Reviewer: someguy1900 Signed
Date: May 26 2013
Title: Chapter 13: Interlude – search and find.
Kate is by far the most interesting IMHO. I have to agree with the previous reviewer. You made Rachel seem quite shallow with her POV section. I've lost some faith in her at this point.
I'm not much in to gentle but as I stated before you make this stuff interesting, hence I'm following it. Kate is in my mind the "gentlest" in that she's not sexually abusing her micros at this point. Doesn't matter about her past; to me I'm reading the "present" and she's not the one putting them on her nipples for play at present.
Idk. Not disappointed with Rachel... Just kinda bummed she seems equally as shallow once we got to see her up close. But I still have hope for Kate.
Author's Response: Well, obviously she is the most interesting one - since she had the most attention, with around 25k words of her and her littles perspectives versus Rachel's what, 4k? And half of that on the fun. I merely wanted to point out in response that the "unconditional" (as gadget suggested) part was groundless. Especially that she only started to care after the events in her zone. Additionally, in this chapter, I wanted to make Rachel's thoughts seem very sad - after more than a century of fruitless search for solutions, she has reasons to be disappointed - wouldn't You be? But the people seemed to enjoy it even though she blamed herself for "abusing" them - that sadness was in her thoughts, which are very subjective to the person and even the situation. Actions of the people (their eagerness and asking to take more of them) - should suggest that maybe it was not that bad. Lauren for instance did not care about her people much - and the biggest concern was the "drop in efficiency", the approach of her people were also different - more like a necessity. Now, I imagine those misunderstandings may be caused by the lack of POV from Rachel's people here - I wanted to point out their emotions in their actions since the POV would be highly repetitive. And knowing Your violent cravings, You were probably disappointed that Rachel did not kill them all :>
I do not want to comment the "shallow" part - hopefully it may change in the next several chapters (if she somehow survives, that is - no wait, it was Gary that dies, yeah - never mind then), but there will still be missing pieces - if I wanted to describe every character properly, I would have to write a book about each and every single one of them... even Kate is barely explained - while we see how she thinks now, we have hardly any details on her past, but yes - it is not the point, that is why I am focusing on the present.
Also.. keep in mind that Kate has not been abusing them so far - who knows what could have happened in a couple decades...
