Date: August 20 2019 1:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice job with this one. Lots of detail which I love, gives great mental visuals. If I could nit pick, the only minor issue I have is the ending where she caresses her thoat. I don't know anyone who does this. I see this alot in videos and in other works of GTS fiction but as far as everyday life goes I have yet to see anyone eat something and carress their throat like that.
She knows he's there because she put him there and she's ignoring him while at the same time getting off from listing to his pleas and eating him alive. Then I could picture someone doing that. And maybe that's what you had in mind.
Looking forward to reading your next story.
Thanks! I tried to be pretty descriptive and yep! What I was going for is that she knew he was there, and was just getting off to his helplessness. Apologies if it wasn't very clear I tried to write it so that the reader along with the tiny man was experiencing this without knowing if she really knew he was there until the end! So you're right about that my friend! Thanks for the review and I look forward to writing more stuff~
Date: August 20 2019 11:29 AM Title: Chapter 1
Love micro stories with descriptions of how tiny he person is in relation to the world around them. Good job
Thanks! So do I! I love when stories are descriptive so I figured that I might as well give it a shot myself. I'm glad you enjoyed it and there's more to come! Thank you for the review!
Date: August 19 2019 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good liitle first story. Would love to see more. I enjoy unaware micro plots the most. Keep it up.
Thank you! Your review is much appreciated. I wasn't even really expecting any reviews so thanks! There'll be more where that came from and hopefully I can hone my writing a little more!