Date: April 17 2020 9:02 AM Title: Chapter 2
This is a great start. I am hoping She will be God to her new city. I think the whole deity angle is the best. Maybe she could refer to herself as God? I think that is the perfect name to represent the power she will have
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot.
In fact this is exactly the spot I want to reach, and this is why the name of the story is a "pun" between the name of the protagonist "Camila" and "Kami" = "God"
[Report This]Date: April 15 2020 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 2
I'm glad you're taking it slowly, I love it when the story attempts to build a whole world around the scenario. The setup you describe seems a lot more believable than most shrunken city stories, you're doing a good job making it seem plausible. I imagine either Kamila is an extremely wealthy girl, or else she's an ordinary middle class girl who won the city in a lottery of some sort. If it's the latter, it would be awesome for her to surprise her friends and start shrinking them down to various sizes, threatening to transfer them to the city if they fail to cooperate with her plans.
It looks like the action is picking up, I can't wait until Kamila gets her city!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the great feedback!
As a matter of fact, I already had some of these planned!!!