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Summary:

Three girls must face the consequences of their actions after they assault a member of a smaller race.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Body Exploration, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 94864 Read Count: 292427
[Report This] Published: January 10 2014 Updated: July 03 2015
Reviewer: NightEye Signed
Date: August 11 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Imprisonment

@angeloflife : "they seem to be running around with nothing to stop them from focing their will on everyone."

Not only nothing can stop them from doing whatever they want but it is strongly implied, in this story and in others, that they DO anything they want.

They just appeared one day, normal Alphas touched by the "Fire" (whatever it is) and suddenly they are huge all powerful beings. It's implied they do whatever they want (which is protecting Betas) without any kind of consent or discussion with Alphas governments. They simply impose their will on Alphas. Which is why most elected Alphas officials are anti-Omegas. But they don't have the means to fight back.

I'm wondering if there was a point in the past when Alphas tried to kill the Omegas with their military - and how that went. As it is, Omegas could just as well be an alien occupying force on Earth.

Omega: Family by Ackbar Rated: PG starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 41]
Summary:

An anthology of shorts detailing the life of a mixed-size family.


Categories: Couples , Gentle, Maternal
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 9130 Read Count: 40435
[Report This] Published: April 27 2014 Updated: February 14 2015
Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: April 27 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Separation

Moving chapter. I understand Ellie's rational as disappointing as it may be to Howard.

The world building informations are always a plus for me (like in the Titan series). I like that you made Ellie tell us what she thinks will happen in the future between Betas, Alphas and Omegas on a political scale : "Because the moment Betas are recognized for their skills, the moment they have an actual voice...that's when things are going to get truly nasty. When Alphas are pushed out of their jobs by more qualified Betas, when Betas outnumber them at the polls, shit is going to hit the fan."

So so true...

"A democracy in which Betas have no say whatsoever, in which ninety percent of of our senators and representatives get elected on a platform of fighting back against every single thing the Omegas try to enact." 

Interesting bit of information there. I had gathered that most Alphas were still against the Betas and Omegas, I didn't get that majority was so overwhelming.

Please include more details like these, they truly flesh out your universe.



Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed the worldbuilding, I always enjoy putting it to paper, so to speak, even if I do so at a controlled trickle.

Summary:

A young woman, prosecuted for a crime she didn’t commit, is placed in the hands of her titanic best friend to learn a few lessons she didn’t earn but most certainly will never forget.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Mature (40-49), Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 44494 Read Count: 127610
[Report This] Published: July 12 2014 Updated: October 24 2014
Reviewer: NightEye Signed
Date: September 18 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Cold

Oooooooh ! That chapter made my chest burn ! Very well written sir.

So Lexi is going to lie and pretend she did all those things ? Somehow, I don't think that's gonna make Bridget go easier on her, on the contrary...



Author's Response:

Thanks very much!  Lexi's not necessarily going to lie, because keeping to her principles on the truth is all she has left, but it's certainly something she's considering.

Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: September 19 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Cold

@Naoru : I may have been confused by this sentence :

" his was just the price she promised herself she would pay in favor of abandoning her principles, and she was paying it in full."

I thought the principles she was abandoning were sticking to the truth instead of caving. Then, the next few sentences could be taken as Lexi mentally breaking, taking the lie as her new truth and rolling with it.

Now that you mention it, I'm probably wrong, that would be too dark, even for this story. :P



Author's Response:

I recognize it's a semi-clunkily worded sentence.  It's meant to read that Lexi refuses to lie, even if it would ease her physical pains, because it's so important to her.

Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 02 2014 Title: Chapter 10: Monster

Wow, that was painful to read. Lexie's mother is a Beta serial killer; she doesn't just seem evil for evil's sake, rather plain old insane, Joker style.

I give points to Lexie for even trying to stand up to her, just a little. At ten year old, not muxh more could be expected of her.

I wonder if Alma got caught or if she bolted as soon as Lexie disappeared.

Keep it up, I want to know what happens next !



Author's Response:

I enjoy the Joker comparison; Alma's definitely not bound by any humane morals. And Alma was caught because of what Lexi did. There will be more on that later on. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: NightEye Signed
Date: October 07 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Revelation

So Nathaniel used is real name ? Same identity as when his parents were killed ? He didn't think Aegis would put two and two together eventually ?



Author's Response:

Actually, Nathaniel saw it as being potentially to his advantage that they knew his name, because if the connection was ever made, they might assume Lexi was trying to even the score for her mom. Of course, he also didn't count on the clerk cracking.

Reviewer: NightEye Signed
Date: October 08 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Revelation

@SpookyTaco : it's been heavily implied in other Omega stories that Omegas (especially the second generation like Bridget) are hardwired, like DNA programed, to feel intense anger at Beta abuse and to desire revenge for it.

Hence, I assume, the surprising "switch off" mentality Bridget displays in this story : once she's convinced Lexie did abuse Betas, her brain is on autopilot.

Which makes Omegas even scarier (as if they need to be).



Author's Response:

Thanks for making that point. The fire is definitely a contributing factor here.

Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 12 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Surrender

Another great chapter ! It didn't happen quite the way I imagined but it was very well done.

Actually, I left a comment about Lexi confessing her "guilt" a few chapters back; guess I was just a few chapters early. ^^

I'm pretty sure Lexi is gonna survive but will she suffer permanent injury ?



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading! And I guess we'll just have to wait and see what happens.

Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: October 19 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Pieces

Lady with glowing eyes ? Obviously Kayla, shrunken down to Alpha size. I hope she's not gonna easily convince Lexi to stay, that would make her a real Deus Ex Machina (pun totally intended :P )

From the first part of the chapter, the "Dont. Touch. Me" was really powerful. She's in agony but she still manages to spit out those 3 words at Bridget ? Ouch ! Uppercut to the gut !

Lexi wanting to flee far away is also a very natural reaction.

As for the rest, in good parts, I agree with Nathaniel. That's actually a thing we talked about with other readers and I made that point then : if Aegis/Omegas truly wanted all Betas to be safe, they could make it so instantly. All they would have to do would be to build Beta-only cities and protect them. Forbid any (unsupervised) interaction between Alphas and Betas. There, problem solved.

But of course, that wouldn't feed Kayla's ego,  who, despite claiming she's not a god and doesn't see herself that way, still plays God by trying to force Alphas and Betas to live together in harmony. With lethal consequences for the latter group (be it voluntary harm or accident). In Abigail's words to describe Kayla : "The woman who was the living embodiment of evolution itself, that supreme force of will that guided all progress. All life. The woman who had set the course for humanity for millennia to come." 

So I agree with Nathaniel : Omegas, and especially Kayla, say they want to protect Betas, they might even genuinely believe that but that's not true. They want to impose a new model for all Humanity, no matter how many Betas get killed in the process. And of course, that gives them a twisted justification for their torture sessions against Alpha offenders.



Author's Response:

I see where you're coming from with your points on the Omegas, though I'd say it seems more like Kayla would be playing God to dictate where people have to live apart from and who they can interact with. She doesn't force anyone to live together; this is just one city, so there are assuredly places a Beta could travel in the world where they'd encounter fewer Alphas. The point for all this is to eventually have peace, rather than just keeping a conflict from breaking out again. I appreciate hearing your thoughts.

Watch Over by Jacksmith Rated: PG starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 21]
Summary:

Ellie and Aaron have an unusual arrangement with a shrink ray that allows them to live out secret desires and, ultimately, brings them closer in ways neither could’ve anticipated.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Gentle, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, New World Order
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 12232 Read Count: 79856
[Report This] Published: October 29 2014 Updated: December 10 2014
Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 10 2014 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8

Okay. I should have left a comment way earlier but I didn't know what to say except that I love this story.

And since Ackbar threatened me with an excrutiating death if I didn't leave a comment ( :D ), here it is and I'll say it again : I LOVE this story.

Micro + Gentle ? Absolute WIN, no matter. Add to that the Jacksmith level of writing ? One of my favorite gentle stories is what you get.

You should really consider balancing your styles : your violent stories are great but so are you gentle ones, you should write more ! Keep it up ! ;)



Author's Response:

Aw shucks, thanks. Always avoid excrutiating death. I do have some more stories with a gentle focus planned for the upcoming year, so hopefully that comes to fruition.

S Class by faintsmile Rated: PG starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 66]
Summary:

In a world where there is a strong correlation between wealth and size, two people come together, despite their obvious differences.


Categories: Body Exploration, Teenager (13-19), Mature (40-49), Gentle, Giant, New World Order, Sci Fi / Fantasy, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.)
Shrink: Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Munchkin (2.9 ft. to 1 ft.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/f, FM/f, M/f
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 11 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 26080 Read Count: 70878
[Report This] Published: November 12 2014 Updated: January 12 2015
Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 21 2014 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9

"Understanding Through Immersion" ?

That sounds to me like some shrinking is in on the horizon for Isabelle, right ? :D



Author's Response: Aha! You are good, my friend! I guess you will have to read to find out ;}

Summary:

A woman becomes engaged to her three-inch-tall beloved, but her staunchly conservative family may be prepared to go to extreme measures to prevent this union.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Middle Age (50+), Couples , Gentle, Humiliation, Mouth Play, New World Order, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 15861 Read Count: 61600
[Report This] Published: November 24 2014 Updated: December 24 2014
Reviewer: NightEye Signed
Date: December 04 2014 Title: Chapter 3: Intervention

Oh God ! Oh God ! Oh God ! Oh God !

Please don't let her kill him ! Okay, just a bit injured to have Omegas come into this, but not too much.

Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease ! 

So cruel !



Author's Response:

I've just gone mad with power, that's all.

Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 09 2014 Title: Chapter 4: Be

Britney isn't very smart. If Omegas are the rulers of the world, injuring - or worse - killing a Beta on purpose is what will destroy any hope of a career or college education for her. Her mother even said so in chapter 2 : "the people making those decisions are pretty liberal".

Best she could do is get the hell out of there before she does anything to Ian. 

But that wouldn't do well for the plot. ;)



Author's Response:

You're right that there's not a great way out of this for Britney. We may soon see that she has other motivations besides job security, though.  ;)

Summary:

A celebration of progress turns disastrous when extremists invade and take thousands of three-inch-tall hostages. With the lives of a generation hanging in the balance, the unlikely team of a tiny anxious teen and a disgruntled female ex-con may be the only hope to avert utter catastrophe.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Mature (40-49), Adventure, Crush, Destruction, Entrapment, Gentle, Humiliation, New World Order, Unaware, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Titan (101 ft. to 500 ft.)
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Omegas
Chapters: 21 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 56452 Read Count: 136884
[Report This] Published: July 10 2015 Updated: May 17 2016
Reviewer: NightEye Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 27 2015 Title: Chapter 5: Standoff

The hostage takers have control of the security systems : how did they not see a couple of freaking Omegas walk to the building ? Close enough to smash through a wall and grab one of them ?

And yeah, the fact that Jenna was one of the two was, by itself, a recipe for catastrophe.



Author's Response:

Alice definitely did see the Omegas out there, though she's handling a lot of work at the same time, and may not have been watching the cameras at that moment to realize Jenna was so close to the same hallway as Randall. There was enough margin for error there that Jenna could've moved in, found him, and broke in before Alice could connect the dots. Thanks for reading/reviewing!