Date: April 06 2020 8:20 PM Title: Cleo's Vacation
Yeah, take that Crab Shack! No restaurant deserves to be crushed more.
Speaking of Crab Shack, Robyn should introduce Cleo to late night taco bell runs and stoner comedies.... with tiny people. And once Cleo's friends come, Robyn can introduce them to 'clubbing'... at skyscraper sizes. Or visiting the beach... Or 'shopping' for dresses and heels, or 'going to college' and killing the professor for giving 'bad grades'. I think scenes like that would be fun and remind the reader that even though they're adults and goddess and demi-goddess, they're still young college aged people and have a 'fun/wild' side.
1 nitpick: Cleo's comfortable size should probably be 400 feet, so people are an inch by comparison. Otherwise, they're a bit big for eating whole at 4 inches comparatively.
So, 400 ft tall(1 inch humans) to 4 miles tall(0.5 mm humans) to island crushing (I'm gonna say 40 miles, idk)
How does Robyn make herself grow? It was exhausting for Leah to grow to their size in the previous chapter. Is it like a thread Robyn can pull on subconciously to request power from Cleo or did Cleo give her an internal power source that just tops up from Cleo as needed. Or is Robyn now a human plant with Cleo as the sun? I think Cleo would be smart and go with the first option as it leaves Cleo in control.
Author's Response:
Hi Panzer,
You're totally right about the scale and I actually went back through and adjusted that, its now 400 default throughout.
I'm totally down for more college-girl scenarios! something I'll give some thought to.
I actually through together a quick chapter to address this concern with Robyn.
Kind regards
JFT
Date: April 06 2020 5:47 PM Title: Cleo's Vacation
Wow that scene was hot as hell. Excellent work!
It’s also interesting to see that despite the fact that Cleo considers Robyn her lover, she still addresses her as “slave”.
Robyn seriously would chose Cleo over her own human race. Talk about huge betrayal. But then again maybe deep down she’s doing this because she’s scared and chooses life and submission to Cleo over rejection and death.
Would be interesting to see Robyn reaction if Cleo were to torment or... eat robyns family... ;)
Will Robyn break or will she be like meh it’s okay. Perfect situation of who do you choose a goddess or your own blood.
Great chapter! Looking forward for more!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback!
I put together a short Robyn chapter to address some character issues raised. Give her thoughts on the situation. Hope it helps!
The "Slave" "Servant" comments were roleplay, Robyn actually thinks during the chapter how erotic it feels to be called servant now she feels safe with her as a partner.
Kind regards
JFT