Ok, so finally caught up. Great stuff. In some ways, your writing style matches Ackbar's.

The trickiest thing with the Omega series is the punishments. Those are just so hard to justify, perhaps because they're so different than what we do in the US. Sure, we incarcerate but we don't torture based on the details of the crime. I'm interested in the psychology behind it. Perhaps we'll get a chapter where the Omega who conceived these punishments elucidates how they facilitate behavior modification in criminals. Don't get me wrong, the punishments add a great deal to the stories, but I still like to try to justify them in my mind, to find the slice of realism.

As for Bridget, sorry, not sure I'd ever talk to her again if I were Lexi. I might, but it wouldn't be easy. How could someone invoke the first punishment without ever having an open discussion with her best friend? I mean, the blurry video feed showed no 100% evidence that proved Lexi did the crime.

I suppose Bridget's only redeeming factor is that she never physically harmed Lexi in a serious way. And that she practiced the mouth thing for a week to ensure no harm would come. But the emotional harm has been done. I really, really hope we get a Bridget pov and see her reaction to the news. This needs to change her on a fundamental level before Lexi would let her back in.

Ack, Bridget should have tried to visit her on the roof! She had enough presence of mind to interrogate Nathaniel, she should have been brave enough to visit her best friend too. Would it have been painful? Yes. Would she be rejected again? Probably. But still, c'mon, deal with it Bridget and keep trying to apologize.

Watching Omegas deal with Betas is weird. I mean, does this world have capital punishment? Because it would be ridiculous for an Omega to kill a Beta. The size disparity is too great. An Omega executing a Beta just feels wrong.

Even the interrogation seems out of place. Bridget should not be allowed to handle Nathaniel. She herself noted the brief thought of crushing him between her fingers. There's no way that should be allowed if Omega's are capable of having such thoughts. It seems simple enought to allow the Betas to serve as judge and jury for themselves. One day, an Omega is going to squeeze too hard and kill a Beta (or several Betas with a misstep) and this 'mixed zone' nonsense is going to be questioned. Omegas and Betas shouldn't be allowed within a mile of each other.

Anyway, great chapter!

Great story! I haven't read all of the previous ones but I jumped into this easily enough. Compelling interaction and dialog works to immerse the reader in spite of the missing bits of history. However, it does tempt me to read some of the earlier ones.

I admire your courage. I tried and failed to do a rewrite. I’ll never attempt it again. I like the quote: "Write the book you want to read." I simply don’t want to reread any of my old stuff. :)

As for the world, Jessica’s humble abode is a place of amazement. How did she ever get a stove and utensils of such size? Surely they must look somewhat different than what Jack’s used to seeing because she’s the only person of her size in the world. Even with military support, manufacturing such conveniences must have been tremendous feats of engineering. I wonder if she helped the teams of people install it. Probably.

A 'New World Order' story with an extended period of Titan presence. Although world building isn't what pulls me into a story, it's interesting to see how authors handle people of vastly different sizes living in the same general area. I liked the details such as the walkways inside the walls. Also, it seemed that Titan technology wasn't quite up to par (clumsy keyboard and slow-warming shower), but that might have just been Linda's experience.

Sofia surprised me a lot. Clearly some men have power in this world; just look at Harvey. So there must be some laws in place that keep Titans from simply doing whatever they want. Therefore, it's surprising that she held a man down by stepping on him. That seems incredibly dangerous. Perhaps the Titans are trained in such handling techniques, but still.

And when Linda grinned at Sofia, I was confused. Sofia strip searched her and, in my opinion, humiliated her. Then, Linda grins and 'likes' Sofia after seeing how she held a man with her foot?

Now if the man had a gun or did something to arouse my dislike of him a bit more, I could understand it.

I don't know. Sofia did let Linda leave without doing the 'full body check'. I suppose that gives Sofia some bonus points and makes her more likable.

Anyway, good stuff so far. And, even though I reread the text, I didn't find the video game reference. Probably because I don't play video games as much anymore. Still curious as to what it was.

Good opening. Patricia seems a bit detached. I like the Amazon size present in this story. Provides an interesting perspective, entirely different than Titan size. I also like Alvin's personality.

I'd recommend providing more explanation on some of his thoughts. For example, 'using him as a punching bag'. That's difficult to imagine. If eight-foot Amazons were literally beating on him like a punching bag, he'd be seriously injured if not dead from such an experience. So obviously he's exaggerating, but how much? What did they really do to him? Was it in jest or spite? That type of detail.

Hmm, yes, I have to agree with gadget. Of course, I'm more of a gentle giantess fan myself, so I'm biased. :) Poor Alvin can't catch a break.

Nice chapter. Good to see Cassie helping Alvin out. Still not sure why Wendy hates him so much.

One recommendation would be to consider zooming to a more intimate POV. Choose one person's head per scene and focus on that. Makes for a more enjoyable reading experience. For example in this chapter you used phrases such as "how could she ever get him to trust" and "in his head he prayed" in the same scene. If Cassie was the pov, she could make guesses that Alvin prayed, but that's about it. Just an idea. A more distant third-person is fine too, but sometimes makes it more difficult to pack an emotional punch.

Here's another site I reference when I'm writing in limited/intimate/close pov. It shows how to avoid 'head-hopping':

http://jamigold.com/2013/07/7-methods-for-handling-point-of-view/

And yes, your quality is improving. Keep writing and, most importantly, write for yourself. The rest will follow naturally.

Wow, this is pretty good. Ann is awesome! But I'm lost...how did she become so evil? The vorophilic Ann in chapter 1 seems nothing like the sweet, considerate Ann of chapter 2.

As far as the writing style, I like when you switch to non-exposition, i.e., showing instead of telling. For example the dialog between Ann and Wendell, dropping small bits of food, etc. More of that please. :)

Of course if she ends up eating or hurting Wendell later on her path to becoming the Ann of chapter 1, I'll probably cry, so don't do that.