Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: September 23 2020 12:52 AM Title: Mom's Cushion

Stories about being at someone's mother's abuse are usually something of a turn off.  i mean come on, it's your mom.  Reading your story however I was able to simply read it as this annonymous guy and a hot MILF, and his wicked sister.

Though I would have prefered Stepmom and Stepsister, your story is written so easy to read and so matter of factly that it worked out well.

Two things I especially liked.  The mom using the cushion like the "Contour Legacy Leg Pillow" {As Seen On TV}; who hasn't watched that commercial and imagined their head being used as this pillow.  Very nice touch.

Secondly, the transformation of Alisha into the mom's tennis shoe insole.  A terrific little addition.  Plus, it makes it seem like the two of them secretly took off and are fine, living life up someplace.

The only change I would make {aside from Stepmom and Stepsister} is at the end.  Rather than a spell to kill him, perhaps a spell to transfer him into another object.  An object of his cruel sister's choosing.

Keep up the great work.

Reviewer: SciFiCrazy Signed [Report This]
Date: September 21 2020 2:32 AM Title: Mom's Cushion

Nice story.  Like the sudden shock she pretended to have at it being permanent.  Almost feel it would have been funny if he had been one shoe and his girlfriend the other.