Date: February 05 2017 7:18 AM Title: Chapter 1
Pixis, I knew you were going to say that. There's nothing wrong with being into all gentle stuff. I am not suggesting to go full "violence and destruction and sinister motivations" either. That would utterly destroy this story, the way it is set up. I would like to see the story just an inch further away from perfect rainbow land. All that takes is like one wrong that isn't immediately rectified.
Date: February 05 2017 3:39 AM Title: Chapter 2
With all due respect to Squashed123, I completely disagree with his assessment. I think your stories are fantastic and your plotlines and characters are a lot of fun. Speaking as a gentle giantess fan, it often feels quite rare to find a fully realized, well written gentle story. This website is filled with stories about those dark corners he describes, tales of violence and destruction and sinister motivations. I mean no disrespect to that genre but that's not everybody's bag. For me at least, your work is a breath of fresh air and touches upon themes that really appeal to me.
Giantess fiction is often inspired by an author's deeply held fantasies. A writer is going to be drawn to certain themes and scenarios that he finds appealing. We all have our own interests and things we'd like to see in a story but a writer's work is usually best when it comes from the heart rather than altered to please the audience. That's my opinion at least.
All that said, I don't know for sure where this story is going and I don't want to make assumptions. Thus far, I'm very much enjoying the ride though.
Thanks Pixis. I'll be honest, I started writing on this site because you stopped! Well, there was a while where you took a lengthy break after Vera. I decided to take up the keyboard myself and fill the void. I don't read the majority of the stories on this website--not because they aren't good, but because they just don't appeal to me. So I started writing stories that did appeal to me, namely gentle giantess stories with soft vore and mouthplay.
Ultimately, I write these stories for myself. I didn't imagine that anyone else would read or enjoy them, but am very glad that other people do.
Date: February 04 2017 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 2
[Spoilers] Thanks for your reply. I read this again, and most of your other stuff too. I can see why you run out of steam. You're an excellent writer but you're not willing to explore dark corners. Out in the light, there's only so little to do. Your characters are witty, self-less and almost always completely moral. I say almost because Susanna tricked Vincent into her mouth that one time, abusing her power to have a laugh at his expense. But afterwards she apologized so hard that she cried. That's a reoccuring thing too. The crying. Then there is (accidental) mouth play and some body exploration, which is precisely how The Castaways is going to continue. That's sad because it is predictable.
I would so love to see you experiment and explore new things with this story. There's so many things to build upon. But I don't think you will. There is not going to be a character with impure motivations. No one is going to die ever. There is not even going to be a real bull-in-a-china-shop situation, as you were going for in chapter 1, which was absolutely brilliant right before you took all the steam out of it by going back to a safe and proven theme from your other stories: Retrieval of object from mouth or stomach. The scenario basically plays out the same way every time. If that's your cup of tea, fine. I'm only being so critical of this because you are one of the greatest writers I have ever had the pleasure of discovering for myself on this or any website (style-wise) but you fail to produce intriguing plot-lines.
You are so unfathomably good at conveying emotions that I feel as your characters do while I am reading. Now imagine the emotional rollercoaster you'd be able to send your readers on if suddenly something bad was happening. Power was being abused ever so slightly. There is an injustice. In my stories, the characters devolve into evil shadows of themsevles and it is surprising when they do not act selfishly or evil, which I absolutely hate. You are gifted with the ability to write gentle. But it will only ever carry to it's full effect if there is something in the story as a contrast to help it stand out.
Otherwise this story is going to be just like your others, when it could be one of the greatest there ever were.
...sorry, I'm really upset about this.
I appreciate the thorough response--as well as the constructive criticism. I'll take this into consideration. I mean that. I'm currently writing chapter 3. I'm going to sit on it for a while and see what I can do.
Date: February 04 2017 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 2
Loving this. Fantastically written. Love The Parvian Perspective as well. I know violence isn't your style, unfortunately, but with so many little people around, who knows what is going to happen, right?
I added you to my favourites because I would not want to miss an update. I wish it was here right now. To be fair, your chapters are relatively short. It's not that they have to be longer or anything, they're fine, but it can't take very long to write all that up, no? I'm literally on the edge of my seat, hoping for a quick update. Spledidly done. 10/10 will read again, now.
Thanks for the kind review! Truly, I'm very humbled. I wish I could write faster and longer, but truth be told, I don't have a lot of free time. I tried my hand at epic saga, but got bogged down halfway through The Manor and got frustrated, then stopped writing for nearly a year. Trying not to let that happen this time! I've been sitting on these two chapters for several months,but I have an idea of chapter 3. Hoping to get it written next week. Thanks again!
Date: February 04 2017 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
Awesome rescue mission. I have a fondness for these kinds of scenes, the intrepid explorer descending into the belly of a giantess. I love that you're alternating between characters. Lots of potential there.
Part of me kind of hoped the girl was in there. The image of Desi swallowing someone smaller than an Ibuprofen is pretty amazing. But then, this is a little girl so I shouldn't be having such thoughts. It's the size of the giant woman that I find exciting in such a scenario.
Which reminds me - I noticed this has a mega tag. Does that mean the Parvians are normal humans and the Magnians are a race of giants?
Thanks! With this story, my plan is to alternate the narrative of each chapter between Parvians and Magnians.
As for the mega tag, that's from the Parvians' perspective, but not "our" perspective. Flora and fauna are "normal to scale" with Magnians. When I first developed this universe, I had considered scaling the Magnians up, but it got too complicated and ultimately, it was easier to develop a cohabitating world where Parvians were a miniature race. I've been trying to avoid specifics for scale so I can be a little flexible with my consistency, but generally speaking, I envision the Magnians being "one hundred times the size of a Parvian." So, to a Parvian, a Magnian is around 500-600 feet tall.
Date: February 04 2017 11:35 AM Title: Chapter 2
Oh Desi, it seems you have the giants at a disadvantage in this world. Great story, seeing your nam pop up in the most recent section certainly makes my day.
Thank you! That is very much appreciated.
Date: February 02 2017 5:03 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm a big fan of your Parvian stories so I'm very excited for a continuing narrative in that world. This looks great so far. I love Desi's internal monologue and the scene of Mary climbing up onto her face.
Judging from the vore tag, I think I can guess what just happened at the water source. If someone went down the hatch, hopefully Desi can cough them back up.
Thanks! I don't often write from the giantess' perpsective, so that was a fun change of pace. I think you're going to like Chapter 2. It's written already, so I'll probably post it in the next day or so.