[Report This]Date: August 12 2018 11:17 AM Title: Ground Game
Great to see Sarah owning up to her power and growing. Now that Sarah starts growing quite large for a human, could you maybe add some what I call "subtle displays of power/size"? You did that in some of your previous stories and I really liked it. Examples of this are Fulda benching a ridiculous amount or a frustrated Gina sitting on a couch and absolutely dwarfing the couch. So basically some subtle things that tell us Sarah is really big and strong compared to the environment. That would really add something to the growth component I think. I must also say that you do the description of the shrinking and toying with the tiny man really well.
Also, I wanted to ask you if you are bored yet? You added a chapter everyday for weeks straight I feel. That must be draining.
Thanks for writing and see you next time!
Author's Response:
You seem to always know what I'm going to do one or two chapters before I do it! That sort of stuff is coming down the pipe in the next update, the one after it at the latest. There hasn't been much opportunity to do that before, but now that she's pushing 9' I think it would be noticable.
I wouldn't say "bored" is the right word, but it's more exhausted. 17 chapters in 18 days, 16 of them one day after the other, from a story I only intended to be one chapter. Once it hits novel-length I'm going to slow it down a bit and get some other stuff I've been working on out the door.
Thanks for reading and giving a nice, thoughtful review!