Penname: KYS [Contact] Real name:
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Summary:

A hosptial filled with shrunken visitors and staff. One maniac on the loose, hunting down said shrunken people for her own reasons and pleasure. Mostly pleasure. 


Notice! After consideration on my end I decided to redo a scene in chapter 4. The choice was entirely my own as, after thinking on the subject, decided what was originally there is a path better left untraveled. 


Categories: Giantess, Adventure, Young Adult 20-29, Crush, Feet, Footwear, Humiliation, Mouth Play, Unaware, Violent
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Lilliputian (6 in. to 3 in.), Micro (1 in. to 1/2 in.), Minikin (3 in. to 1 in.)
Size Roles: F/f, F/m
Warnings: Following story may contain inappropriate material for certain audiences
Series: Alpha-Beta
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 19105 Read Count: 26551
[Report This] Published: August 13 2021 Updated: August 20 2021
Reviewer: KYS Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 11 2023 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: There's A Maniac Within These Halls

Imagining Maya as a sexy anime villianess with that hair color makes her seductive in my mind.

Can't wait to see what she does next. Hope there's more detail on the experience of her victims inside he belly in future chapters... yum.

Summary:

Michael is the Janitor at Greenwood high school, having held the job for 22 years at this point. During another routine day he is cleaning the girls locker room after school, when he is suddenly shrunken. Unfortunately for him, the girl volleyball team just finished practice, and are heading back into the locker room to get cleaned up. Will he manage to find help from the massive students, or end up underneath them?


Categories: Humiliation, Teenager (13-19), Butt, Crush, Feet, Violent, Unaware, Odor, Footwear
Characters: None
Growth: None
Shrink: Nano (1/2 in. to 2.5 nanometers)
Size Roles: F/m
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2691 Read Count: 3105
[Report This] Published: July 05 2023 Updated: July 05 2023
Reviewer: KYS Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: July 07 2023 Title: Chapter 1: Another Day on the Job

As promised I deleted the old review and here's the new one.

Wow, great edit! Talia and the bag scenes definitely much improved. Honestly the poor fellow deserved better but oops, sucks to be shrunk around such girls!

Love how Michelle deals with him so swiftly. Really believes she did her team a favor lol. Not usually a fan of footwear crush but the callousness of his execution was so sexy.

Overall a great improvement. I noticed a few typos still, but nothing bad enough to warrant pointing them out.


Updating my rating from 4 stars to 5. Would be cool to see another story with different victim in a similar position with the other team members. Story has potential to lead to a series of one offs involving a shrinking pandemic in my opinion. 

Good work! This gives me an idea for my own first story, Nefarious. Didn't think of last time but re-reading the edit it crossed my mind.



Author's Response:

Hi! Glad to hear it improved that much, was still unsure of the quality even after the edits so thatís very nice! 


Still working on catching typos, I proofread my stories at least twice but always end up missing some, just something to work on I suppose. 


I certainly like the idea of this being an anthology type series later on down the line. Could see the team accidentally crushing a few other faculty around the school. Maybe a referee after one of their games? Also, glad to hear it gave you an idea, will have to check out your story soon!


 Thank you again for all these detailed critiques and suggestions, itís been very helpful!

Reviewer: KYS Signed
Date: July 06 2023 Title: Chapter 1: Another Day on the Job

In response to your response :)

I think adding some more details regarding the harm inflicted by Talia's phat, juicy arse would be good. Especially with how he falls into the bag. The bag scenario's biggest issue is lack of description that doesn't justify his "escape" per say. Is it a duffle bag? If so I don't see how he escapes. However, if its a backpack, which is tilted on its side somehow (maybe after Talia dumps her socks into it, it tips over which allows him to barely crawl out with his life). The story itself is good, I just think some minor detailed additions would do it a load of justice is all.

Also with the ending, which I'll spare for spoiler purposes, perhaps adding some detail on the sounds and feeling of his "death" if you know my drift, would also be a great service to the story.

The story being a one shot is mostly the reasoning for my previous critiques. With one off stories, they have to be almost perfect in detail, because there won't be future chapters to evolve and overcome previous ones, if you know what I mean.

I usually refrain from reviewing because you never know how the author will react to the slightest criticism, so I definitely appreciate your response!

If you do update the story, let me know. I'd be glad to delete the older review and post an updated review with your changes :)

Just respond to this review if you do so I get notified. I get emails for author responses.



Author's Response:

Hello! Just updated the story with those edits and suggestions, so I would love to hear what you think of the new version. Please be honest, the criticism is helpful, I've never written a story quite this violent before so I am still learning how to convey the content. I changed up his injuries slightly, didn't want to go overboard as I felt like that would make it nearly impossible to explain his escape from the bag if he was completely mangled. I also added a little more to the ending, drawing it out slightly. Looking forward to hearing your thoughts and any other suggestions you have for my future stories! :)