Date: March 06 2021 10:52 AM Title: Shopping trip
Mini Extra: Why is there a crossed texted option in the writing system when that doesn't show up in the review text -> concerning the quote with the finger length/height comparison.
Date: March 06 2021 10:49 AM Title: Shopping trip
First up: I am really glad this story is back, I will give you a perfect rating for that alone, but there is also some immediate critisism before I started reading. The text is very small. Especially as it wasn't the case in the previous chapters that isn't great. Sure, I just zoomed it bigger, but given how this site reacts to zooming that wasn't ideal either.
"That, and how hot he looked like this." Don't praise yourself, Carl. Also I don't think at "he" was meant in the first place here. ;)
[...]"but like everyone now, she was impossibly huge to him."
That comment reminded Carl of his earlier thought[...]
[...],she teased as Rachel placed each finger beside him, which showed that he was taller shorter than all but her ring finger.
I am sorry in case you don't like me pointing out mistakes - it's a reviewing quirk of me - and not meant in an insultive matter. (A few dasys ago someone got angry hence I am pointing it out here.
How you are developing the characters seems natural but a bit too smooth at this point, the three act like they knew each other for years which obviously isn't the case.
Date: February 26 2021 1:09 PM Title: Shopping trip
Love this chapter and where the story is going! Hoping for more intimate interactions with the three characters. Happy to see this story back!