Just a gal making her way in the gigantic world and trying not to step on people (at least, not too hard XD)
A young woman surprises her boyfriend with an expensive credit card purchase.
This was great!
Loved the descriptive interaction and that ending was well done too, I wonder if this will haunt her for years to come.
Oh, it very much will! Thank you for the comment!
Your time travel device has worked - except for one small problem - you're now shrinking as you bounce through the eras, helpless at the hands ( and feet) of the denizens of history! Will you be able to get back home before you shrink into nothing?
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Ok, I am late to reviewing but dropping one now XD
I love the concept of time travel in size stories, it always opens so many doors to fun content and interaction especially between past and modern day characters and cultural/societal differences. (and misunderstandings)
Your writing in these chapters is very well done, I love the use of language and time specific accents/vocabulary.
Your interaction so far in the chapters has been very evocative, really making the scenes pop out and visualized well when reading.
The in-shoe and foot content have been very sexy and hot to read as well as the tiny traveler's experience with these giantess (to him).
I have to agree with vegetaboy and Jsmith20. Sapphire is my favorite character so far (and the story isn't even far along XD).
Her characters attitude, personality and interaction with the tiny character are very cool, and feel exciting to see how they progress.
I have to also second Jsmtih20's idea. I would love a spin-off centrered around the time traveler sticking with Sapphire (maybe a gltich or broken component to his suit and tech. Maybe the chance of growing back to normal, or slightly bigger, but being stuck in that time, etc) I just would love to read a saphire spin off XD
Keep up the great work, these chapters have been a real gem to read.
I'm super glad you're enjoying it! It's reviews like this that really keep me going on the difficult days :')
Saffy has been so popular! I'll probably make it a Patreon goal to give her her own spin off, and I actually already have some ideas! ^^
In the world of the three races, Lilliputians are regularly discriminated against. These issues are no less difficult when you're a Lilli living in a Gulliveran city. When an opportunity presents itself, one tiny doctor must make a very difficult decision.
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This story has an interesting premise. I always love reading Guliveran size based society stuff.
You've written a good intro here and I'm looking forward to seeing more chapters as well as how these characters are going to interact.
Author's Response:
Thank you! It's a 4 chapter short story so don't expect anything crazy. I'm looking to upload chapter 3 in a few days so stay tuned :)
After Tim mistakenly drinks a mysterious, secret potion his mother brought back from a research trip to the Amazon, he winds up shrinking to a mere 1-inch tall; now, while his mother frantically works to formulate a cure for her tiny son, Tim is stuck at home in the care of his aunt, who starts taking advantage of her nephew’s “little” condition.
1/29/2024 — Based on the feedback I’ve received, I’ve decided to go ahead and write an epilogue to this story. I’m not sure exactly when it will be finished and posted, but I’ll be working on it as well as a few other small projects as I prepare to write my next novel. I just wanted to thank everyone for all their support and honest feedback. This story was just supposed to be practice for my novels, but it’s certainly taken on a life of its own.
Hooray for 175K reads! 🥳
So, you're what? Deleting reviews that are critical of the ending instead of leaving them up for others to see. (as I saw a critical review the other day which has now strangely, magically dissapeared, hm, wonder how that happened?)
I for one agree with the (now deleted, if anyone else sees this be warned your reviews may not last) review about the ending being a letdown. (but this was similar for 'with great power')
you set up Natalie as a caring, albeit somewhat distracted with her work, parent.
And throughout the story have Jules going through great lengths to keep the fact she's torturing her nephew (and sexually abusing him/raping him at one point) from her sister, and even here where she's worried about her sisters reaction as Natalie *seems* pissed off.
Only for Natalie to bend and shift around to Jules ideals......even when Tim is desperately telling her what has been happening, and Natalie has now seen/heard first hand some of the stuff she's done?
What would it take for Tim to be missing an arm for Natalie to say "Enough's enough, you're abusing my son for kicks." ?
The ending here was a let down for anyone who's read the story and were expecting a satisfying conclusion and some catharsis for Tim after suffering so much.
I know size based stories can often have bad endings, but the characterization has to fit, and here you just changed Natalie around at the last minute, purely to just screw with Tim.
Which fine, if you'd set Natalie up as someone who would be fine with her son being raped and tortured by her sister, fair enough. But that wasn't the case here, you forced her into the part of conspirator now with her sister purely to fuck with the character of Tim, when the narrative you yourself had established flies in the face of that.
For starters, I would direct you to red356’s recently reposted review as to exactly what happened, as he’s a much more reliable source than I. I had actually already copied his reviews so I could write a more detailed response before he deleted them, but he kinda beat me to the punch.
Secondly, I’m not the type of author who purposefully deletes reviews just because someone has something negative to say, all I ask is that they’re polite about it. The only times I delete review is because 1) It was duplicated (which occasionally happens), so I delete the duplicate; 2) There was blatant harassment (which I have never experienced on this site); 3) The chapter to which the review was tied was deleted (which I have only done a couple of times because certain chapters had formatting issues that I couldn’t fix by just copying and pasting over); or 4) The reviewer deletes their own review (which is what happened in this case)
I always appreciate honest feedback — positive and negative — and I agree that all of your complaints are well warranted with regards to plot and character development, but if you recall, I stated from the get go and in the series’ descriptor that this story was going to be focusing primarily on the scenarios rather than plot and character development. Still, I would like those things to stand on their own.
Believe it or not, this is the ending I had in mind the entire from the beginning, and I wasn’t even considering the possibility of a sequel. I think that by the end, story ended up taking a few turns even with an outline in place that I didn’t set it up well. While this wasn’t my first foray into the “domineering giantess” genre, it IS the first time I had a character go through a shift from sweet and caring to somewhat dominant. I gotta say that this chapter took a lot of writing, editing, and rewriting — I find dialogue driven chapters usually are — but honestly, I also felt during that time that this ending was going to be hard to justify. In the end, I had Natalie snapping from all the stress and Tim whining, but I know now that I definitely needed a better setup for even this character shift to be believable. Perhaps I should’ve made Tim misbehave and act out more, or hinted more at Natalie getting stressed and anxious from all the pressure…unlike with the issues you raised with my story “With Great Power…” forcing me to rethink the ending, I actually want to keep this ending in place and maybe make adjustments to the story later down the road to help it make sense. I think I will also move forward with an epilogue to help set up a potential sequel, but I want to work on other projects for a bit before I really work on that.
Ultimately, let me just say that I do appreciate your candor and letting me know of your complaints. I’ll try to make adjustments moving forward.
Leaving this review in lieu of being able to DM, and I don't think Shrinker82 is on the discord?
In response to the other replies.
To Red536, good to know your review wasn't deleted.
And to Shrinker82, sorry for jumping to the accusation that you had (I have seen on this site and others, reviews that were purposefully deleted from content for being critical, but still sorry for jumping to that conclusion so abruptly)
I want to make it clear, I don't 'dislike' or hate bad ends, or ones where the main character isn't given a happy ending.
I just think the story should follow some semblance of continuity, especially with characterization, size-erotica or not, I think if a person is presented one way (and shows no signs of changing from that characterization in any major way) they should be held to that same characterization.
I mean unless there's a shock/twist reveal (like this loving/kind character is secretly a serial killer, but keeps it under wraps, etc)
I just felt that Natalie wasn't shown to be someone who would be A) on board with her son's treatment at her sisters hands, or B) continue it/agree with her after learning the truth, as Shrinker82 had not written her in any way showing herself being open to such things.
Now if you *had* peppered in moments, as you said, of Natalie getting stressed out and anxiety ridden, and all the hard work she's putting into things, and the added personal pressure of it being her son on the line here, and maybe a few moments of her imagining him tiny at their feet rubbing them with Jules, etc. Or writing in Jules over time working on Natalie, hitting her weak points and slowly making her more and more ok with treating Tim like that.
I feel it would have made the final pay off here more palatable. (again some people may disagree and just say "oh this is just size erotica, don't take it so seriously.")
But the quality you presented here I feel is important, you wrote the content well, and I feel that a certain standard was set due to that good quality writing, that the characterization should also be upheld in the same regard. (Sorry if my earlier review may have come off as overly negative, I just feel after all that reading, the payoff wasn't handled well)
And if this is the ending you always had planned, go with it, by all means. It's just I think this ending could have been set up more, or laying the groundwork for it more so on Natalie's end as said above, and thus her agreeing to keep him small and subservient, would have been more in fitting.
I am interested in where a epilogue would take the characters, as well as were a potential sequel could be handled.
