For starters, I liked most of this story except the end, I feel it was way too nice to Madison and Mirielle.

For Madison this can be broken off into points (for organization):

- Yes, Madison had childhood trauma, Yes, her family was horrible to her, but in the end, it was just too easy for her here. There was no struggle for her to get the company, and she pretty much got what she wanted, despite the horrible things she and Adelina did to get it.

-Madison was punishing Michael then eventually took it too far by bringing their mother into it or rather, letting Adelina do so. To me, that's a bit much especially since she was implying using Michael for pleasure acting as his mother. She also ended up, when she was aware of his prescence, of making him think she planned to kill him.

-Madison allowed her father to basically be tortured by Mirielle. He was horrible and mean to her yes, and he is a Nazi follower, but as odd as it sounds, I think what is about to happen to him is probably far more punishment than he deserves as he generally did nothing in this story other than work until the end.

At this point I would say Madison now is worse than Michael at the beginning. I would also say the Michael, for all he's been through, deserves a big win over his now incredibly rich and powerful sister. Sure she's now fully alone in the world with no one to confide into but, she I feel that's not really a big thing for her, like maybe being more rich and powerful than her somehow, owning something she desperately wants, or even not forgiving her or acknowledging her existance even if  she begs for it unless she does something to make it up to him. Basically, I think Michael deserves to get the upper hand over her in some fields.

For all she's done, all thats happened to her, yes she deserves something, but she's gotten so much in such a horrible fashion that I feel she deserves a punishment like Michael to be taken down a few pegs. Again, I also think Michael deserves something as a large victory over his sister.

Overall I did like the story, it was well written, the pace was fine, just the ending was way too easy on Madison and Mirielle (although I didn't mention Mirielle at all because, well, she's kinda just an evil parasite that uses other's success as their own).

I get what you're saying, but she knew he was there and knew Ricky as Drake's friend, and she wasn't at all bothered by it. I know Rachel destroyed the device, but still, she knew of Ricky at the time and didn't seem to care that her son's friend would possibly stay like that for the rest of his life when they destroyed the device.

Yes, she's more hospitable, but she's done some bad things too with full knolwedge of Ricky's existence (even though she didn't know Drake was in a similar predicitment). Of course does it ruin the story? No. It's something small, and honestly, it's only my opinion.

I like Drake a lot as a character with limits in the crazy situation he's in. Kaylee is an interesting character too, along with the vast majority of the other characters in the story. So overall a good story, and again, it's only my opinion.

Yeah, Chris is definitely not going to like Mei if he survives XD calling him a parasite and fiith is kinda pushing how much she could humiliate him. I'm wondering why Kayla would agree if she's worried about Chris's well being, I assume Mei lied although I doubt Chris would care since he was knowingly put in a situation where he has to eat filth and can die in a horrible way because of them. 

I can see the conversation now: "so you learn your lesson?" "Yes, now I don't want to see either of you ever again unless you're coming with one hell of an apology for the past month." *Chris leaves* "well... fuck".

She's being pretty brutal to him. Although I get the feeling if he dies, they will hopefully respect him enough to tell the truth to Sarah and his mother which will be an incredibly awakward conversation (kinda rooting for Chris here as all he did was gamble way too much XD). And if he does survive and they want to remain friends/close, they've a lot of groveling to do because he will likely hate their guts (literally and figuretively) for pretty much everything, lying to his family and loved ones, taking a month before classes to teach him the lesson so when he goes back he'll be tired and exhausted and probably hurt while they all got to relax, etc.

At the same time, I also think that there's a chance he'd be changed for the worse being called and treated like a parasite and filth by them over and over. So yeah, if he survives the girls will have a TON of work ahead of them since they'll no doubt (due to his relations to them) feel accountable for his state afterward, let alone if they even want him to talk to them about anything. Although I can see a card saying "Sorry for Shrinking you for a month" being pretty funny XD.

The chapter is good, description of the vast world he's on. It's alien but at the same time, Chris noticing things that he remembered when he was normal was a nice touch. 

These aren't criticims, just thoughts as I was reading. Good Story, can't wait to see more.