Can't help but wonder if his sister put 2 and 2 together after the fact...

Mmmm... My post-horny self still wants her to get somehow caught just for the hell of it, even if it is an alternate ending, but still, great read.

As a side note, the shrinking process makes him not need to eat or anything, but it doesn't stop bodily functions, does it? I imagine him getting a bit of payback at her by shitting in her mouth or smth, dunno. 

I see the butt tag <_< will we get him going micro in her butt or something like that?

Author's Response: He's defintely going in, but don't know how yet ;)

Spoilers ahead, beware



I've logged in after months of inactivity solely to comment on this story. Firstly and foremost, I'm somewhat please to see what you did, though I indeed was hoping Ollie would live to see another day.

The night before this chapter, I was debating with myself on how you would end your little story and, I came to the conclusion that you, as the writer, had three choices:

A) Deliver exactly what the reader comes to expect of the story based on what's already released

B) Deliver what the reader came to expect, but surprise them with a twist.

C) Completely surprise them with a somewhat unexpected, but not unforeseen, turn of events.

I'm pleased that you didn't opt to go with A, but rather B, which tells me you actually put the story above the fact that it is, in fact, a fetish read.

As the reader, I expect something when coming in, and I believe that the previous chapters kind of set the mood for a more story-oriented read rather than a completely fetish-focused one. As the writer, you want to deliver something.

In all honesty, I just kind of skimmed through the story, but it does seem to be a good read. I was mostly curious as to what would happen to Ollie; guess I kind of have a soft spot for what seems to be the story's main victim.

I'm giving this story a 9 out of 10, though I'm probably biased on not giving a full 10 on the note that you actually got me rooting for Ollie, though in hindsight I probably shouldn't have, given the title of the story.

Good job, I guess. Though I do see you haven't marked the story as finished; was that a mistake, or perhaps something more? I kind of wish to see an epilogue, or some alternate path in which Ollie gets to live, but other than that, I believe you already delivered what you wished to deliver.