Reviewer: FrequentlyImprobable Signed
Date: September 04 2022
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Sorry for leaving so many constant reviews, but this story is really well written! I think your writing skills definitely got a chance to shine more with this most recent chapter. I've always found writing to be easier the more drastic the size difference is, you can be a lot more dynamic and descriptive and not worry about making them sound too big or intimidating. I'd be curious as to what your writing process is, I just kinda jot down a basic outline of the chapter, then I just revise and flesh it out until it sounds somewhat decent.
As for what happens next, that's ultimately up to you, but I'd love to see more stuff with Rachel, since we got a small taste of her at that massive size. I'm glad you said you're focusing the story mostly on her and Lio, the teasing and stuff with Ava is obviously really fun, but I think their sibling relationship is more unique than most stuff you see in giantess writings.
The introduction of the indestructible house helps a lot with transporting Lio and having something slightly bigger to hold, I liked all of the suggestions Ava made of what she could do with it. Maybe the next chapter could just be a body exploration with Ava, where she's laying on the couch to watch TV or something, puts Lio's house on her stomach, then he decides to come out and explore. And if he reaches a certain body part (like maybe one of those crevices I mentioned earlier) Rachel could say something like "While you're there, do ____ chore for me". But it's ultimately whatever you wanna do, I don't wanna hijack your story with constant suggestions.
All in all, great story, sorry for the long review ':)
Author's Response: No worries, I quite like consistent reviews (if only to please my own ego a little). Thanks for the compliments, I also think I'll be able to show my "skills" more now that Lio has reached the sizes I'm used to dealing with. And you're right, a lot of it is due to the fact you can just go overboard with descriptions and it would be totally warranted. They are landscapes and can be described as such, especially once we get into proper body exploration.
As for my writing process: I get an idea, think it through a little bit... but mostly I just start writing and see where it goes from there. An example with the newest chapter: I only had the idea of Ava's eye being in front of his window, and it grew from there. Meanwhile, the (not-so-little) kiss was a spur of the moment idea, because it seemed fun. Also, who needs proofreading? xD
As for the future, I'll tell you the same thing I told the guy who's more into the Ava side of the story: there will be a balance. Maybe one will end up with more than the other, I don't know. But both ladies are equally important to Lio, and vice versa. I dunno where you got the idea where Rachel would be the focus, but if I said it, I didn't mean it like that.
We'll see what comes next, but, uh, Imma just note down your idea, for research purposes....
