[Report This]Date: September 20 2016 10:15 AM Title: Chapter 2 part 3
Whoa!!!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: February 27 2016 8:37 AM Title: Chapter 2 part 3
Your delay made this chapter a VAST improvement. Thanks!
Date: February 27 2016 8:30 AM Title: Chapter 2 -part 2
I'm sorry. But, you are going to have re-edit this chapter. I can't make out where the narrative text ends and the character dialogue begins!
[Report This]Date: February 27 2016 8:28 AM Title: Chapter 2
OH, BOY! Here comes the requisite (but foredoomed) attempt by the local armed forces to destroy her.
Date: January 03 2016 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 2 -part 2
You need to indent your paragraphs, hard to read a single block of words. Other than that I liked it but cannot wait to see how things are from the giant's POV.
[Report This]Date: December 31 2015 11:47 AM Title: Chapter 2
Mystery, murder, and massive mayhem! A suitably intriguing story with which to end the old year.
Happy New Year, Dragonling!
Author's Response: Those are the four m's I was going for.
Happy New Year to you too Carycomic!
Date: December 31 2015 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 2
Now we are talking! How is Alexia doing all this? It seems she is under some sort of mind control.
Author's Response: Not a bad guess but it will be revealed later on! Oh yeah and Happy New Year Nostory!