Reviewer: Lady Prey Signed
August 20 2009
Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Hey there, very erotic writing but yes, a little repetative.
Personally I would have liked a little more teasing in the vore passages whwere the helpless victims have a chance to anticipate their terrible trip and their eventual destination and the horror of being swallowed alive.
I've devoted a whole chapter to the victims terror of looking into her throat and realizing its sole purpose
and the erotic emotions of both victim and predator
as the action takes place as if in slow motion. Just a suggestion.
Anyway, I really enjoyed your story and hope you continue to write, It's refreshing to get the female angle on this. ladypreyAuthor's Response:
Thank you ladyprey ı wrıte wıth my emotions and that was how ı felt durıng that period ı am so glad you enjoyed my story dıd you masturbate whılst readıng it ıf so then ı was successfull x.