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Summary:

Nell Winthrop had always gotten whatever she wanted, except the one thing she desired most. Now, on her eighteenth birthday, her father has recruited a young scientist to help her finally grow taller.

They'll succeed beyond her wildest dreams.


Categories: Giantess, Young Adult 20-29, Growing/Shrinking out of clothes, Slow Size Change
Characters: None
Growth: Mini GTS (16-30ft)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 25482 Read Count: 67707
[Report This] Published: October 27 2010 Updated: March 24 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: March 24 2014 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

It's good to see this story come back. It's been a good one and it has potential.

Summary:

A curse placed on a princess causes her to steadily grow. However, when a dark threat looms over the land, her large burden may be the kingdom's only chance for salvation.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Crush, Gentle, Growing Woman, Sci Fi / Fantasy, Slow Size Change, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: Amazon (7 ft. to 15 ft.), Brobdnignagian (51 ft. to 100 ft.), Giant (31 ft. to 50 ft.), Mini GTS (16-30ft)
Shrink: None
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: Size & Sorcery
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 110218 Read Count: 189783
[Report This] Published: May 23 2011 Updated: June 29 2011
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: December 08 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Visitor

I love a good gentle story, and Caroline is the Platonic form of gentle. It works well because she always finds a way to solve a problem without killing people, and it improves a situation (like when she appointed a better leader of the nomads).

The family had excellent chemistry. The text radiated their love for one another.

The end was great. I have a thing for women with tremendous magical power and women with tremendous height, so a 70ft sorceress queen with a heart of gold was delightful. One the one hand, it would have been quite satisfying to see her stay a 70ft magic queen. On the other hand, reducing herself until she could hug Luke and her family was exactly what her character would have done.

I have a thing for ancient history and mythology, so it was nice to see the monsters have some similarity to Grendel and Grendel's Mother.

That Caroline was written by the same person who wrote Julia and Carly shows the range you have. If you're interested, try another story like this.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing!  I'm always curious what people think of this one, given how different it is from my other stories.  Nice catch on the Beowulf influence in the monsters.  While I definitely love this genre, the greater emphasis on character and narrative takes more time to plan out than, say, something with Carly or Julia.  In general, too, fewer readers are willing to check out stories like this, so I usually go with what "sells."  In the future, though, I'm interested in trying another gentle fantasy story, albeit in a shorter format.

Julia by Jacksmith Rated: X starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 445]
Summary:

Five shrunken strangers become playthings in the twisted fantasies of a psychotic teenage girl and must work together if they ever hope to get out of her clutches alive.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Adult 30-39, Butt, Couples , Crush, Entrapment, Feet, Gentle, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, Slave, Unaware, Violent, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 76 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 134130 Read Count: 868261
[Report This] Published: November 05 2011 Updated: July 20 2015
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: March 28 2015 Title: Chapter 70: Chapter 70: What Matters Most

Reading smoki's review gave me an idea, so I'm going to make a prediction: They'll rig the PMRD to shrink Julia when she uses it, but she'll grow instead. This is partly based on a comment in Shrink Act Files, that there was a lot of her to cover up.



Author's Response:

You're right to think there are clues to this story's outcome in Shrink Act Files. Unfortunately, for now I can't comment on whether your theory is right or wrong.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: July 20 2015 Title: Chapter 76: Epilogue: Good Night

Congratulations on bringing this epic story to a conclusion. It's very satisfying just to see a very long story actually end (the end of Titan: Exile was the same way), the events that ended this story were also very satisfying, and the whole story was a fine psychological thriller.

The the most interesting thing about your recent writing, though, is not the stories by themselves, but the larger world you're building. I passed over Time Out and Toy Teacher at first because I don't normally do that stuff, but I read them when it became clear that they're part of a story I want to follow. The only thing that ended here is Julia herself. Techilogic and its buddies still have a lot to do.

Also, "there was a lot of her to cover" from Shrink Act Files definitely doesn't refer to Julia now.

Author's Response:

Thanks very much! And I'm glad to hear the overarching world has drawn you in. Techilogic will indeed remain a very real threat even if Julia has been downed here. I try to make my individual stories accessible so no one is required to read all my stuff to understand it, but I like to think there are certain benefits to having all the information. And you're correct that SAF's ending wasn't referring to Julia.  ;)

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: March 17 2015 Title: Chapter 68: Chapter 68: Inside Knowledge

You're building toward something riveting. In Shrink Act Files, and now here, you made it clear that a lot of abuses are happening around Techilogic, but gave next to no information about the company's higher-ups. I can't wait to find out what exactly Techilogic is and does.



Author's Response:

Thanks! I've purposefully been very frugal with information I provide on Techilogic to avoid spoiling stuff from future or ongoing stories, but more about them will continue to trickle out in relevant locations.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 19 2014 Title: Chapter 62: Chapter 62: Charlie Gets His

That's a fine angry giantess moment.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 16 2014 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61: Everything Happens at Once

Look at that, our villain does something likeable.

And next chapter will be interesting.



Author's Response:

I certainly hope it will be. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: March 19 2015 Title: Chapter 69: Chapter 69: All That's Good

This plan assumes, of course, that Julia's parents aren't in a position with Techilogic where they could just get a new one, and if they are what I'm guessing they are, they have a close relationship of some sort.



Author's Response:

Interesting thought, though regardless of whether or not Julia's parents are close to Techilogic, legally obtained PMRDs are incapable of affecting unauthorized targets, meaning Julia needs this one to be able to do her dirty work.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 06 2014 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57: Ménage à Julia

Julia might be the best written villain on this website. Scary and thrilling.



Author's Response:

Oh geesh, I'm gonna blush.  Thanks for reviewing good sir.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 11 2014 Title: Chapter 59: Chapter 59: Snitches Get Stitches

They have an escape route, they have a newborn baby to carry with them, and they may or may not successfully deal with Charlie. This is tense.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading/reviewing! Not a pretty situation, is it?

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 24 2014 Title: Chapter 63: Chapter 63: The Run

@Jacksmith: If the ending is a doozy relative to this, you're going to need to add a sixth star.



Author's Response:

I guess I'd better get to work on that before the next chapter post then. Thanks for reading/reviewing.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: May 13 2014 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60: The Miracle of Life and Death

Damn, that hit hard. RIP Anna.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reading/reviewing!

Summary:

The sadistic tales of Carly Arton as she abuses and toys with her shrunken brother Jack.

Set between A Little Blackmail 2: Carly's Pet Brother and A Little Blackmail 3: Life of a Toy.


Categories: Teenager (13-19), Young Adult 20-29, Entrapment, Feet, Growing/Shrinking out of clothes, Humiliation, Incest, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, Odor, Slave
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: A Little Blackmail
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 40786 Read Count: 206728
[Report This] Published: December 17 2011 Updated: May 30 2015
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 05 2014 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13: Jack Grows Back

Excellent look into Carly's mind. It gives us a great description of her thoughts and mindset.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing!

Summary:

Matthew has the chance of a lifetime as a devil offers to give him everything he ever wanted. The consequences though may be more than he anticipated.


Categories: Slow Size Change, Giantess, Humiliation, Growing Woman, Maternal
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 23703 Read Count: 85092
[Report This] Published: October 20 2012 Updated: March 06 2016
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: February 25 2016 Title: Chapter 11: Srsly, Don't Cross the Boss

This is a fun story. Keep it going.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: March 08 2016 Title: Chapter 12: Purgatory

Once he wakes up from this dream, he'll get to go from Dana to Candice. Not much of an improvement.

Summary:

Eight people have been selected to take part in a secretive reality/game show for a million dollars. It is not until they get there that they learn that they will be shrunk down bit by bit as they take part in various competitions! When a person reaches 1/16 of their normal size, they are eliminated. But is there more to this show and it's host, Betty, than it seems?

UPDATE: The complete story has now been finally uploaded, so dive in!


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Humiliation, Insertion, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play
Characters: None
Growth: Mini GTS (16-30ft)
Shrink: Doll (12 in. to 6 in.), Dwarf (3 ft. to 5 ft.), Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Munchkin (2.9 ft. to 1 ft.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m, FF/f, FF/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences, This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 71440 Read Count: 111943
[Report This] Published: January 06 2013 Updated: January 13 2014
Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 13 2014 Title: Chapter 14: Competition's End

I actually didn't think they'd go home so easily. But they did, and their goodbye felt really good. This time, I think you did much better in describing their last night. While you didn't mention every detail, you gave us seeds that our imaginations could grow. When you said 'dollhouse', I saw Sherri doing what Betty did earlier, and when you said 'sauna' and 'hot tub', I saw Sherri doing what Betty and Annie did in that scene.

I have some advice for Season Two. Go back, and touch it up a bit. If you haven't seen it in a long time, then you could easily look at it with fresh ideas and improve it in ways you didn't think of the first time around.

An editor/coauthor (depending on the amount of work done by the other people) could point out typos and make suggestions, and consider contacting another author about providing that (I'd be happy to).

You did well this time, so if it's a lot better as you claim then it's going to be fantastic. Take these even farther next time around:

1) Make sure Betty is a master manipulator and schemer. Think carefully about the information you give us, and either give us what we need to figure it would or what we need to be mislead and suprised.

2) Lots of variety in challenges and sex scenes, and don't make them too simple.

3) Give lots of thought to realistic and complex relationships and interaction.

I eagerly await the future of your series.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your thoughtful and intellegent feedback. I think I will look over Season Two with a spell/grammar check to smoothe over some of the more egregious typos. I consider myself a pretty mechanically sound writer but my spelling and grammar are rough around the edges sometimes, especially in my older works.

I'm pretty happy with Season One given that it was something I never really intended to publish or even show to anyone but closest friends at the time. If I wanted to get serious about it I could go back and rewrite the story and especially put some meat on the bones of the early chapters. However, my mind has moved on to other things by now. Plus, I'm not quite the same person I was 8 years ago and I'd find it hard to recapture the same feeling I had in the story. I think the story will have to stand as it is, flawed though it may be.

A lot of the things you criticised about Season One are improved upon in Season Two, particularly getting into depth with the characters and how they feel about each other and their situation. I tried to make everyone react to things in a way that was consistant with their characters. The sex scenes become more detailed as well, and there is a lot of variation between them. Most of the competitions are different than in Season One, and the ones that were carried over were altered in some ways. Generally, the biggest strength Season Two has over Season One is it's level of detail. Season Two is more than three times the length of Season One dispite it taking place over exactly the same amount of time.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 06 2014 Title: Chapter 11: Day 8

I loved this story when it first came out, and its great to see it return. All the different and changing situations keep it interesting, and you've managed to make a reality show that's interesting precisely because it's scripted. That twist at the end was excellent, and I want to see what Annie does. It seemed like Sandra was going to win and become Betty's partner, but at this point Annie's more likely and anything can happen. Keep this story going.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star
Date: January 14 2014 Title: Chapter 15: Epilogue

I have to agree, this is an excellent bit of backstory. Betty just got ten times better. Shrinking the scientists, and the mention of punishments (now I'm curious) did Betty wonders. It was clear that she's a schemer, but this establishes her as a proper villain. You mentioned that there are no windows, is there no door as well?

I just checked the Top Tens, and at 250 000 words it will be the fifth longest ever posted. That makes me very happy. I also like the note on your writing style. It sounds pretty good to me. You make a good point about not being the same person anymore. With that in mind, I think you're right in that it would be best not to mess around with it too much. It sounds to me like Season Two is going to be excellent.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed starstarstarstar
Date: January 08 2014 Title: Chapter 12: Day 9, Part 1

"But Annie turned it into her personal palace as she put Dave through every kind of thing she could imagine putting a four inch tall person through" Show, don't tell, thoroughly and with detail, makes every story better. This seems a bit anti-climatic after the end of the last chapter.

"Who are you rooting for?" That depends on what really happens to the winner.

I also noticed some typos in there. Closer proofreading, or an editor, would help here.



Author's Response:

I agree with you, I should have gone into more detail and I probably should have edited this story a little more carefully. Thankfully my writing ability has improved since 2006 and I don't have a lot of these problems anymore!

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed
Date: January 09 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Day 1

Also, I noticed that you haven't replied to reviews in a while. Review threads are better as a conversation.



Author's Response:

You are correct. I've been bad about that in the past, but I've made it a bit of a resolution to respond to every review I get from now on.