Date: February 06 2017 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 7
I whole-heartedly approve of the new direction this story has taken. Full steam ahead!
Date: February 06 2017 12:01 PM Title: Chapter 7
I like where this is headed.
Date: February 06 2017 10:29 AM Title: Chapter 5
This dance was fun to read about. I like this story.
[Report This]Date: February 03 2017 11:17 AM Title: Chapter 6
How did I miss this?? Usually I'm one of the first to read a Pixis story. Meh well, January was a busy month and at least I got to sit down and read six chapters straight through!
Excellent story thus far. I like that you're exploring the Wild West with this--that's a setting I've considered, but have never taken a pen to. Lots of potential!
Date: January 31 2017 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 6
This is how Westworld should have been written.
Date: January 30 2017 6:56 AM Title: Chapter 6
'Is that a six gun in your pocket?' Lol. Great chapter- loved the way you described the dancing and how the girls interacted with each other. Diamonda is still a jerk :( can't wait for more, Pixis!
Date: January 22 2017 5:54 PM Title: Chapter 5
Diamonda needs to mount her high horse, fly into the air, and zip down the Bifrost to her job at the Ministry of Mindyourowngoddamnbusiness
Author's Response:
LOL, the Bifrost. That made me laugh. Best comment so far!
[Report This]Date: January 17 2017 2:02 PM Title: Chapter 4
I don't usually enjoy this kind of story but so far I'm loving it. Love the playfulness of it all :). Look forward to seeing more!
[Report This]Date: January 16 2017 9:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
How have I not seen this masterpiece in progress before? This is easily the most adorable, light hearted story I've read on this site that simultaneously has a intriguing plot. Instant favorite, instant 10.
Date: January 16 2017 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 4
Ha, I love the little moment of panic Opal has when she walks into Saph's room. Quite ill-timed on her part, but very funny. Well done, Pixis! Great gentle and teasing interactions. Looking forward to more, and best of luck with your personal life stuff!
Date: January 16 2017 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 3
I'm really enjoying this so far, the characters are all great. I do have to wonder if all of the clients are going to be friendly with Mina, though.
[Report This]Date: January 13 2017 11:53 AM Title: Chapter 3
Loving this thing, man. The characterizations are clear, the writing's pretty crisp, and the action so far is fun and enjoyable. Please keep it up.
Date: January 13 2017 8:30 AM Title: Chapter 3
Diamonda is going to be trouble, Diamonda is not a little woman's best friend after all.
Date: January 12 2017 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 3
Methinks trouble's brewin', brewin' a nasty concoction by the name of Diamonda. Excellent stuff as always, Pixis- distinct voices, characterization, and enough of a cute interaction to keep it gts-interesting. I titter to think of what hijinks Saph and Mina will get into in their sleeping quarters.
[Report This]Date: January 10 2017 10:59 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh this is a lovely beginning! I have always held a fondness in my heart for Thumbelina-sort stories, and this looks to be a quite good one. I hope you will see it through to its conclusion!
Date: January 09 2017 12:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
I love this story and series!! to see it in the old west settign is new, different and your writing is all the more breath taking. here's so I can get as good as you sir/ma'am.
Author's Response:
Thanks! The western setting is something I've never done so we'll see how it goes. And I'm a sir.
Date: January 09 2017 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 2
"Hiya, miz Sapphire. I'm, uh, here to audition?" Really great piece- I like the way you pace things and describe what's happening. Looking forward more!
[Report This]Date: January 08 2017 6:58 AM Title: Chapter 2
A cute story thus far! I love the premise, and Mina is already incredibly endearing. I'll be looking forward to more!
One tiny nitpick thus far is actually just one word (see if you can guess what it is). That's right, pulchritudinous; it gave me a little laugh to see such an odd word thrown in there, but it also perhaps goes without saying that it gets in the way of the immersion, when the reader has to head to Google to learn what it even means. On that note as well, the definition appears to not just be a synonym for "beautiful"; it's a word that's only used to describe people, so I'm not sure if it's grammatically correct to use it in describing a body part. Though I do have you to thank for introducing me to the word, now!
Author's Response:
Fair point. To be honest, I was unsure if I was using it correctly. I think I was just tired of using the same synonyms for "beautiful" and "big" so I dug deeper into my vocabulary. Glad you're enjoying the story otherwise.
Date: January 08 2017 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 1
I hope you keep the unaware going! saphire might not have very good eyesight!!!
great work.
Author's Response:
Thanks. Sorry to say that this is the main chapter that I planned to have unaware interaction. The women need to discover Mina for the plot to move forward. That said, she is very small so there could be unaware moments later on if they fit the story.
Date: January 07 2017 11:18 PM Title: Chapter 2
Swifty is cute, like Mina! I hope the girls treat Mina well, she's so damn likable!