Date: October 05 2020 5:16 PM Title: Day 7: Learning Yoga
Story is definitely a slow burn but is written so well that I'm hooked. I would like to see a little more suggestive material. I think some interactions that would be good would be dad doing the laundry and picking up laundry from his daughters room. Would be fun to picture the messy room as he navigates his way through huge shoes and piles clothes adding to the laundry basket. Large leggings and shorts and then very large bras and undies. Would live to see tye daughter come in while he's staring at the large underwear before putting it in the basket. Would like to see how she responds, does she say something, is she mad or does she think it's funny, or does she say nothing and just take note mentally.
Down the line when he is smaller I think a cool way to move things would be for her to catch him masturbating. She could be mad at first, but maybe she the realizes that he has needs and she is the only female he can be around other than her friends. Because she will not trust him with anyone else. So maybe she cuts him some slack and throws him a peek every now and then.
Just my thoughts.
Date: October 05 2020 5:16 PM Title: Day 7: Learning Yoga
Story is definitely a slow burn but is written so well that I'm hooked. I would like to see a little more suggestive material. I think some interactions that would be good would be dad doing the laundry and picking up laundry from his daughters room. Would be fun to picture the messy room as he navigates his way through huge shoes and piles clothes adding to the laundry basket. Large leggings and shorts and then very large bras and undies. Would live to see tye daughter come in while he's staring at the large underwear before putting it in the basket. Would like to see how she responds, does she say something, is she mad or does she think it's funny, or does she say nothing and just take note mentally.
Down the line when he is smaller I think a cool way to move things would be for her to catch him masturbating. She could be mad at first, but maybe she the realizes that he has needs and she is the only female he can be around other than her friends. Because she will not trust him with anyone else. So maybe she cuts him some slack and throws him a peek every now and then.
Just my thoughts.
Author's Response:
yeah lots of people are suggesting him cleaning her room and stumbling upon her clothes, so ill definitely be putting that in. if not the next chapter which i already started, then the one after. thanks for your review and ideas!
Date: October 05 2020 3:45 PM Title: Day 7: Learning Yoga
Still think her needing new bras n hitting a growth spurt n need dad to take her shopping or paying for new shopping for her n a friend be crazy fun
thanks for the effort it really appreciated
Author's Response:
yep, that is also planned for the story! thanks for the suggestion
Date: October 04 2020 1:28 PM Title: Day 7: Learning Yoga
How abt he does laundry n discovers her bras n how big they are.... maybe she is embarressed cause she needs new bras ...she has grown n needs to get some but how to tell her lil dad
Author's Response:
dont worry i saw ur other laundry comment and took it into account! its planned for later on in the story