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Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 01 2023 12:52 PM Title: Chapter 34

Hello! Passing just to wish you a Happy New Year. May 2023 be full of
peace and inspiration for all of us!



Author's Response:

Happy belated New Year, Mr in A suit! Thanks for still reading!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17 2022 4:06 AM Title: The Beginning

     So my interest in her Mother being big, is granted mostly kink related ( mother/daughter stuff), how ever there is the aspect that her mother left after Her sisters " death".  This also tied in with the fact that she didn't want children, I think it would be interesting for her to see her daughter shrunk and probably going see this was why I didn't want children.  Would she be cruel, indifferent or would her mothering side try to come back ( mind I don't think Annabel would except and help from her mother by choice, but that's the rub and the interesting part, if her mother is still big, ANnebell would be in no shape to ignore her mother, i mean her Mother could force the issue of helping her or what ever, yes I'm kinky and wouldn't mind seeing a mother daughter scene, but i don't think it would fit this story,. (Poor Annabell, most of us want to see her have a very bad time).

    So yea that's why I would like to see her mother, and her still be big.  Of course her being small would also have alot of potential, I really don't want her to be dead.  Of course that would mean even more characters in this already massive story.  

    I was wondering, if there was any chance of an update this month,(christmas gift) other wise see you next year. Hope you have a Merry CHristmas and a Happy New Year.



Author's Response:

Haha, everyone wants Annabelle to be miserable. But without going into spoiler territory, I've been going back and forth with how I want to deal with the whole issue of Annabelle's backstory/parents. You've given me a pretty interesting perspective. 


Thanks Ralgar!

Reviewer: GhostWriter44 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 09 2022 6:23 AM Title: Chapter 34

I always forget to leave a review after I’m done reading lol. But a great chapter as always! Really disappointed that Naomi didn’t go through with swallowing Camilla, that scene was turning out really hot, especially in front of Annabelle. But I know you want to flesh that out more so I understand. Always looking forward to the next one of these. Really hoping Nell is secretly really cruel too but I doubt that’ll happen. One can dream though right 🤣

Author's Response:

Ha! I love your sadism, GhostWriter.

Vore is not off the table for the rest of the series, especially with Naomi around. As for Nell...I think she's a bit more complex than most would believe. 


Thanks for reading! 

Reviewer: Nightwatch Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 08 2022 3:15 AM Title: The Beginning

First off want to say great work at the started of the chapter with Naomi holding Annabelle down well her mother insert the tracking chip in her body, it was a very scary scene that drive Force that Annabelle was out of escape options now that she has a chip in her body making it permanent for her to remind the girls pet for the rest of the her life, the scene that got me next was the one that showed us Camilla, at first I thought she was going to be a feared and scared girl, but it was the complete opposite, she was confident and brave with the way she acted, but under all that she still misses her dad and doesn't want her dad to get hurt, also wanted to say I'm glad Annabelle used her charms to stop Naomi from killing Camilla, and I hope she can reunite Camilla with her dad somehow without them dying, ask for Naomi's dad thinking about getting Annabelle pregnant, I hope that's just a threat and not something being foreshadowed, for her future, if it is I hope it gets stopped before it happens, ask for the next scene I really do hate spiders, and I can't imagine how Annabelle can feel after that happened it was a good thing Nell saved her when she did, after that happened I believe the cage would be replaces something else so that never happens again maybe a dollhouse for Annabelle? As for the parents I can't believe they're willing to manipulate their daughters by having animal be used as a third wheel between Naomi and Nell but that's just me. P.s keep up the good work and sorry for not getting this review done sooner, I was busy brainstorming a theory on your series for the past few weeks I plan to post it on the review once it's done, about Annabelle and I strongly believe that Annabelle isn't a type zero but rather a new kind of shrink that hasn't been seen before and I hope you see it when it's posted when it's there for to hear your thoughts on it. Pretty good chapter so far and I hope to see more.



Author's Response:

Hey Nightwatch,

Camilla's characterization is something I had a fun time writing. I initially had her more timid, but it worked better with her being assured and confident (as much as a captured Shrinkee could be). 

I can't comment on your theory, but there's a lot of things about to be revealed in the upcoming chapters when it comes to what's going on with Annabelle. I'm very excited (And terrified) for you guys to see the full reveal.


Thanks for reviewing Nightwatch!

Reviewer: Naoru Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 15 2022 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 34

I made a little something for you!I wasnt sure how to send it to you since I dont know your social media or email or anything but I made the formidable four for sims 4!I uploaded all of the screenshots to my twitter, I really hope you like how I did them!

https://twitter.com/NaoruReimarch/status/1592361933243809797



Author's Response:

This is soooooo cool!  I love seeing how you guys view the FF. These are really good, and I've never even considered the Sims as an outlet for character creation. Thanks Naoru, this made my, like, year.


Also I appreciate Harper's abs. 


Thanks again

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: November 14 2022 8:02 PM Title: Chapter 34

    First off I loved chapter 33 with her sister, it revealed alot i think.  I loved the way u described the base, and i love how they get around the city, it does make me wonder how they get around the world though, i imagine flight would have alot of problems.  HONestly  the former commander sounds kinda like a coward, and a moral coward at that.  If u had lied like that to me u can forget about and fondness i might have had for u, ( this is how feuds can start).  He did die in not a bad way though, i mean if your going to die, die doing what u love.  But clear the air before u do seesh.  

     NOw chapter 34, well Naomi's parents are about what i thought, and that is terrible, I want to say that Mollys mother ( use that term lightly) still ranks as the worst but these two are terrible, i mean playing both daughters off of each other, thats wrong.  Well taking the blood is concerning, but we know the resistance has plans in the works.

     So we didn't get as much Naomi as i hoped, but that has been the pattern for the other girls to, so i am looking forward to time with Naomi.  Like anther reviewer said and i have said to, Naomi has seem to get shafted with the on screen time with Annabelle compared to the other 3.  Not a criticism, you have a lot of balls in the air, and already this beast is massive, somethings were going to have to give, but that is the reason i am looking forward to next two chapters, which by the way i am really glad for, i was wondering how you were going to balance naomi and nell in just two chapters.  

    SO Nell is getting access to Annabelle behind Naomi's back, I see no problems with this going forward what so ever.( sarcasm in case it wasn't apparent).  To be honest I just don't see Nell as a workable solution to Annabel's problem and I am willing to bet that Nell was her own hang-up's that will come out during this next chapter ( to be honest would take an act of GOD for that to not be the case with this particular set of parents of the year candidates). 

     So yea I am really looking forward to seeing what happens next.

     



Author's Response:

Ha! Yeah, Grey definitely died doing what he loved. I think Artemis will hold onto conflicting feelings about her mentor and what he ultimately ended up deciding. 

Also don't worry, Naomi will definitely get her time in the spotlight. You're right, this story is massive, so I'm trying to make sure I'm not missing anything or any plots.

I'm excited to see what you think of the upcoming chapters as Naomi and Nell' personalities start to become more pronounced...for better or worse.


Thanks for your thoughts Ralgar, glad to see you're still enjoying this story. I always appreciate your enthusiasm, it keeps me writing. 

Reviewer: Naoru Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 13 2022 8:59 PM Title: The Beginning

Okay omg this story is the gift that keeps on giving, it gets better and better, and I have to say, the contrast between Naomi and Nell and her parents who are the first to openly say they would kill and dissect her, makes for a really good narrative. I love that even Naomi's parents have noticed her change and I truly believe that Naomi's feelings for Anabelle are honest. I just love her so much, I feel like she is getting higher in my steem hahaha

Also, I liked Camilla, and I really hope Anabelle can save her somehow. Now about Nell, there is a say in my country that goes "better the bad you know than the unknown good" or smth like that, roughly translated from spanish, and that may just be the case with Nell. Maybe Naomi knows something about Nell that we dont. Maybe the bug eating jokes means she eats shrinkies, though Naomi does that as well, or maybe she is the kind of shy loner with more problems than it meets the eye or wanting to control someone...?or maybe she is perfectly fine and I'm biased, Idk. 

Now about Naomi's dad and that implicit threat of getting her pregnant...oh dear that would be some nightmare fuel.

Waiting for a new chapter soon!



Author's Response:

Hi Naoru!


Yeah, I think Naomi's change is really obvious to people who know her and closely watch over her (i.e her parents). Glad to see you like Naomi, she's going to have some solid moments to shine in the upcoming chapters. 


And very intriguing thread you're pulling at with Nell. I won't say too much about that, but at the end of chapter 35, I think we see a glimpse of another side of Nell. 


And yup, Annabelle being impregnated would not be fun for her or the victim--I mean baby.


Thanks for commenting Naoru! I love your insights!

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 10 2022 2:18 AM Title: Chapter 34

Something was bothering about my last comment, but I could not pin down what. Now I know. I got so carried away about the new information regarding type 0 and forgot something crucial about this arc: Anna also has a sister, we just got confirmation she is alive and their relationship is the complete opposite of Nell and Naomi.

I focused so much on the feelings that I believe Nell harbours for Anna – and could lead to some desire and imprinting – that I forgot Naomi and how she
could also fell some form of true love (a.k.a respect) towards Anna.

Yes, she is cruel, but equally warped. This last chapter goes to some lengths to make it clear a trait of Naomi that has already been brought up several times: how she tries to hide behind a mask what she really feels and is. You see, if Naomi really hated her sister and acted like Leah and the others, she wouldn’t be one to pull Nell out of harms way.

But she did. The chapter made it clear she were the one who did. The chapter also made a point to make Anna remember her own sister while showing us how perverted Mr. and Dr. Sano are as they brought up both their
daughters.

And in that perversion, what do they want? Their daughters to love each other, but only in name, only as a brand (and that is exactly what the F-4 are: a brand to Naomi, as the heir, to stick to). My Goddess, I pieced all this while at dinner!

It didn’t even occur to me as I read that Anna might work towards healing Nell and Naomi’s relationship. But it might! That way we would have not only
the start of Naomi’s redemption, but Anna gaining true allies – and maybe romantic interests – within BSA.

Judging by Artemis priorities, Annabelle will need Nell and Naomi.

Sorry, sorry. My other comment focused too much in one piece of information instead of looking at the chapter as the start of Nell AND Naomi’s main arc. Sisterhood is something central in the narrative and you left the Sato sisters arc as the last, a possible turning point in Anna’s misery at the mercy of the BSA.

I don’t expect, if it happens, that Naomi just completely change in a single day. And she will most likely feel a rivalry with Nell when Anna is involved… but they will no longer be enemys or the heir of the Sano’s talking to the ugly duck of the family. They will be sisters. And sisters who fell deeply in love with the same shrinkee who is suffering because of them and their families.

I hope you see this new comment before posting chapter 35. Again, I am grateful for all your effort. Thank you and until the next chapter.



Author's Response:

This is such a well-thought out point, Mr in A suit.

I can't speak on what hasn't happened yet, but Naomi and Nell's relationship most certainly has some parallels between Annabelle and Artemis'. If you've read the newest chapter (Spoiler for ch 35), you probably saw a snippet of Nell and Annabelle comparing their better-liked sisters. 

Whether Naomi and Nell grow closer as a result of their shared love of Annabelle is yet to be seen. It may be the very thing that shatters their relationship permanently...


Thanks again for the comment, Mr in A suit.


You always make me consider my characters in a deeper and new way.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 08 2022 1:07 AM Title: Chapter 34

Poor Anna get chipped like some common kitten...not that there's anything wrong with kittens but she's peoples! This likely hinders her plans of escape greatly but her determination seems to be shining through even if she's seemingly given up trying to deal with the never ending stream of bullshit thrown her way. I am encouraged that she's seemingly now ignoring Poppy which is a good thing in itself given her ideals on praising the Foursome over her own humanity.

Anna seems to have gained an ally in Tessa if she makes it past the next meeting anyways. Add her with Nell, the Freedom Fighters and Stephen and she might make it out of this yet. I mean it is highly unlikely given how things are stacked against her but at least she isn't alone in her fight. Plus there is still her tank of a Step-Sister out there surely coming to claim her mousey from these false idols.

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Why this segment did not angry up my blood about mermaids being different colors! I fully expected there to be a rampant discussion on red mermaids vs blue and instead we get all this giantess stuff.

Anna is a really good sport to put up with all she has even from her fellow tinies, she really could use a win of some sort or just a meatball sub. Though I am surprised nobody has really tackled having an army of tiny beauty slaves though. 

Given the amount of Giantesses in this fetish that there hasn't been someone to either shrink or gather up their own pre-shrunken glam squad.

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Well at least she has some positive news to send back to Dufront so kind of a win!

It really does seem like the not so good Dr. created this mess but Naomi couldn't exactly murder him...well until she fully got her inheritance so she took it out on the poor girl. Cammie was very smart though in accepting her fate whilst trying to educate Anna in not fighting too hard to avoid more suffering for herself and others.

I did kind of have a feeling she'd be the model they chose when first mentioned so it was nice not to see her end up eaten during her big hope spot.

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Those BSA jerks are going to keep using that mother card until Anna eventually has to snap and kill them in their sleep. Not sure how she will but if there was justice somewhere in this world or hers it would totally happen.

Something tells me however even if she does not wake up that Naomi's replacement Poppy is likely not making it through the night at least not in one piece.

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Anna getting stabbed in the chest with a needle and nobody offered her any coke prior, very rude.

That said the line about children has given me pause since knowing she can't procreate with the Foursome leaves me to fear they'll find some -other- way to force it upon her. Likely with horrifying results for the offspring/Anna even -if- she is well protected by the Foursome.

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Spiders? Really? After everything that Anna has had to survive you throw giant spiders at her like she's Jill Valentine or whichever one fought the giant spider. Shame on you!

Good thing Nell was there to help her and we've discovered she seems well versed in forms of hacking/getting around BSA created safeguards...good to know...good to know.

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The plot seems to definitely be thickening with this power play by the Sanos to try to steal Anna right ou from under the Foursome without them knowing. A bold gambit but will it pay off in the long run.

In the meantime it is nice to possibly see Anna getting a break from the asshatery of her life to spend some time with Nell. It will be nice to see her get to enjoy things again and have conversations with people who aren't baby talking or trying to shove her in places she doesn't want to go.

I personally think Nell is a scapegoat for some nefarious bullshit to be revealed later but hopefully this somehow backfires on the lot of them and gives Anna/Nell an advantage in her pursuit of freedom.

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1. Cammie seems to be able to handle herself and understands things better than Anna when it comes to swimming upstream. I root for her escape but hopefully it doesn't lead to an unfair demise via things out of her control.

2. The Sanos are pretty much tied with Leah and Molly's parents as the shittiest of the bunch. The only ones really who really seemed not fully horrible were Harper's and only because they seemed more focused on being perverts than really ruining Anna's life.

3. I think Nell will be wonderful for Anna! The rest of them not so much but those two together seem like the best possible outcome for Anna beyond her family...well most of them or her friends.

4. You really missed the boat on that section not being included in Spooky Month.



Author's Response:

Hey AdamX


God, your reviews always make me laugh.

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Annabelle getting chipped was something I'd planned on for a while, but with certain plot points coming up, I needed it done soon. Yeah, it'll dampen any hopes she may have been capriciously entertaining for escape, but who's to say what will happen in this crazy story...


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LOL @ the mermaid thing. I really was flabbergasted  when I realized how those topics had overlapped like that, it was completely coincidental. And I agree, there should be more tiny beauticians! Although, I doubt the FF would want Type 1 Shrinkees touching them.


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Yup, Camilla lives...for now! I'm joking, but I think the Duforts' story should be wrapping up pretty quickly--for better or worse? Gonna have to see. That being said, I liked writing about the tiny model. She's very resourceful and snappy.

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Ah, you were on point with Annabelle's poor substitution's fate. He never had a chance.


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Can't say anything about the potential for offspring, but it is a pretty grim thought.


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Hahaha, Annabelle and bugs (the real kind, not the slur) are just not a combination that works out well for the Shrinkee. And good eye noticing Nell's aptitude for bypassing BSA tech... 

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I do also like Nell and Annabelle moments because I try to limit the amount of inner monologue Annabelle has, and Nell's presence is a good way to develop both their individual characters and their dynamic as a whole.


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Regarding your number 4 comment, Dude...I always have plans of the perfect time to release these chapters, but people keep making me be an adult and fulfill "responsibilities" so I'm always just a little off. For example, the upcoming chapters after the Sanos revolve around Christmas and New Year's. I was kicking myself throughout the holidays. 


Anyway, thanks for your thoughts. Always love to see what crazy comment you're going to leave for me. 


Thanks!

Reviewer: Mr in A suit Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 07 2022 8:37 PM Title: Chapter 34

 I had planned on commenting chapter 33, and then saw 34 was out. What
a day! And I totally support more chapters for the Sano arc! God knows how sattisfied I am to see Nell and Anna together.

Anna became exasperated because she didn’t stand up for Tessa, but she has no real power in business matters and it’s just too cute how Nell became so selfaware of her opinion. Anna just can’t see it because: 1. usually she is the one being selfaware of others; 2. Nell is bigger than a building to her.

But, despite her lack of power, Nell acts out whenrever Anna is involved – she is probably the first person to treat Nell with kindness and friendship inside the BSA and the same is also true to Anna. They are lonely and have a lot in common.

Does that mean Nell will help with the Dufort’s reunion? Maybe, but she will certainly want to keep Anna to herself. The reason is simple: Nell will imprint on Anna the same way Steven’s owner did. If you asked me now, I’d say neither Dr. Sano nor anyone knows what Anna really is.

Everyone assume she is just type 0 because she has the healing factor, but, as Dr. Sano said, she is one of a kind, something that has been pointed many times in the past. She is stronger than Bitsy, Steven is not imprinted but Poppy only appears to her and we can assume her healing factor is also stronger. The first one in almost a decade? So she can very well be something a little different.

Yes, Poppy is obsessive but over any and all giants and giantess. Poppy doesn’t really care who, she will call any girl her goddess. Why? If everyone
can be, no one really is to her. The only one Poppy really cares…

It’s really something to think. Seeing how Naomi treats her, how she is not used to praises and is not regarded as a heir, I can understand why Nell would even be willing to imprint on Anna if it meant forging an unbreakable bound between them.

And Anna and Naomi? Oh I can see a dream sequence: Naomi has Poppy in her hands, but she is not the big one here. Soon a shadow is cast upon the two as a certain stale stench impregnates the air. Naomi doesn’t understand, but Annabelle remembers the aroma of Nell’s socks.

I will comment more on Artemis, but I need to think after this last chapter.

You always put a lot of effort and I just want you to know that I am grateful. As always, thank you for your dedication and for sharing on the site. I might
not comment as often as I did due to work, but I am reading. I am going to follow this story till it’s over!



Author's Response:

Hey Mr in A suit,


Another thought provoking comment. To be honest, I haven't given much thought to Annabelle's Naomi nightmare yet, but your idea is interesting. Though, I'm not sure how much I want Naomi and Nell to interconnect just yet.

As always, your theories are always fun to read. 

I'm glad you're liking Nell and Annabelle's dynamic. Their relationship will start showing some interesting parallels to other characters pretty soon. 

I'm struggling to come up with something else to say that isn't a spoiler, so instead I'm going to leave with: I think you are going to really enjoy the upcoming chapter.


Thanks again as always Mr in A suit. 


And don't worry about commenting. Whenever you can, I appreciate it.


Reviewer: Tigerchevy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 07 2022 2:22 AM Title: Chapter 34

Another enjoyable chapter. I do have to acknowledge that Naomi seems to always get the short end of the sexual scenes. All the other girls and afew parents have had full on scenes with Ana but not Naomi. I don't want to judge that too hard since we still have more chapters but hope we finally get something spicy with Naomi soon.



Author's Response:

Thanks Tigerchevy and yes your comment was definitely a huge factor in the Naomi scene that I included in the most recent chapter (I don't even know what chapter we're at right now tbh.)

I was mostly focusing on Naomi and Annabelle's spicy scene in an upcoming chapter (that, I can't wait for your reaction). But I added this scene because I realized you guys were right that Naomi seems to be getting the short end of the stick for "traditional" (LOL) sex scenes. 


So yeah, keep telling me what you guys want to see, and if it fits in with the story I'll have no problem adding it! 


Thanks again, Tigerchevy!

Reviewer: Huggler Signed [Report This]
Date: October 19 2022 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 33

I'm back again! Caught up with the story, really getting interested in things now that we're seeing more of the resistance.

I feel like there HAS to be a scene at some point involving one of the goddesses rampaging through resistance HQ, possibly hunting for Artemis or just trying to destroy them in general. I can see it already, one or two of the goddesses capturing random shrinkees as they stomp around, trying to cause as much damage as possible. 

I think I just really want to see Artemis emperiled, like, she's the strong, confident leader of the resistance it would be pretty damn hot for some airhead giantess to find her and capture her, though ultimately I want things to end well for her and her sister. But doesn't mean we can't have some fun sexy time on our way there right? 😉 

Looking forward to the next installment! 



Author's Response:

Hey Huggler!!

Glad to hear from you again. 

Those are some interesting visuals you're conjuring up about the FF and HQ.😏

Hahaha damn you really are cruel, what did Artemis ever do to you? 


Thanks for the comment Huggler, hope you're still enjoying the story.


Reviewer: Nightwatch Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 08 2022 4:23 PM Title: The Beginning

This was a very interesting chapter to say at the latest but I wasn't expecting for Annabelle sister to not be a type 0 as well seeing they both are twins you would think both of them to be type 0 because of it being genetic, as for beth being the commander that was pretty obvious from the start but I really thought she would be like Annabelle as well so that a big surprise, as for bitty I still feel like he going to disobey his commander orders to save Annabelle but learn that her blood already infected a shrink many chapters go aka Rebecca, also i was thinking if Annabelle blood get tested by nami mother which found out about it and Annabelle has a another incident with Rebecca who influenced by her blood, like nami and her sister Nell see a obedient shrink wanting to serve Annabelle because of being influenced by her blood that nami decided to allow Rebecca live as a shrink servant or maid to Annabelle, which would allow Annabelle to have at least one companion even if  said companion is obedient towards her, also i think it would show how danger Annabelle type 0 abilities are to others shrinks and because Annabelle doesn't want any shrinks to die she most likely would use her own blood or her own influence to keep shrinks like Rebecca live if it they get inflection by her, these are just My thoughts.p.s would love to see Annabelle reactions to seeing infected Rebecca again and how Annabelle reactions to her as well as nami and Nell reactions as well 



Author's Response:

Hmm, the genetics of Type 0s is a little tricky. It'll come up more, but so far no one truly knows what causes someone to become a Type 0. 

You're also right in realizing Annabelle's blood is a very important factor in this story. Can't say anything else, but you've got interesting predictions going on there. I'll be interested to see what you think of chapter 34. 

I wanted to comment on the Rebecca of it all but...I won't. I don't trust myself to not accidently spoil anything.


Thanks for your comment Nightwatch, I like where your mind is at.

Reviewer: Naoru Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 06 2022 5:50 PM Title: Chapter 33

That was a really interesting interlude!Seeing how the resistance lives and what happened to Anabelle's sister was really cool. Also, totally called that the commander was Anabelle's twin hahahaha Is she going to help Anabelle or will she abandon her as not to risk the future of her people?I dont think is as binary as that considering Anabelle has been hinted as being important for shrinkies and more than just a normal type 0 so her survival and not being used by the organization, but we'll see. Still rooting for an imprinting ending, and for Zoey to get her just desserts hahaha

Thanks for the update!



Author's Response:

Hi Naoru!

I'm glad you liked seeing the resistance's HQ. I wanted to show how they're able to pull off so many of their missions against the BSA. And good on you for guessing Beth's identity. 

We'll see about that imprinting ending, and Zoey is most certainly returning.


Thanks for the comment Naoru!

Reviewer: Yeso Signed [Report This]
Date: October 01 2022 7:09 PM Title: The Beginning

Would like to write a post where it's more about the story itself than a chapter specifically: 

As for the believability of the story, there is a weak point in my view, but it is very easily remedied by an explanation in the story. 

People take it too easily for granted that the coffins are empty. If the BSA has been running their operation for decades, then it simply can't work that the world takes it for granted that the coffins are empty, no one really asks, there is no research on it. The father is even not really surprised to have lost two daughters in this way.

(But maybe this is explained somewhere and I just missed it)


However, it can be explained by the fact that the same scientists who think that shrunken people are not capable of surviving on their own, also think that the "sudden shrinking" could be intensified by fear of life. With the explanation the world resigned itself why with fake accident places of shrunk ones no corpses can be found. 

According to these scientists, the fear of death should trigger shrinkage, which is why bodies are sometimes not seen at accident sites. However, no evidence can be collected on this, because the experiments on this would be unethical. 


Apart from this, the story seems so frighteningly believable that I could almost believe here secret messages of a person from the upper class are sent. 



Author's Response:

Hey Yeso,

Interesting comment about the coffins...can't say much about it, but it definitely is (briefly) mentioned again in an upcoming chapter, so good catch. I will say you're right in that there is a general societal understanding that Shrinkees will often die in ways that don't leave much of their remains. I can't speak more on it, but keep your eyes open in the chapters after the FF's home visits. 

As for the believability of this story--thank you and I apologize in advance when this story jumps the shark in 3-4 chapters hahaha

Reviewer: GhostWriter44 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 29 2022 5:44 AM Title: Chapter 33

Another great chapter, even without an appearance by any of the Princesses! I am worried now, though, that this story is going to have a happy ending lol. That would be the worst outcome in my mind 😂 guess we’ll have to wait and see! Always looking forward to another update to this story!



Author's Response:

Hahaha! I definitely didn't think that's how your review was going to go. Poor Annabelle! So many people are rooting for her failure.


Thanks, GhostWriter

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 28 2022 11:11 PM Title: Chapter 33

Well fuck, we've got quite the little lore dump here.

Artemis joining Jax in the bad ass metal arm club. She was truly brave for risking death amongst drunken sorority chicks to try to rescue her mentor. Many tougher and bigger people have died in that sort of den of terror.

Byte is quite the good kid for being the one to bring Anna being her sister to her attention long before Gray planned to. He's got a seemingly bright future in the resistance if he makes it that long.

The hammer drop was slightly expected by still welcome to see Anna has such a fierce ally in her war against the Foursome. It's gonna take all her sister has to fend off those lionesses when the time comes.

Not sure what she could've done about Zoey though, I don't even think the Foursome would cross her.

As for the dying words I trust her to make the right decision when the time comes. Anna is incredible at holding her own so something tells me she might figure a way out without needing Beth's help or endangering her troops too much.

Beth's a great and necessary character to this tale. She brings the weight of her people's plight vs saving her flesh and blood from a nightmarish hellscape. Seemingly whatever side she choices will come with immense hardships and perils in her life.



Author's Response:

I love me some lore. 

Haha, I didn't even go into super detail of the metal arm yet. Still holding off for that one. And yes Adamx, Annabelle's courage is nothing compared to her sister's who has faced off against the powerful Courtney and Kourtney. The Formidable Four, who?

And yes, Byte really cares for Annabelle, and is a bit frustrated with her sister's denial. 

And Annabelle has gone eight(ish?) years without her sister and she's survived so far. Beth may be surprised to see just how sturdy her twin is. 

Beth definitely has a choice to make--and that choice may be not to choose at all. Either way, it's hard times ahead for the Cooper sisters. 


Thanks again for your comment Adam! 



Reviewer: DarkStarGoddess Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 27 2022 9:00 PM Title: Chapter 33

I am happy to see an update, and personally I really liked this interlude.  I think Artemis is an interesting character, despite her obvious denial (even before Grey made it clear she knew he was lying, it seemed pretty evident that she knew that Annabelle was the pet in question but didn't want to admit it to herself).

Really like the shrinkee world you have created, I think it's neat, the HQ, their little gadgets, and their capability despite their size.  I already said I liked Byte for his competence, so I like to see even more of that.  I feel like it's not something you see really often in stories like this, where the smaller characters are usually perpetual victims with little agency.

Look forward to seeing more with Bet and Byte and more of the story in general.  As for what Beth will choose, I say why not both?

Thank you for sharing.



Author's Response:

Thanks DarkStarGoddess!

I also think Artemis is interesting. She's had a fascinating and unique life, and she's experienced a lot of different things. You'll see how that's shaped her in later chapters. 

And I really thought hard about the type of civilization I wanted the resistance to exist in. There's just so much an advanced society provides in terms of plot. And don't worry Byte's skills will be appearing again. His skills in question showed up in chapter 34. It was super subtle and sneaky, but it'll be discussed in upcoming chapters so don't worry if you didn't catch it.

An yeah, maybe Beth can have her cake and etc, etc. Or maybe she'll have to choose...we'll just have to see.

Thanks again for the comment, DarkStarGoddess


--WOP

Reviewer: Silver Stranger Signed [Report This]
Date: September 25 2022 7:13 AM Title: The Beginning

Gosh. This one is truly one of the best stories of giantessworld!

I'm really sorry Anna. She has lost so many things already, and every day she continues to lose more and more. I'm starting to fear that in the end she can even lose herself too.

I also really like the way you've done the giantesses. Each of them has an interesting character, and at times you can even feel sympathy for them. In another life they could even be good people, but unfortunately their parents brought up such an attitude towards the world in them.

I really want Anna to have at least one ray of light in this impenetrable darkness... And that's why I can't stop reading. I'm very interested in how her story will end.

Thank you for your hard work!



Author's Response:

Yeah unfortunately hardship isn't new to Annabelle. Losing herself is definitely a real danger for Annabelle, but she seems determined to prevent that from happening...we'll just have to see if she's successful in that endeavor. 

And yeah, as much as I love a solid evil for evil's sake character (not to say there aren't characters like that in this story), the FF's truly are human--and sometimes they behave in a way that shows the worst of humanity. But their upbring shows how that mindset was created and nurtured. 

And as for the light...the end is coming--whether it'll be full of light and hope, or darkness and despair...eh who can say?


Thanks for commenting and your kind words, Silver Stranger


--WOP

Reviewer: redfoot Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 14 2022 11:46 PM Title: The Beginning

Thank you for the update - fully appreciate a masterpiece such as this takes time, but just wanted to let you know that I (and I'm sure others...) will be overjoyed to see the next chapter arrive!

Best wishes to you WOP :)



Author's Response:

Thanks redfoot, your comments are always appreciated. I look forward to yours every time I publish!

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