GH-X2 level. Will it ever comeback and finish? I was one of the Jack x Caitlin shippers. I know it was abusive, but Penny was too indecisive and passive. At least Caitlin has passion and clearly wanted Jack! Even if Penny or maybe even a normal girl ultimately would've been better for him. But enough about that.

Super soldier is a little too comic book for me but overall your theroies pretty close. Like Pix close which means I have another one of you on my ass now! :P I like the word "tame" That doesn't mean ANYTHING! i just.....like the word *wink* I wasn't winking! I had something in my eye! *wink* 

Izzy has a tough journey ahead of her. Highschool! Will she make it?! With luck and good friend by her side she can accomplish anything! Or you know whatever it's not a big deal. She's sheltered and independent but its just life. Not the doomsday scenario it might look like from the outside. Even if worse comes to worst she'll end up out of school but finding success online or something. 

I don't really know who she'll end up with or if she'll bond at all. At this point I don't know what a satisfying pairing will be if pairing is even satisfying. I mean Sabrina's the obvious setup but their relationships nowhere near that level. So who knows I'm actually interested in opinions on this as the story progresses. Mei seems like a good candidate but she's also pretty well "Manipulative" but not in a malicious way but I still don't think Izzy would like being controlled like that if she ever became aware of it. It's anyone's game.

So thanks for the comment and the support! More chapters coming at some point right?

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: January 01 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise

Well, a special story with Alejandro and Lindsey in High School (probably at Winton) can only happen after at least one year has passed for Izzy so, you know what to do to read it : write MOAR content ! :p

Joke aside, i'll already try to finish Dance with Fire before writing anything else ^^

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: January 25 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise

Hey NotSirk, quick question... Is this picture from your tumblr how you imagine Mei ? Because if so, I can understand why Izzy would be drooling all over her despite herself, haha !

https://sirksome.tumblr.com/post/169087906414/welovemusculargirls-isnt-she-gorgeous



Author's Response:

I didn't think of it at the time, but yeah that's probably close to what Mei looks like. That's most likely a slightly above average look and fitness level of most MAJORS. 

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Date: April 13 2018 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16: DARK/age

I know that Iggy is against it but... I would really like Izzy and Mei screwing around, if only because I hope that we would get a glimpse of a less guarded Mei. That MAJOR probably need to let loose a lot from time to time, with how cold and composed she is all the time. Is it wrong that I want her screaming under Izzellah's caresses ?

Ps: I've noticed some strange mistakes in the form of the text, possibly because of an error on the site or something, you should perhaps change them NotSirk.

 



Author's Response:

Mei x Izzy is strangely popular, or maybe it's more like a few people commenting the same thing repeatedly. I do find it strange since I write Mei to be more robotic and blatantly manipulative. Spouting MAJOR propoganda, showing up at convenient times, basically threatening to beat the shit out of Sabrina! (That is what she originally planned btw. Mei's 10ft tall, Sabrina's 7ft and hasn't hit puberty. She was gonna destroy her! Y'know how Alaric punched Sab through a tree cause he's like 18 and buff and an adult? Yeah that would've been the second time if Meia and Sabrina had fought!) So I'm very interested that people like that pairing.

What mistakes? Besides my horrible American spelling and grammar? 

 

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: December 16 2017 Title: MAJOR/minor

Just remembering, because it seems fitting. If the Special chapter is set in the beginning of summer (which I think), it's happening up to six months after Dance with Fire (which is in the early days of winter); by that point, Shannon will have shapen up nough for ALejandro to consider going to New Orleans. Yup, that's a spoiler, but it was a given haha ! By the way, Izzy knowing who Shannon is just like that will great chagrin Alejandro. except him to be extra-snarky with any remarks Shannon could do about it ^^

Also, if you ever end using Alejandro in the "minor's bond-world", I've realized I've never described him, so here is how he would look : almost exactly the same, except that he has his two arms and that his skin on the left side of his body looks cracked, kind of like a windows or a glass could be, the way to represent the loss of his arm in his mind :)



Author's Response:

I'll take this into account. Kinda surprised Alejandro would be upset about that. Shannon's probably the world's tallest billionaire so I figure Izzy would've at least heard of her or maybe seen her on TV. No plans to use the bond world but nothing's guaranteed.

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: February 20 2018 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10: MEI'S/game

Such a tease ! Izzy has a very packed week ahead of herself... but if I'm not wrong, she'll have the week-end for herself, which could be great ! I also like the art, it has to be said ! I hope your computer get fixed soon, so we can have more of your work to peruse !



Author's Response:

Sorry for the short chapter but I was under a bit of a time constraint! Don't worry Izzy has a film to watch, a person to find, a match to see, and a game to win! Lots for her to do. 

Thanks for the kind words on the art. I am eternally grateful! I know my art's not the worst in the world but I know it's far from great as well. I can only hope to improve as time goes on. 

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: December 17 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise

Oh, he wouldn't be really upet. More like a "Oh come on!" moment since he said that he hadn't read SHannon's bio because her products were not targeting minors. Expect some kind of "She spent a whle year in a High School full of MAJORS, shes bound to have learnt some useless things" snarky moments ^^.

Reviewer: Kurogane335 Signed
Date: April 13 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A minor/Surprise

Well, I've seen this one "A sickening pain buried itself in the pit of her dljdkdjdkjkdjjstomach." and that one : "

Yes,so much help. Didn’t you knock down all his tools trying to climb the shelf

ddyesterday?”

But I think it may be formating error or something.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback. I'll be looking over all my chapters in the next week or so to make adjustments.