Beware of betrayal.
The build-up is there (is there going to be a shrinking part?). Would rate higher, but numerous grammatical errors.
Author's Response:
Thank you, vore is my passion i write what i feel a story needs to be interesting as well as sexy,otherwise the reader loses interest.There are not many authors who inspire or turn me on in this way unfortunately that is why i decided to pen my own feelings.
Amanda.
Two guys shrink themselves and then visit the house of two women. Not the smartest idea because these women are completely unaware of them.
Would be 10 if quotation marks were used correctly. Too many jerks and idiots.
Follow along and observe the life of John, a human born into a coven of witches as his family uses him for various purposes. Being his mothers familiar has perks, however. Some good, others... not as much.
Either way, you'll just have to wait and see, what happens behind closed doors, when you're only five inches tall, and frequently changed into objects by your insane family members.
Great start to a series! This would be a 10 if it weren't for too many ellipses. And violette... is that purple-haired?