In a world where size determines what kind of person you are, what happens when an innocent person ends up the wrong size?
You know the best part about writing in the first person is all the witty banter you can add to the story and have it be totally natural.
Man. I am really loving this story. Sorry for review bombing btw.
I'll happily take any and all reviews lol. Glad you're enjoying it so much
"If you can manage to imagine all that first off props to you"
I can! thank you very much, but only because of the kick ass descriptions you gave me earlier.
I'm loving this stories focus on how people would handle someone else shrinking.
With most gts stories its either enslavement, death, or pity. However, you have characters treating the main like an actual person, and learing to live with his new condition.
There are not many stories that explore giantesses from this angle.
The plot Thickens!! *insert dramatic Music*
I rather liked this chapter. Nothing like a good old fashion 'honey I shrunk the kids' style near vore to end this arc of the story.
I wonder what kind of girl Kari really is? Oh I so hope you give me a hint.
In a world where shrunken clones called YouPets are sold as servants and toys, a young woman takes the phrase “identity crisis” to the extreme by purchasing a copy of the one person whose desires and fears she knows more deeply than anyone else: herself.
This is interesting. I've only ever read one other giantess story where the tiny was the same person as the giantess.
Overall, great read. I hope you'll forgive me for not going into detail, I seem to have run out of ways to praise your work. ;D.
I suppose you can be forgiven this once. Thanks very much for the review.
Ash has been waiting for her friends to arrive all morning, but just as they arrive she is struck by a fast acting genetic disorder which reduces its victims to the size of a cockroach.
Based off of a 'New World Order' style concept where certain people are genetically susceptible to sudden shrinkage, these people being immediately stripped of their common rights and privileges are reduced to basically sub-human property for whoever finds them.
::This is likely to be quite a long story for me as 1: i'm enjoying writing it in detail, and 2: there's going to be quite a lot of body play and each segment is likely to get its own chapter.::
Hope you like it ^_^
You were right to delete that review. What kind of idiot doesn't know what converses are?
As for the story...
Your mastery of explaining how pathetic the tinies are never ceases to amaze. Lets not forget about the use of fear either. You can make a simple girl seem like a world destrying monster with just a few words (it takes me two paragraphs).
"A few tears stung at her eyes as she truly registered how pathetic she had become, reduced to running scared and naked beneath her own table to avoid being stepped on by a pair of dirty, sandalled feet."
The above sentence deserves extra praise for capturing everything I've mentioned.
ha, i never know how to respond to awesome reveiws without sounding like some jibbering pleb lol :P
Really glad you're feeling the atmosphere of the story :) Hoping to continue on the same veign with the coming updates! Giving a sense of epic disproportion and helplessness >:)
You are truly a master of descriptive writing. Your stories keep bringing me back over and over again.
My god, see what you've done! you've made me an addict.
Mwahaha :P Thats how its done, give them a taste, then ramp up the game ;)
Dont worry, not too long until the next chapter, i'm just getting my head round how to convincingly reduce the girl's tiny friend into the girl's favourite new toy hehe
Apologize for the late review. RL has been stressful, plus I was involved in that little squabble in the chatbox.
As for the story. I'd have to say the use of a boardgame is a nice touch. Ashley now must fight, or rather play for her own survival.
It'll be fun to see how this works out.
Also, I'm super excited for Emma's interactions with Ashley. Nothing would be more destructive to Ashley's already crushed spirit than to be used by Emma, her former best friend.
Brutal and Beautiful as usual Doll, I'll see you next chapter.
Heyas, Sorry i didn't respond to this sooner, my stupid Outlook didn't give the notice email...
I didn't realise there had been a squabble in the chat box, i think i've only used that thing like... 3 times? Too many ego's and contradictory characters knocking about half the time for my taste. I just like having fun writing hehe =P Hope your RL has calmed down for you though ^_^
You've got the "play to live" thing right, after-all, what good is a shrinker that doesn't keep you entertained, too much hassle! Emma will get her turn, the others just need to get her a little more used to the idea that it's essentially what Ashley is for now ;)
Thanks for reading ^_^ Next chapter is up soon! (Been really wrestling over what chapter to do next, Goldilocks, or this, but i think i've chosen this for the next update! )
This will be Graphic. Abandon all hope all ye who enter here.
I vaguely recall a conversation between you and I about the nature of this story. It was a while ago, so I don't know if you remember.
I anticipate that this will be another masterpiece from you.
I remember that conversation very well, that was this story. I was going to pm you about it, but i'll send you an email later.
Honestly Mr.E your foot content is probably some of the best on this site. Don't get me wrong, there are plenty of awesome writers, but when it comes to feet you gotta be in the top ten.
The fourth paragraph of this chapter was especially great. You covered virtually every angle of the in-shoe scenario.
Thank you!!! I try to be very descriptive and paint a picture of what the tiny is going through.
After reading that, I'm sad to say that these past 2 chapters were about 90% of the foot material in this story. From now on it's going to be mostly booty.
Somewhere within a secret hi-tech facility, a young woman is given the chance and privilege of playing god. She is given free reigns over a seemingly endless supply of small people of various of ages and sizes, races and cultures, reduced to objects of experiment and subject to her every whim, to be treated however she liked and encouraged to use the advanced technology of the facility as creative means of psychological and physical torture.
Then she meets Matthew in the midst of her victims, and a curious exchange of ideas between the two begins.
"This is basically going to be torture porn" my cup-o-tea.
Oh, hey, I forgot to respond on the review above to the Egiantess thing. Sorry I missed it yesterday since I only logged in today to check this, but I'll try next time, even though I'm from Europe and it means you meet at 3:00AM here.
Good intro. Got me pumped for what is to come.
I do hope that the killings will get more personal. Theres nothing like a cruel giantess getting to know her captives then brutally murdering them in fitting ways.
Btw. We writers meet in the Egiantess.com chatroom every sunday at 9:00PM eastern time. You should come. :D
There will be both of them. Chapters with victims she's been keeping for a long time, but others where hundred namless people die for her pleasure and all that. It'll kinda be episodic after the first few chapters, each dealing with different scenarios.
My main objective in this story is to try and experiment at creating interesting characters and scenes, advance as a writer basically.
*evil laugh*
Shese so direct in everything she does. Not even a little hesitation.
Also props on having a red haired giantess; gingers don't get enough love these days.
As I've said (maybe not here, I think it was in gts city), I really wanted to step it up on the 'violence' and 'sadism' aspects of this story. For that, my giantess has to be in a certain state of mind where she doesn't hesitate unless it's deliberate.
And I've struggled to decide between having her undescribed in appearance again, or give her a face this time. Since I went with the latter, I thought a ginger would be cool, something you don't often see here as you pointed out.
*insert picture of M. Night Shyamalan here*
WHAT A TWIST!!
Such an unexpected turn of events to give the main character such a detailed and sophisticated background. I felt that the way you fleshed out the main character was a brilliant idea. His past experiences combined with his admiration for this killer of a women will undoubtedly make for an intriguing read.
Additional praise is rewarded for adding a 'gentle' side to the giantess. Most people either make a giantess 100% cruel or 100% gentle, however by tossing this ridgid dichotomy out the window you have succeeded where scores of authors have failed. You have managed to create a cruel/gentle mix.
Looking foward to this one Ifcfan. I may have to step up my own game now because of this chapter.
Well, I do hope that the rest of my giantess writing 'career' doesn't turn out like Shaymalan's post-Sixth Sense directing one. :D
Going for a detailed and sophisticated background for my main characters has always been my primary goal in this story. I want this to be kind of a 'psychological' story dealing with the mindstates of my characters as much as their actions. I plan to explore those sides much deeper in future chapters.
And I'm glad you've picked up on the gentle side of her, it has got everything to do with how she views the tinies, how she perceives her own status and how her past has shaped her personality, which you'll see when I get to it.
I'm glad that you think I've done a good job with this. Honestly, I don't think I've ever experienced such a rush of reviews for a single chapter. I must be on the right track I guess!
This is growth story that takes place in the world of the anime Kill La Kill. Read as Satsuki terrorizes a city to show the world why they should consider her their new goddess. (May contain spoilers from the Kill La Kill series)
(Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.)
I don't normally read or review fanfic, but I made an exception in this case because you were responsible for some of my favorite pictures on the Booru.
Anyways, onto the story. I thought you represented Satsuki well here. She was kind of an ice queen in the show, but we never got the satisfaction of seeing her go full bitch. Here I get to see the Satsuki I desperately hoped to see in the show.
If there is one critique I have it would be that the amount of detail is rather low. By this I mean that you are not making full use of descriptive writing. For example, When satsuki's breasts came down you could have gone into a little more detail about the exact nature of the destruction they caused. You could have explained how the force and mass of her breasts affected the ground as tthey landed, or what kind of buildings and/or people were beneath her breasts.
All and all, this is good. Keep up the good work my friend. I will be watching you closely from now on, both on Giantessworld and Booru.
Thanks for the review and glad you enjoy my collage work and thanks for even reading my story. I will keep in mind everything you wrote in your review for my future works, I will attempt to take full advantage of my descriptive writing and flesh it out more and not only to improve my writing, but to create something more entertaining (which is my reason for writing stories). Unfortunatly I already have the final part of this story written, so I might not apply this advice for the final part, but I will definatly use it for my future works.
Not bad for a first story. You appear to have a working understanding of grammar and spelling which is more than I can say for other first timers. Now onto the critiques...
My recommendation for this story is simple. Make the story longer, and add paragraphs. Some detail would also be nice.
Rather than explicitly tell us his exact height in comparison to the world around him you should attempt to 'create a sense of scale'; or use descriptive writing to create a mental picture for the reader to get into. The best way to do this is to tell us how the character fits into this now gigantic world.
Here is some questions I would have asked myself while writing this...
If there is one piece of advise I want you to take to heart it is this...
The key to writing is to simply write what you want the reader to see and understand.
Cheers mate, and good luck. I hope to see another chapter from you. :D
If you have trouble understanding what the reader needs to see, simply re-read your work as if you didn't write it.
If something you wanted the reader to understand isn't there then add it, and if something is focused on too much then reduce the amount of words about it.
Sasha has watched attack of the fifty foot woman one too many times.
Its good to see a nice short story done by a seasoned author nowadays. most experienced authors are too busy writing multi-chapter wordfests to put out something like this so I congratulate you on writing this.
The story itself is well done. Punishing the adoptive sister is not something I have ever seen on this site. I also liked the ending, it reminds me of my own fantasies.
An honest employee of the Techilogic Corporation sets out to investigate the new widespread use of the shrink ray, only to uncover darker revelations about the business he’ll soon wish had stayed buried.
Hmm, this is a lot of information for a first chapter. Are we looking at a potentially new long story from Jacksmith.
I noticed the references to A little Blackmail. How glorious
-10 stars for lack of Honda Civic content.
+10 stars for referencing Carly
+10 stars because its a Jacksmith story
sorry for the shit review. I just got back from class and only had time to skim
Good to hear from ya, man. I'm honestly not positive how long this will be yet, but I know it will be at least 10 chapters.
Good thing my triumphs just barely doubled my offenses, or otherwise I might not've come away with 10 stars! In my defense, I'm saving the Civics for whenever I too make a sequel parody story.
Emma needs something strong to help shift her mornign hangover but with a distinct dislike for coffee, she decides to try adding a little something to help cover up the bitter taste.
~ Another short story for my Danza Macabra Series. This was to get me back into the swing of writing after a loooong patch of disinterest for writing gts stuff ~
I love this, soooo much. You see, There's this coffee shop I usually visit before attending my morning lectures and what you just wrote perfectly describes a girl I always see there.
I'll never look at her the same way again thanks to you. ;D
Mwahaha you will be able to imagine now sipping your drink in the morning one day wondering why the place seems remarkably empty and the girl looking over at you almost expectantly, occasionally licking her lips with her delicate pink tongue and just as you are about to go see if she is thinking of hitting on you *bamph!* you find yourself free-falling and landing in your own drink, the girl skipping towards you with a delighted smile on her face as she picks up and once more licks her lips gazing down at you and taking her first gulp... ;)
