Date: September 03 2022 7:59 PM Title: Elwood's Snack
God damn... I could use a full story with this psychopath. At first I was under the foolish impression that Elwood would be gentler than his rowdy teammates. Then I learned of his "good luck charm" (which I would like a whole spinoff series for, by the way), and I was like, oh, okay, maybe not. And then his BUGLE FINGERS?!?!
One thing I really like throughout the story, is that the Ashleys know what's going to happen to them before we do, because they've witnessed it all happening to other tinies. Like when he grinned cheerfully as he picked up the first Ashley and they all started screaming because they remembered what he "liked to do with his food ", I was like, oh shit, what's he do...?! And nothing in my wildest imagination could compare to what he actually did. And... my God, the details. How he used them as an extension of his fingers, how he could feel the book through them, as well as their pulsing heartbeats, how they were repeatedly slammed against the book when he casually tapped his fingers against it (xx). Truly brilliant.
Also I'm intrigued by the mysterious nature of this world; with the original, immortal tinies vs. their clones, and how the boys all seem to have the ability to grow and shrink girls, as well as to make them more durable. I like the way you weave it in throughout the story, like how all the girls, no matter their size, seem to be nothing but playthings to the boys... but also the girls are, like, weirdly into it...? You gave just enough information to peak my interest and leave me pondering about this sick, twisted universe of literal female objectification
Date: October 19 2019 1:02 PM Title: Ashley and Coach
I love the blowjob vore.
Also I wana ask, could you continue or write a story similar to a story called tongue ring on this site? I'd be willing to pay you to continue it, or rewrite it if u have too.
Plz let me know
Hey! Send me a message about this, I just started doing commissions and I'd love to talk to you about this story!
Date: August 29 2019 12:57 AM Title: Ashley and Coach
The bit of worldbuilding works great. You showed it through the actions of others and the multiple Ashleys.
I love the casual behavior of the giants/giantess and how it brings doom and terror to the Ashleys
Date: August 26 2019 8:18 PM Title: Ashley and Coach
I don’t mean this in a negative way, but we don’t care too much about the world-building as much, at peast when it’s not highly relevant to the plot. I think in this case you have enough of a foundation that the story flows well, even though its not super detailed and defined.
Another great start to a story though!