Reviewer: Solar Wind Signed 
Date: June 08 2022
Title: Chapter 1: Truth or Dare
Oh man!!! So Molly was as evil as her friends and distant from her brother since he shrank and she moved? Well, this fixes most plot problems I saw... but man, you must admit, your story does nothing to show us that. The story shows her getting some drugs for her date, coming and telling Robbie's past events, then going away, then saying him goodbye in the morning after chatting a bit with him and with her friends scared about him telling her what they did, only that. If it wasn't for you explaining in a review reply the untold parts about her, the story would easily pass as a story with very un-encountering situations. Because of that, and even despite knowing your detailing are at least four stars, I can only give you three. Story coherency and plot is something which makes a lot for the story. I've read your other Morning Series stories by the way, they're good. You indeed likes smutty a lot, not complaining about that, sorry if my review seemed like a complaint. Far from that, it was just... showing that the story wasn't what I was expecting considering the passionate reviews, but as I said, it was MY FAULT (I meant that, for real), not yours, because I believed in the overly excited tone of the other reviewers and was thinking this story had a strong plot with thrilling cliffhangers yadda yadda. So no problem with your story man, no need to feel bad, for real.
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For Maximus: I'd recommend you to read the WHOLE story again, this time PAYING ATTENTION. Then re-read my review, and come back to talk. For real man, I agree with you: in this site there are lots of poorly written stories, but by your words in this newer review and your older review, I can only deduce that, for you, a good story is just about well detailed sexy evil stuff. Man, a good story is more than just how detailed is the event of a crying tiny boy being unwillingly forced deep inside his girl's asshole. There are LOTS of stories with poor detailing where the intriguing plot makes them GREAT.
If you read my review again, you'll see easily that what I disliked the most was the story un-encountering events, and plot holes, which were caused by a misunderstanding about Molly, caused by a lack of detailing about her relationship with her friends and brother. As the author now explained, most of these problems are gone, but for real: the story does nothing to show us that. We can only understand about Molly because the author replied with the info that should've been put in the story. Without it: plot problems. And tbw, if you don't think plot holes and coherency mismatches aren't a problem in a story, maybe you're here just for the smut, as most of the readers in this site are. Not complaining about that, you do your read the way you want, but if you're complaining about other reviews, at least be right about your POV.
And the only way to be honest and right about your POV is reading and fully understanding the story, something your reviews seem to show that you didn't. To put on the table a couple examples: you wrote that you were expecting the evil girls to go soft and regret what they were doing to Robbie, but the story didn't show a single line, before or while Molly recanted his story, that showed that the girls would reconsider. Their reactions to Robbie's past events weren't of regretness, but silently evil expectancy. The story was pretty well clear and detailed about it, showing their utter attention and the growing expectancy in their minds.
Another example: in your new review, you wrote that you were hoping for Robbie to be still in the girl's stomach when she got in the car, but the epilogue shows that it was already morning. It's easy to see that he was swallowed, puked, freed, the girls maybe did some little thing else, got asleep all drunk, woke up with a hangover in the morning (the epilogue even shows that), they got prepared, packet all their things up and ONLY THEN they finally, finally got into the car. Were you honestly hoping for Robbie to STILL be in Keighlee's stomach after SO MUCH TIME? He would've been digested long before and would be everywhere in the girl's body, as dissolved nutrients absorbed in her many cells after digestion. Or, if you wanna see things this way, his undigested remains would be at least in her ascending colon, waiting to be pushed through her large bowels and shat out a little hours later.
Also, the story says that this is set up in the Morning series: if you did the job of reading the other stories in the Morning Series (with attention, of course) you'd see that the tines, in the Morning series world built, doesn't survive more than some minutes inside a girl's stomach, probably suffocating before even being dissolved (the Morning Series doesn't explain the exact cause of their deaths, but considering the little time, this is more believable: if the cause of death was acid digestion, Robbie would've been puked out already too damaged to Molly not to see what happened, and probably even close to die).
So it's easy to see that, in your opinion to my review, the problem isn't my review, Or me. It's you who need to apply more attention to what you read. Being attentive just to the details in the sexy parts isn't being attentive at all, or: how can you praise a story for being detailed if you're not paying attention to the details? Remember what I wrote about coherency?
But whatever, you're reading just the smut.
