[Report This]Date: December 30 2019 3:46 PM Title: Questioning
Now the story gets interesting. Stocking torture is one of my favorites.
Roshan seems like a pretty good giantess. Why didn't he shrink before? No wonder Roshan is angry he went to someone else.
And yeah, she really tracked down the tiny woman easily. Is Roshan a super spy?
Thank you for writing and until next time.
Author's Response:
Everyone loves a good time in a stocking, why else would they have become holiday decor?
She's reluctant, but coming into the role. Ironic that she started doing it because her boyfriend liked to pretend shrink with someone else more than spend time with her.
She's just a smart woman with a drive to get back at someone, which is the greatest motivation possible.
And thank you for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: December 30 2019 2:38 PM Title: Questioning
I love Roshan's personality, it comes across very real in your style of writing. I like her way of talking through your dialougue as well. Like at the end when she says "I think I can live with it", or when she says "I've never been this abjectly tiny before, this is a problem you created." It is a very good way of freshening up the way a giantess talks. Sometimes we write the same phrases and taunts over and over again that the dialogue starts to sound generic and dull, but this was very refreshing and fun to read. Keep it up!
Also, the descriptiveness of your writing is awesome too. I loved the phrase "judgmental stare" I might steal that one for myself!
I'm very looking forward to reading more of this story! I hope you continue this story, I love the charachters so much!
One question though, who is Mariam? Was that a mistake or did I miss something?
Author's Response:
Thank you! I've been told before that my giantesses seem "real," which I guess comes out with that. They have their own motivations and mannerisms, and in general I try not to fall back on stuff like "You like that little man?" when writing. Though I do like a "Fee-fi-fo-fum" every so often.
I've always thought descriptions are key to making it a much more real situation and immersing the reader in the experience, which is helped by writing in first-person.
As for that, the simple answer is I drink while writing and have multiple stories going, and a few editing passes don't always catch everything.