Penname: Lordrevan12 [Contact] Real name: John Giles
Member Since: June 19 2013
Membership status: Member
Bio:

I am a writer. That's all you need to know.


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Summary: This is about a wife who gets revenge on a cheating husband without killing him but giving a chance at rebirth.
Categories: Transformation, Humiliation, Adult 30-39, Entrapment, Incest, Mouth Play, Vore, Unaware
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4255 Read Count: 77687
[Report This] Published: November 22 2007 Updated: November 22 2007
Reviewer: Lordrevan12 Signed starhalf-star
Date: June 19 2013 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

The storie line is good but, You need to use quotation marks to show speach. Like

"Happy birthday, Sammy," Naru said raising her hand and cheering."

I would also suggest you work on showing not telling. You are telling us not showing us the emotions. As an Author it bothers me to see that.

Summary:

A depressed young man seeks psychological treatment, but ends up getting more than he bargained for when he shrinks in the office of Dr. Sandra Adams, who has a very unusual appetite.


Categories: Young Adult 20-29, Gentle, Growing/Shrinking out of clothes, Instant Size Change, Mouth Play, Vore
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: This story is for entertainment purposes only.
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 8117 Read Count: 57504
[Report This] Published: June 21 2011 Updated: June 23 2011
Reviewer: Lordrevan12 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: June 19 2013 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Result

Very nice story and plot. An interesting story and quiet refreshing. You explained your ideas well and put them on paper perfectly.



Author's Response: Thanks very much. It's always fun to know people are still reading my older stories.