I'm enjoying this story, with a few reservations. These, above all:

1) Your character prides himself on his uniqueness/intelligence/quirkiness, but is clearly no different, at bottom, from the jocks (& while we're at it, why is it always the jocks?) who bullied him in high school. There's no doubt in my mind that if he had the power, he'd use it in exactly the same way as those who beat him up and humiliated him. So he comes off as nasty, woman-hating & self-deluding. Also: "Salinger and Hemingway!" 

2) I think you're a writer who's competent (and insightful?) enough to understand that a girl's first reaction on seeing -- and not only spotting, but recognizing -- a shrunken man, in nature, would include feels of deep and profound shock. If she's human, she would be unsettled. In your story, she reacts in the regular storybook way, still: she's mildly surprised, and then rolls him up in her sock. Typical. And she does this because he was a snaily, perverted little stringy, scrawny-armed teenager-tutor when she knew him at his normal size. The suspension of disbelief here, for me, is two miles high. 

You're probably capable enough to take this story to a higher level. In any case, I think it's your best one -- though I think your range is too limited, and you're over-specializing in the old high school & college scenarios. For your next story, maybe choose something a little out of the way (you're probably a guy in his early or mid-twenties, so it makes sense that you're fantasizing about the world you just left or are living, but whatever, just my 2 cents).

Wonderful concept, kudos for taking on historical stuff, and great, blue ribbon writing, even though I'm not much for growth and physical violence (for the most part, shrinking and psychological violence is more my thing). 

Anyway, it doesn't matter much, because just I'm happy to see any kind of story set in Rome -- as far as I know, it hasn't been done yet. (There was some writer awhile back, also a growth fan, who wrote some outrageous apocalyptic story about Lucrezia Borgia -- bloodthirsty, also (and blood-hungry, too, I guess)). But that's all that comes to mind.  

Best, scrymgeour 

It's fast-moving, definitely. Much faster than your other stuff.

Maybe stay away from over-explaining things? With this kind of direct, quick and physical violence, make your descriptions gleam like gunmetal, be hard and snappy and severe. Some comparisons, like the tongue to a 'pink rug' or toes to 'doughy hooks' draw me away from the story, whereas they should pull me deeper and deeper into it (actually, in parts, this story reads very much like someone else on this site, not in content, which is definitely yours, but in style). 

Was about to make a 'Wow, really great debut'-type comment, but then clicked your tag and saw you've been at it for a while. 

Like the sense of humor in this story, and the old-adult-vid setup. 

Seconded (or fifthed, I guess). I'm really hoping for more. 

Good concept and great execution. Love the doubling of roles, slave and goddess, in the servantwoman, the mix of erotic stimuli, the setting, the charged atmosphere (the palace room itself feels as steamy as the inside of Sitre's mouth), and the intensity with which you see it all.

I'll have to stop by this place more often, now. Well done.

Responding to the reviewer below, who said, ''I hoped for some different kind of story...with a all loving realtionship and no domination": What a petty excuse to give a story you admittedly liked a half-star rating. Totally unjustified, and ignoring the fact that it's more than possible to show a loving gf/bf connection based on power dynamics (reflected in the vast difference in physical size between the lovers) and the fact that domination needs submission in order to be what it is (and that often in writing stories like that you can represent this D/s relationship in a playful, loving, and realistic way without compromising the violent and domineering side of things in the least) -- ignoring all that, you have to let the author finish the story before expressing your disappointment with the path it's taking. 

For what it's worth, I'm loving this story. Only suggestion I'd make, from an author's perspective, would be (in your next story) to consider taking a more detached authorial role. Third person, no present tense except in dialogue, and finding a way to develop and deepen your characters through dialogue and actions (in fetish stories I think plot's far less important than character, and that's natural enough).

Keep going though. I loved your ideas in Rachelle's Sweat Pads, too. Really top notch stuff.

Well, our tiny hero is deeply, permanently f---d at this point, but I'm loving the narrative so far, and the brief interludes. I'm very happy to suspend my disbelief that a stewardess's personal hygiene could decline so rapidly from 'good' to 'inner ring of hell', because wow is it fun to see him pay his way to freedom through the most abject kind of slavery. 

You're in the zone, right now, and this story has some nice energy to it. Really excited to see how you continue this. Hope it goes on for a while, and that you write some sequels or prequels.