I say, a jolly good yarn! Plenty of exciting details regarding the thoughts of prey and predator. I keep wondering why it's exciting to think and read of being eaten - whether as a midget or fully-sized.  Puzzling.

Well done, girlfood. Look forward to the 3rd part.

 This yarn was going quite well but for me there was little excitement as the predator was supposed to become after swallowing her victim. Okay, she touched herself here and there but there was no follow-up - the intenseness of her galvanised libido caused by the human diet.   The yarn then plodded along without further mention of libidinous pleasure by the following predators.  It would also have been exciting to give some erotic description of the ogresses' bodies, etc.

Now, now, 'eatmeplease' a schoolboy does not criticise his teacher. A story, to be enjoyed must run smoothly with the necessary correctness, otherwise it can be like a chap trying to seduce a female dressed in a suit of armour.    My views are constructive but you deem to see them as otherwise. You wouldn't bite a helping hand, would you?

Anyway, do continue writing. Any yarns involving vore are pretty exciting.  

 Hello again, Nostromo. I hope you will forgive me but, when I come across a good yarn I often like to enhance it and make certain adjustments to make it that much more exciting.  For instance, instead of that girl giving one of her victims to a bloke, I changed the bloke into a she-male so that he goes through the same torment AND is given the taste of her/his ejaculation.

Hope I haven't ruffled your feathers. It's entirely personal and will go no further.    Let me know if you'd like to read my version.

Well, 'eatmeplease, this is an old yarn I've met before and found it very good. I enjoyed reading it again and also enjoyed correcting the many grammatical errors such as punctuations - full-stops, comas, semi-colons, capital letters for names and separating paragraphs.

It was like correcting schoolbys' essays and homework.

Anyway, it IS a good yarn, and I'm giving you 7 out of 10 for trying.

Banfield

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Hello again P.Eddie. I sent you a message but stupidly sent it to myself! I asked whether you're still about, and if so, have you lost interest in gts stories? Admittedly, I have, but still fantasise such scenes even altho I remain in the real world, ie: Being full-size and enduring the same torments as those shrunken characters. Pope, it would be good if you do come back and let me know how you are and if you still write or have any interests in the Femdom world?

A. Banfield  (Tony) 

 Just one more, Pope Eddie: After reading your story I would have in mind to write a sequence to it and have Anna Baptiste capture an innocent male, shrink him to around 6 to 8 inches and sexually enjoy herself with him prior to eating him - but NOT swallowing.

Would you object to my idea?

As soon as I saw the name 'Baptiste' I thought YES! Afro-West Indian.....terrific!  I then read the first chapter and it was so very good - AND realistic.   So I've yet to read the next two parts and, from one Englishman to another, I say jolly good so far......and shall add to my review when all is read.     Thanks a lot, Pope Eddie!

 Well, P.E; I've almost finished the 2nd sequel of Three Wishes and, like the victim, am in a dilemma; i.e.which choice to make?   It's a pity I can't send you the piece to see which choice the victim/prey will choose. His protagonist is awaiting with increasing impatience.  I know what you will say: Go ahead because I am just as impatient.

 Quite honestly, Pope Eddie, I can't think of a better way to go.  I'm writing another sequel. It's called "Three Wishes"  I bet you can't guess what they are.....