Penname: Ancient Relic [Contact] Real name:
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Summary:

The story of a domineering business woman and her meek assistant in a series of events that will forever change them both.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Adult 30-39, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Growing/Shrinking Out of Clothes, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, Slave, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.), Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/f
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 99309 Read Count: 198637
[Report This] Published: March 20 2021 Updated: October 09 2021
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: August 07 2021 Title: Chapter 22: Internal Discord

If Amy and Tina knew how much progress they're making with Eva...

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: August 15 2021 Title: Chapter 23: A New Tina

Sexual content in this story felt a bit odd at first - it is a logical outcome of Tina's character arc, but I got used to a story that didn't have any entrapment or near-insertion. Having said that, it's also the porny stuff I like, which is good.

Otherwise, what I've said previously still applies. This seems to be coming to a head, and I'm excited to see how it all climaxes, and potentially blows up.



Author's Response:

Hahaha, I know how you feel. To be honest I often worry if this size fetish story has enough size fetish in it. Though it does have its lewder chapters imo. I can only hope the last handful of chapters make folks happy. 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: August 24 2021 Title: Chapter 24: Brought Low

Tina has now completed her journey toward the Dark Side, and for her, it's probably just dealing with the consequences of that from now on (or not). Eva, I think, it about to reach her turning point, though I can see her going either way: she breaks, or she becomes unbreakable. Thinking about where the story can go from here, it seems like the former would almost make things too simple. Eva submits, Tina wins. You could throw in an external complication from Amy or Dana, but that's the end of their character arcs. But if Tina, in her current mental state, figures out that she can't break Eva, that'll keep their character development going for the rest of the story.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: August 28 2021 Title: Chapter 25: A Weekend Alone: Tina

In this story, you should never take one character's perspective as an accurate view of what's going on. Tina thinks that the cop doesn't suspect her and will now move on, so it's entirely possible that Tina is under suspicion, and missed the signs. Did the cop really not see anything, or did the cop find Tina's behaviour (especially body language) suspicious and didn't tip her off? When the cop said that she can't comment on an ongoing investigation, that says nothing and could mean anything. Or the cop could've taken Tina's behaviour as a sign that Tina wasn't expecting to see her.

So Tina still has misgivings. What this means is that Tina knew how extreme her torture was, and did it anyway. She could let up, or get used to this.

And has Amy been contacted by the police?

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: August 28 2021 Title: Chapter 25: A Weekend Alone: Tina

Amy is definitely manipulating Tina to some extent, but there's one reason against shrinking Tina. One missing person is an isolated incident. Two missing people who worked at the same place and knew each other is pattern that the police will not ignore.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: September 05 2021 Title: Chapter 26: A Weekend Alone: Eva

So now we know what becomes of Eva. I think it's a testament to her strength that she isn't in even worse shape after a weekend of solitary confinement. But what becomes of Tina? I see two ways this can go:

1) No one discovers Eva and finds out Tina's been doing, even though Tina has clear flaws, in that she'll do worse things than Eva ever did, and that her child-like mind is easily manipulated by people who put on a friendly facade. If this happened, then the story would end with the message that you can have all those flaws and win without doing anything about them.

2) Tina's exposed, by Dana and/or the police. The story would establish that Tina has her own major problems, and was brought down by them.

3) Tina has her own transformation at the last minute, and gets Dana and the police off her trail.

From what I've seen of the story so far, 1) seems like the least likely, and 3) seems contrived and rushed. 2) is the most consistent with what I've read.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: September 11 2021 Title: Chapter 27: Acceptance

The story could end right here. Tina's goal was to put a bully in her place, and that's been fully accomplished. Remmeber when people (myself included) thought that Eva would shrink Tina? How far we've come from that.

But something's going to happen to upend everything, and it's going to come from two people. Amy and Dana have been doing something that we haven't seen because we're seeing everything from Tina's perspective. Amy is manipulating Tina toward some end that it unknown to us because Tina is too childlike to realize that Amy's friendliness is a facade. Dana probably suspects Tina, and with the help of the police officer we saw earlier, is about to spring into action and take Tina down. Earlier in the story, Amy figured out that Tina used the shrinker, because Tina didn't recharge it. It's likely that Dana knows about that too. However, I doubt that Dana and Amy are working together - they have opposite goals, and so they'll probably be in conflict.

One last thing to note is that we haven't actually seen Dana work with the police. Normally, when someone does something wrong at a business, the business fixes the problem internally as much as possible, and only gets the police involved when it's unavoidable. If a company's been embezzled or defrauded, for example, the money lost to the crime is far less than the lost stock value if it became public knowledge. In this case, Dana has an interest in making sure that the public never associates kidnapping, rape and torture with her company, and the public could find out if it appears in a police report. Or maybe Dana wants to see Tina criminally charged. We'll see.



Author's Response:

I gotta say I am not sure where the idea of Amy as a manipulator came from haha, but you raise some interesting points absolutely. Time will tell. 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: September 21 2021 Title: Chapter 28: Thoughts to Paper

At this point, it looks like Tina and Eva will have a sex scene, and Eva will stay Tina's pet indefinitely. Amy will continue to observe Eva. I was just thinking that we might be in the denouement, because there isn't enough story left for another climax.



Author's Response:

You caught me for the next chapter haha. Well played.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: September 26 2021 Title: Chapter 29: Dominated

Well that was a surprise. I didn't expect to see Tina make Eva bigger. Now I'm just waiting to see what they do in the long term, and where Tina goes with the knowledge that she can do this to a bully.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: October 08 2021 Title: Chapter 30: Epilogue: Everything Old is New Again

Well that was quite the adventure, and a not insignificant part of the fun was talking about it with Barrowman and panzerhunter. It changed the way I saw the story, and gave me a lot of ideas that I wouldn't have come up with on my own. Another big part of the fun was the satisfying subversion of expectations. I legit thought that Eva would shrink Tina at first, and I failed to guess the actual ending until just a few chapters before. Good work!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I won't lie, it was very enjoyable reading you guys talking about the story and all your different speculations. I would've added to it if I wasn't worried I'd had spoiled something haha. 

Money Matters by fosmat Rated: R starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 94]
Summary:

In a society where the amount of tax you pay determines your size, Drew must learn to survive within his growing world and find a way to get his life back on track before he dwindles down too far beyond repair.

After an injustice is cast upon him, he just might have a plan.


Categories: Giantess, Young Adult 20-29, Breasts, Body Exploration, Butt, Entrapment, Feet, Footwear, Humiliation, Muscle, New World Order, Odor, Slave, Slow Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.), Giant (31 ft. to 50 ft.)
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.), Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 49311 Read Count: 125442
[Report This] Published: September 12 2021 Updated: December 03 2021
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: September 27 2021 Title: Chapter 1: Shitty Day

The premise is excellent, and the story has been a lot of fun so far. Think hard about worldbuilding and how it affects the plot and characters. This story has a lot of potential.



Author's Response:

Thank you, means a lot.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: October 08 2021 Title: Chapter 7: Oceans Fourteen

Drew gets inside: Ah, we're going to have sneaking and unaware for awhile.

Casey comes in: Now we have somebody to avoid for awhile.

Drew gets caught: That was unexpected.

But now it seems we have a chance for the porn to start. I'm partial to panty and bra rides and insertion myself.



Author's Response:

Hahah it seems that Drew getting caught so fast was surprising to a couple of people, I just find unaware can be quite anticlimactic at times so I thought I may as well avoid it. 

Can't say next chapter but future chapters will definitely have some panty and bra moments. 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: October 09 2021 Title: Chapter 7: Oceans Fourteen

Val is putting herself into a bad spot by doing this. Lawyers are forbidden to tell people to do something illegal by their bar's professional codde of conduct. Val advised Drew to commit trespassing at the very least, so she could face sanctions...unless she has a way to avoid that.

It's also notable that Casey was genuinely surprised to see a tiny man, even before she knew that it was Drew, as though it's not normal for small people to be in the house.

Finally, do you have a table or a formula that shows the height of each tax bracket or income?



Author's Response:

Good pickup, there must be something to Val we don't know yet...

Not normal for there to be one in the house, or not normal that one is out in the open, could be either.

And yeah I do, it's like a very rough estimation of incomes and all, I'm not smart enough to actually calculate it hahaha. 

Size Brackets are

7 – 40-50ft (billionaires)

6 – 20-25ft (millionaires)

5 – 12-17ft (hundred k salary)

4 – 5-9ft (50-100k)

3 – 2-3ft (20-50k)

2 – 1ft (10-20k)

1 – 3-6in (1k-10k)

Sub – 1/2in (0)

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: October 10 2021 Title: Chapter 8: The Reunion

How much social mobility is there in this world? Is Val's rags to riches story plausible?

What kind of "servants" does Susan keep? And does Casey's father have any "servants"?



Author's Response:

There's enough social mobility for Val's rags to riches story to be plausible, however not easy and would require a lot of determination.

Interesting questions, they'll be answered soon enough. 

 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: October 13 2021 Title: Chapter 9: Cute Name

COP26 is coming up, and there will be protests. It got me thinking. In this world, how tall would the government officials and NGOs be, and how tall would the protesters be, and what would happen if they met?



Author's Response:

Hmm, so I like to imagine Government officials are in ascending brackets depending on their position. The prime minister/president in the highest bracket and then in descending sizes as their position lowers. NGOs and protestors would still probably be in whatever bracket they fall into but I assume it would be at much smaller of a size compared to the government.

When I eventually finish this story, or perhaps even if there's a lull, I might write some short stories about different parts of the greater world outside of Drew, things like how police work and schools and whatever. Could be interesting. 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: October 16 2021 Title: Chapter 10: Best Friend

Drew may not have a camera with him, but one day he's going to be able to tell Val exactly where to look.



Author's Response:

He's definitely seen a lot at this point, hopefully he lives to tell the tale.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: October 29 2021 Title: Chapter 13: Breaking News

Drew has two options:

1) Comfort Casey and get on her good side, so that he can a) get her to share her family's secrets and b) make Casey more amenable to him exploring on his own, to gather more information, recover his phone, and prepare an escape route.

2) Run away now.

The first one has benefits, but the second one feels like the thing a person in Drew's situation would lean towards.



Author's Response:

You might have already read the chapter before I made the edit, but when Drew gets caught by Casey his phone actually gets destroyed. His little hideout in the closet is still intact however, and the camera is still there. 

Seems likely Drew will escape here, while Casey seems like she's warmed up to him a bit I doubt she would want to listen to him try and comfort her. 

Guess we'll see what happens. 

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: November 02 2021 Title: Chapter 14: Broken Escape

Well that was unexpected. When you said that Drew escapes, I thought you'd spoiled the chapter ending, but then this happens.

Kurogane: I bet that Casey will go nuclear on Susan, and this is Drew's chance to hook her up with Val and Taylor and bring everything down.

Randomer: I'd be surprised if Susan doesn't make Katie her next target.



Author's Response:

Haha, in hindsight I should probably change it since it does seem like I spoiled what happens.

I think you're on the money with how Casey will react though...

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: November 03 2021 Title: Chapter 14: Broken Escape

Who knows, if she was to inherit her parents wealth she could get even bigger... But we will see haha.

That will depend on a key detail: who actually owns the family's money?

1) We've established that, until you're 21, your size is based on your family's money*. This means that Casey could be very big with her own money or her parents' money.
2) How much money do Susan and Michael have in their own rights? Do they each have enough money to be big by themselves, or is Susan big based on Michael's money? We know from the last scene that Michael has a lot of money that Susan doesn't have access to.

So who owns the money, and who inherits should Michael's missing persons case go cold, will determine whether Casey keeps her existing size, or gains a few feet.

*This would make for a weird situation in universities for the undergraduates. You'd have a lot of people suddenly losing a lot of height in their final year. You'd also have a situation where the Master's and PhD students on $15-20k stipends, and postdocs making $30-40k, are working on research projects like science apprentices under the supervision of a professor who makes $100-150k, or more if they do consulting.



Author's Response:

Ok so, that initial comment was not really based on much but you've brought up some interesting points.

The way I imagine it is that couples can decide on a size that is half of both their net worth's combined, so someone poor could be elevated by someone wealthier if that wealthier person was willing to take a hit to their size. Although, couples can also decide to keep their sizes separate. Susan and Michael were the former, so it's safe to say that they are both wealthy enough to be big, however due to Michael's personal wealth that he has not shared with Susan it's safe to assume that he has probably helped increase her height through an agreement. Both parents own their own money, but who gets Michael's personal sum really depends.

This is a very interesting thought, would it affect the amount of people going into these lines of work knowing that they'd have a miserable time towards the back end of their degree? I guess the silver lining is if you finish your med degree you're gonna be quite well off after, I imagine that people doing such lucrative degrees would have some backing from wealthy families and whatnot too though. I like this idea though, could be the basis of a sequel or future story within this world, would lead to some interesting dynamics. 

Thank you for your reviews though, you always make me think about my worldbuilding on a more realistic level, I appreciate it!

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: November 05 2021 Title: Chapter 15: New Plan

First, Drew tries to destroy Casey for Val. Then, he tries to recruit Casey to make a deal with Val. Then, Casey does her own thing, something that could get her in serious trouble, as Val originally intended.

And what errand is Susan on? Can't be good.



Author's Response:

Drew's been doing a lot of side hopping, hopefully he lands on the right side.

Agreed, not sure how well this will go.