Reviewer: Nhencjnde Signed
Date: April 03 2024
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue I: An Eclectic Family
Wow. After
finishing reading the six parts you've written so far, I can safely say that I
haven't felt this hooked on a story with GTS/shrink content in a while on this
site. The last of the stories I remember reading on Giantessworld that gave me
that same feeling was, ironically, Olfactory Odyssey by Jakeunderfoot, followed
by Bridget's R&R universe, seemingly endless The Underfoot Railroad by kenny224,
and most of the carnage stories, but mainly The Beaumonts.
Although in
the prologue, many may have felt lacking in GTS/shrink content, in my case I
was entertained from start to finish getting to know the characters, their
personalities, dynamics and the universe that little by little you have not
been presenting.
I admit
that the main reason I enjoyed the prologue without feeling it heavy or boring
was because of the foot content, mainly due to the fetish of the protagonist
Nameless, and his constant imaginary scenarios and introspections about his
family's feet, being the main attraction that this types of stories for me; but
even without that content, the other elements, such as the past of Nameless's
mother, Morgan, as well as the relationship between him and his twin sister
Frigg, his older sister Titania (beautiful name in my opinion), his adoptive
sister Houseki and her younger half-sister Nahla, I really liked them.
I loved
each of the characters' personalities and how each one relates to Nameless.
From the solemn and calm Houseki, the childish and vivid Nahla, the arrogant
and mean Frigg, the serious and diligent Titania, and the loving and caring
mother Morgan.
From
everything we know about them so far, I would say that my favorite character
would be Houseki (I'm very happy to know that she was the one who won the first
poll), followed by Tatiana, Morgan, Nahla and in the end Frigg.
Let's say
that, in these types of stories, I really like the characters with Houseki's
appearance and personality.
I also
really liked how you have presented the world to give rise to the name and the
problems of Nameless regarding his magical powers and the little use that his
profession has in a changing world, a change incited by one of his sisters;
along with how you proposed at the beginning of the prologue, Morgan's
expedition to some ancient ruins as a mere extra element to learn more about
the character's life, to continue developing that element as the origin of two
of the Nameless sisters and ending as the event where Morgan found the object
that would trigger Nameless's size reduction event, who, motivated by his
personality and situation, hatched a plan to get it. Quite clever and creative.
Furthermore,
all the other elements raised in the story seem just as interesting to me as
Nameless's “little” adventure. I would like to know more about those ancient
ruins beneath a kingdom, the wishes that Morgan made to the genie, Morgan's
affairs as a court mage, the character of Jafar, as well as explore more of the
world and its socio-political situation, taking into account that although the
diversity of species in the kingdom has allowed characters like Houseki not to
have suffered discrimination, coupled with being the adopted daughter of one of
the important people in the kingdom, if Yashima demonstrates anything, it is
that discrimination and racial prejudices They still exist among certain
sectors of the population, or at least that is what I believe.
I'd also
like to point out that I enjoyed how you brought up Houseki's feet with an
aspect of her personality: her insecurity towards them.
I thought
it was another clever touch to continue reading about feet without needing to
have Nameless around fantasizing.
I liked
reading Houseki's thoughts as she reflects on her feet and it made me imagine
how Nameless's other family might have some connection or thoughts towards them
own feet.
I imagine
Tatiana reflecting on her tired feet after a hard day of training or guard,
thinking how much she is grateful to Nameless for the massages and how much she
would like him to be near her whenever she wants one.
For Nahla,
I imagine there's a reason she enjoys being always barefoot; perhaps as a way
to feel free no matter how dirty her feet get.
I don't
think of any deep aspect for Morgan, beyond enjoying a foot massage from her son
Nameless.
It's Frigg
who has me a little intrigued by the matter. I doubt that she has any thoughts
on her feet, but after having read a paragraph insinuating that her arrogant
personality towards her twin brother may be hiding something else (that is if I
read correctly and the translation of the text was correct), I I've imagined
that maybe deep down, she feels some kind of affection towards Nameless, but
she's ashamed of it and tries to hide.
In fact,
after reading that Morgan's shoes that Nameless hid in his room were visible to
anyone who entered his room, I imagined Frigg entering, discovering the shoes
and, putting two and two together, concluding that her brother has a foot
fetish, which would cause her to think of her feet as a way to get close to
Nameless again.
Just random
thoughts based on what little we know of the characters so far and my
preferences.
I have
nothing against authors who prefer to present the setting of their stories as a
mere decoration for the action to happen, as Micro Maverick does with his story
Insole-In-Law, where the main attraction is the main character being turned
into your sister-in-law's template, but I prefer stories whose construction of
characters as well as the context of them and their surroundings took their
time in posing and developing them before getting to the action.
Another
point that I find incredible is the effort you put into writing the scenes from
Nameless's shrunken perspective. I found each of those scenes ingenious, well
described and beautifully narrated. I can't even imagine how much it must have
cost you to conceive and carry them out, but the result is worthy of
admiration.
I think
what I liked most about those scenes, besides little Nameless at the feet of a
normal-sized person, is also having the perspective of the normal-sized
character, like the scene where Houseki stretched and played with her feet,
almost as an unconscious act, but for Nameless it was an event of apocalyptic
proportions.
Excited to
know the outcome of Nameless at the feet of his younger sister. Will he be able
to get her attention? Will he get trapped inside Houseki's shoes? Would he end
up letting go of her foot? Many scenarios and only one outcome.
When it
comes to the character to choose as Titania's fiancée, I have thought about the
type of personality and the possibility of knowing more about the region where
said character comes from.
Although a
character's personality is surely not linked to their race, I have imagined the
Frog Girl as a rather rough and tomboyish character, the Sylph with a relaxed
and carefree personality, like a kind of hippie girl under the effects of a
mild hallucinogen, and the Succubus as a playful and flirtatious woman with
sexy mannerisms and gestures.
At first I
was going to vote for the succubus, because I liked the idea of a girl with
horns and a long, thin tail with the tip in the shape of an inverted heart,
with that personality mentioned above, contrasting with Titania's personality,
and knowing more about the place of origin of the succubus, Abyssal Reach,
caught my attention; but after thinking about it a little, a Sylph with a more
relaxed and soft personality attracts my attention, even if I admit that
knowing the Skyward Capital does not attract my attention much.
Excited to
know the results of the polls and to read the next chapter of this incredible
story. Although I like the unconscious action, and the scenario you have
established so that Nameless's family does not suspect his absence, I like the
idea of one of his sisters finding him and initiating an interaction between
her and Nameless.
What I
enjoyed most about Olfactory Odyssey was precisely how the protagonist's
sisters interact with him in his tiny size, like in that last chapter where
Jake ends up “voluntarily” swallowing food and waste straight from Nicky's
feet.
Although,
if you don't have anything planned like one of Nameless's relatives finding it
in his new size, it still seems like an incredible story to me.
I hope the
translation is understandable. English is not my native language and sometimes
I can skip a detail or two.
Author's Response: Hi Nhencjnde,
Thank you so much for detailing all of your thoughts about the story up to now. I definitely consider the comparison to those great works as high praise. Especially Olfactory Odyssey and The Underfoot Railroad. As I find myself coming back to those stories often.
The prologue being interesting to the reader was definitely a concern. So I’m glad to hear that the story was entertaining, the characters being alive and distinct, and the fetish material that I was able to put in those chapters were able to tide you over. Getting the reader, such as you, interested in the lore, engaged in the character’s and their aspects (such as Houseki’s insecurity) and brainstorming your own ideas of how the other family members would play out, and making conjectures based off of that tells me that I’ve written a story that inspires imagination.
The specifics that you’ve delineated related to each character, I will not say if I will be doing what you’ve speculated…but I think that you will enjoy it. As for the shoes that accidentally were misplaced, and fell out of the book shelf, I will say that someone will have seen the shoes by next chapter.
As for the main scenes that probably constitute the interest of my story, as a piece of giantess fiction, I will say that I probably wouldn’t be able to write such descriptive pieces if I didn’t enjoy them. I do like depicting multiple perspectives in my story when it comes to a single scene, but if there comes a scene where there is more to be gained from “less” and “mystery” then I might limit myself to a singular perspective in that scene. We’ll see if it ends up happening in any of the future chapters.
Also, you are in luck. Sylph won the poll, so I’ll get to writing the chapter “soonish” and we’ll get to see her a little bit in the upcoming chapter.
Finally, as for the part about aware sister interactions with their brother, scenes that I also quite enjoyed in Olfactory Odyssey, that is something I’ve been considering as well.
There are plans for it to happen eventually, in multiple forms and varying levels of awareness, but I don’t think that I’ll be able to write interactions that are similar to Jakeunderfoot’s story until much later. And that is really due to the narrative I have planned and the constraints of the setting that I will be hinting at in future chapters.
I think that I addressed everything in your review. Once again thank you so much for taking the time to read, review, and rate. I was quite happy to read your thoughts.