Date: December 06 2019 12:29 PM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
On the contrary to below I rather like that that dianne is supposedly helping him or at least has good intentions but doesnt realize how much pain he is in or that she is torturing him. As for what I hope for? I'd like a crushing scene, a slow crushing scene over a few steps with any character, we still have two other men at the party who can accidentally fall into someone's shoe or even the pov of someone dianne accidentally killed in the past.
Author's Response:
Hey Wutt,
Stay tuned! I've already written some crushing and trample stuff, but I didn't expect to be enjoying doing as much of the backstory as i have, so i haven't reached that section of the story to properly introduce it.
Perhaps if the story drags on too long i'll insert those chapters earlier than they should be, as i'm not exactly operating in a chronological manner anyway.
Also, Dianne hasn't killed anyone as part of the smuggling - but it doesn't mean she hasn't killed somebody else yet. Thanks for the suggestion!
kenny
Date: December 01 2019 10:22 PM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
I'm loving the story. Very intriguing and steamy. I would love to see a follow up on the wedding of Kelly's foot lol. Or at least a one off short story. At least Mark gets to be married to his crush's foot
Author's Response:
Stay tuned! I'm not sure if and when, but that isn't beyond the realm of possibility;)
[Report This]Date: November 20 2019 9:14 PM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
I loved make america big again so im glad too see this 2
[Report This]Date: November 12 2019 7:58 PM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
Wow, this is starting to get good. Heck, you even have some famous authors reviewing. Good job! (Thanks for the reply, it meant a lot. I have actually, with the last chapter.)
Author's Response:
Glad you're liking it!
Date: November 09 2019 11:00 AM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
This is great work for a first time story the tension you build up is great, kept me second guessing intentions.
Date: November 08 2019 7:27 AM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
It's always good to show respect. Maybe address Ms. Trent as Ms. Trent or Mrs. Trent and answer her with Yes Ma'am to show respect. No confusion so far with the ladies.
Date: November 07 2019 1:38 AM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
What a fabulous beginning. You write very well.
Later,
Diesel
Date: November 06 2019 9:47 AM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
I just got started reading chapter 2 and duty calls, so I'm not even sure if I can finish reading the rest today.
Anyway... there's a couple of silly typos -- "in media res" makes me go 100% https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IIAdHEwiAy8, sole vs soul, a couple of others that I've forgotten because I was busy reading.
So far the story looks SOLID and well written (or I wouldn't bother reporting the occasional typo :), so unless you f***ed it up in the subsequent chapters, do keep writing!
PS
First story? Really? Good job sir!
Author's Response:
Thanks sir - especially for pointing out grammatical mistakes, it's genuinely appreciated.
And yep, first story. Obviously i've read others like Make America Big Again though ;)
[Report This]Date: November 04 2019 9:05 PM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
I can safely say I never expected anyone to actually do anything with Books' and I's little silly setting idea, but color me pleasantly surprised. You did pretty well with this I'd say. I can see a few rough edges here or there, but the concept and execution are both solid. Very nicely done!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I really liked your work as well! One of the few giantess stories that managed to stand out in my mind even though i first read it years ago!
[Report This]Date: November 04 2019 12:32 PM Title: Chapter X: To the airport
You know, I had never actually thought of like an underground railroad when we were brainstorming through Make America Great Again, but definitely makes sense in the context of the world. After all, pretty sure other countries out there might have decided on the not so kinky life haha. You portrayed an aspect of that world pretty damn well. You have my compliments and I'm happy that little world we made could inspire you to write something!
Author's Response:
Hey thanks man. Your work really inspired me and I found it oddly relevant to todays era - the concept fascinated me.
Glad you liked it!