Date: August 31 2019 5:39 PM Title: Chapter 50
Happy to provide ideas on giantess genre! I would mix viewpoints between the giantess and the tinies, but particularly focus on the perspective of the tinies. It's great when the giantess discusses how huge she is in comparison to the tinies and other things like buildings. What she can do depends on how huge the giantess is...she could play with whole buildings between her toes or swim up and capture a cruise ship. I personally like larger giantess of at least 300 feet. If Shannon were 400 feet, Chris would look 1 inch tall...and she has seen him much smaller than that. I also personally like footplay, and there are plenty of things to play with at over 1000 feet. Overall I would recommend continuing the unique dynamic between Shannon and Chris. She can be cruel, but she can also be very playful. In each case, as a giantess, she will cause a lot of inadvertent destruction. Shannon is also very sure of herself and that cockiness will be a great attribute when hundreds of feet tall. She, of all the characters, has the personality to be an awesome giantess who would want to make a whole city her plaything. I see Chris growing back to normal and Shannon's secret exposed. With Chris' parents and police after her, the only way out is to grow gigantic to find Chris and make him her foot toy....nothing could stop her.
Date: August 31 2019 6:36 AM Title: Chapter 50
Awesome! Really looking forward to the giantess Shannon chapters! Hopefully she gets huge...like over 500 feet tall...and has some fun playing with the buildings with her feet!
Author's Response: I certainly have a few ideas, but the giant woman perspective is part of the genre I don’t have much experience in, so the more ideas and suggestions you have, the better.
[Report This]Date: August 30 2019 3:20 PM Title: Alternate Chapter 49–What if Mrs. Carson had found Chris?
Wow! I didn’t think it would be possible, but this is now my favorite chapter in all of giantess world! Now I have to change my reason for favoriting this story. It’s not just the consistent torment of giantesses on Chris, but now it’s this chapter. This is the chapter that will be remembered for years to come.
My previous favorite chapter held the top spot for over 2 years and now this chapter just topped it. It was phenomenal! I think it was worth the wait. I kinda forgot about this story, haha, so I didn’t worry about when you were going to post next. I remember faintly you said that this Labor Day weekend you will post, and look at you, posting at the beginning of it.
Where could I see a part 2? Haha! I would love to see Mrs. Carson do yoga with Chris inside her. But I’m glad you at least had Janet mention it, making Chris squirm in fear. Loved it!
It’s crazy because, I made the suggestion for this exactly 1 year ago! (Off by a few days, but basically a year.) This is well worth it since during this time, we had enough time to flesh out the characters, especially for Mrs. Carson.
Now I truly understand why you wanted me to pay attention to Mrs. Carson for the past 2 chapters. I never even thought about Chris actually being under her that time those past chapter, now this chapter felt like a behind the scenes moment. Like “hey, do you remember those Mrs Carson scenes? Well, Chris was actually being used for her pleasure here.” You were planning this for a while now, weren’t you? Haha! Thank you.
Also, we can’t forget about the length of this chapter! It was basically more than double what you usually write! I even had to take breaks during the chapter since I was already working up a sweat reading this, haha. I felt just like Mrs. Carson, getting turned on by such an erotic tale. I mean, I’m reading and it’s super sexy. Then 15 minutes later, I’m reading another sexy scene! It was a never-ending thrill ride, and I’m glad I am able to read it now despite waiting for all those months, haha. But it’s all worth it once it’s here.
After all these chapters without Chris growing much, it felt weird to see him grow so fast. I mean, he was already about 9 inches long by the time Janet went to her master bedroom. That reminds me, Chris is 9 inches tall and Mrs. Carson’s pussy still swallowed him up whole. Either she has a monster pussy, or her vagina is super tight right now with Chris wedged up in there. That’s just extremely sexy. Not to mention the fact that he is still growing so he might actually fill her up like her giant 12 inch dildo.
Also, you used the dialogue perfectly in this chapter! The way Mrs. Carson went from shocked to horny was nice! And the last few paragraphs when she talked to him while he was inside her was super erotic! I loved how she mentioned that she will keep him in her room to keep him safe and also that she will take “good care of him” and lastly mentioning how he may feel while she does yoga with him inside her.
Wow, I’m so jealous of Chris right now. I know this is an alternate chapter, but if this is the spark to another story, it would be great to see Mrs. Carson have her way with a tiny as her own pleasure pet. It could easily be a story on its own. Who knows, maybe Shannon accidentally shrinks a local neighbor called “Tom” and Tom somehow winds up in Mrs. Carson’s house. Hehe.
Thank you for this gift of an amazing chapter! I can’t wait for the next one!
Author's Response: I’m glad you enjoyed it; I just took your idea and ran with it. I liked the whole erotic novel aspect along with the giantess orgasm with Chris under her, so that’s what I focused on. I knew it was going to be a big chapter, and I had to have everything flow smoothly with lots of details, but I still wasn’t expecting it to be as long as it was. I know it might be weird to see Chris growing so fast, but there is a reason. I won’t spoil it, but it’s very subtle; Check out the times that Chris grows in this alternate chapter, and then read the last chapter of the main story to see how and when Chris grows. That should give you a clue as to the triggers. Thanks for all your suggestions!
Date: August 30 2019 1:51 PM Title: Alternate Chapter 49–What if Mrs. Carson had found Chris?
It's always good to see an update from you. One, because your story is amazing. Two, because I love to do reviews on stories and characters I like.
I am not gonna lie. I was hoping for a main story chapter, BUT, this extra staring miss Carlson is very good and got me thinking: man, Chris has a harem of giantess kkkkkkkkkkkk. Rachel, miss Carlson, Shannon and Sue Ann kkkkkkkkkkkkkkk.
Tell me, do you have a favorite character? If yes, is it miss Carlson? For me I think you already know, as I love shipping Rachel and Chris XDD
As for the future, I love your long chapters, but, if it would mean you could update more frequently, I wouldn't mind shorter chapters. Curiosity is killing me... crossing my fingers to see some aware interaction betwen a giga Rachel and Chris kkkk (maybe the growth formula has some side effect on the users mind, like magnifing repressed wishes and emotions together with the size... yep there goes my imagination again).
As always, thank you for sharing your talent with us. Please, keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: I’m always happy to see everyone’s reviews; makes all the hard work worth it. I’m not sure I have a favorite character, but it’s probably between Rachel and Sue Ann. I know my chapters tend to be long, but I have so many details to fit in, especially during the interactions between tinies and the giantesses, that it’s hard to write short chapters while still keeping the good parts (this is erotica after all). I think I can certainly fit a little interaction between a playful Rachel and small Chris in the next chapter, so keep an eye out.
Date: August 30 2019 9:22 AM Title: Alternate Chapter 49–What if Mrs. Carson had found Chris?
Really enjoyed the alternate chapter, but I'm really looking forward to the continuation of the main story to see what Shannon is up to! Any thoughts on when that will be posted? Great work!
Author's Response: Right now, I have the outline done, but the details and particulars aren’t hashed out yet. I know what needs to happen, but I also have to make things entertaining and erotic for the readers. I plan to have at least one more chapter, hopefully to, finished by the end of September, with an overall goal of having the ENTIRE story finished by the end of the year. I’m also planning one more alternate chapter with Shannon as a giantess before I’m through.
[Report This]Date: August 10 2019 4:26 AM Title: Chapter 50
Whoa! Now this is what I’m talking about! We actually have a person aware of Chris? And Chris actually grew, not once but twice?
It finally makes sense. The shrinking potion kept him shrunk for a while, but once it starts leaving his system, he starts growing fast. Personally, I would have preferred that Chris grew gradually so we can spend lots of time at each size, but I’m ok with this as long as we get someone to play with Chris at the fun sizes: 3 inches, 6 inches, maybe 1 ft or 2ft. Soon, Chris can actually be a viable toy for these ladies.
So Chris went from 1/8 inch to 1/4 inch and now I’m guessing 1/2 inch? It’s double each time, right? Or did he super grow this time to 1 inch or something? I think once Chris reaches 1 inch tall, the real fun begins.
So Sue Ann finds him. Funny how the only people who have seen Chris being tiny are the babysitters, the ones whose job is to take care of someone that is not dependent. And Chris needs all the help he can get.
Hmm. 1/4 inch is like ant size. I’m thinking ant man. Now 1/2 inch size is like the length of a single staple. Now thinking about it, how does Sue Ann even recognize a face that tiny. I mean, if the whole body is 1/2 inch tall, the head is like 1/8 inch tall. Maybe she guessed? I think Chris’s face is too small to be recognized.
So Rachel is in Chris’s home. Shannon left, but the big question is what about her boyfriend? I have to predict that she took him with her rather than keep him alone in the house. So Shannon has taken his car, his shrinking formula and also his little body all for herself. She controls his life, kinda erotic. Now let’s say he is in the house still. mean, imagine Rachel finds that guy? That would be awkward.
Maybe Rachel thinks the guy is Chris and takes him to her house. She goes to her room, ignores her mom and closes her door. She uses a magnifying glass, because kids would use something like that and then she sees that it’s not Chris. Rachel screams in fright, Mrs. Carson shows up and Rachel points at the tiny guy on her bed to which Mrs. Carson rushes over and grabs the little man who squirms in her grip. She tells Rachel that she will handle this and Mrs. Carson leaves the room with the little man in hand. Rachel meanwhile cries, wondering if the same fate happened to Chris. She cries herself to sleep, which lets Mrs. Carson be alone with the tiny man. She takes him to her bedroom, drops him on her bed in her master bedroom (aka the sex dungeon) and accuses him of being a pervert and spying on her daughter. The man explains his side, but Mrs. Carson isn’t having it. She thinks of a way to punish him, and remembers the erotic tale that she was just reading about before Rachel screamed. Mrs. Carson seductively says, “I know what you want” and he watches as Mrs. Carson lowers her right hand to the front of her yoga pants and begins caressing it. Almost immediately, a wet spot forms and is visible to the tiny man and Mrs. Carson could feel it. She closes her eyes and lets out a little moan. The tiny man sees Janet’s eyes close and decides its time to escape. He takes off as runs to the side of her bed, as fast as his little legs can carry him. After a few moans, Mrs. Carson opens her eyes and spots the tiny man attempting to escape. She takes her free hand and grabs the guy with one swift movement while her right hand is still rubbing her crotch. She looks down at him and says “I think it’s story time, what do you think?” and she giggles, not even waiting for a response. She heads into the living room and sits on her favorite chair, eager to continue reading her ongoing story. She picks up her book and reads aloud “and the giantess got turned on by the thought of keeping a tiny slave at her will, ready to use him for her pleasures for the rest of his days. The man screams in fright as the giantess kisses her tiny captive and drags him down her body, from her lips, through her cleavage, across her belly and stops at her pussy.” Mrs. Carson pauses and looks down at the tiny man in her hand who is shaking his head as fast as he can. Janet smiles in response, almost like a smirk knowing that she is role playing one of her fantasies. She puts the book down and takes the waistband of her panties and yoga pants, letting her musky fragrance spread and find the nose of the young man to give him a sample of her essence leaving him trembling in fear. She takes the struggling tiny man and lowers him into her panties and lets her clothing snap back into place securing the tiny man against her. Janet picks up the book and continues reading aloud so her new toy could listen. “She tells her slave that this is his new home now and he must bring her an orgasm or else she would kill him. The slave quickly began using his tiny arms to rub the giantess but she had another idea. Without saying a word, the giantess pressed the tiny’s body from the back and without any resistance, he slid right into her pussy, her vaginal lips closing the gap behind him.” Mrs. Carson, who was ready to follow the main character’s actions presses onto her own little man’s body and he too slid easily into her. Janet wanted to read more, but she was already living through her own story and her body felt it too. She never felt this way in so many years that she felt that she might have an orgasm right there on the spot. But then she composed herself. This wasn’t just about her having fun, but also to punish this man who was shrunken inside her daughter’s room. Mrs. Carson wanted this moment to last. A quick orgasm would be too easy of a punishment. No, instead she is going to keep him inside her pussy as long as she can. And when she is ready, Mrs. Carson will create the most powerful orgasm than she has ever experienced and give this man a true taste of her sexual nature.
I was going to type more about this chapter, but once again, I couldn’t resist and wrote another fan fiction.
Haha, I hope you enjoyed it and I can’t wait for the next chapter! (I also hope you change your mind and post before Labor Day.)
Author's Response: I’ll say this, TomSpeedy, you and the other readers sure do think up some creative scenarios. I can’t guarantee that they’ll all be used, but I guess in the alternate chapters, I can let loose and have a little fun 😅. I’m actively working on the “surprise”, and I’ve set a goal of Labor Day to have it all finished. However, if I get it done any sooner, I’ll post it as soon as I can.
Date: August 10 2019 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 50
You are very good in building suspense and I just love the feet parts of the story. You weren't kidding when you said this chapter would bring some changes.
Something tells me we are gonna have a colossal Rachel looking for Chris now tha he is coming back to normal. It is just my especulation, but, she could be spotted by Shannon, both have a fight and end up spilling the chemicals all over themselves and... grow. Maybe Rachel mother comes in to help her daughter and ends up spilling chemicals. Maybe Chris will have to run for his life while several giantess run after him. Maybe he will be the one to save the world from being flatted under his girlfriend and babysitter soles...
I could be wrong. Only you know kkkk. Please, keep up the good work and the feet parts. As I said, your writing is very good. Thank you for your hard work on this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for all the encouragement. You’re suggestions are....interesting, to say the least, and definitely spark my interest. We’ll just see where the story goes from here.
Date: August 09 2019 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 50
Great chapter...glad he is finally found! I also can't wait to see what Shannon is up to and how she's going to deal with Sue Ann, Rachel, and a growing Chris. Hope the next chapter comes soon!
Author's Response: There’s a lot happening: Chris is discovered, Rachel makes a risky move, Sue Ann learns the truth, and Shannon’s up to something... but I feel like we’re forgetting someone. Find out in a special chapter coming Labor Day!
Date: August 06 2019 7:14 PM Title: Part I—Chapter 1
Can't wait for more! I really hope Chris is found soon and Shannon finally finds a growth formula to become a giantess!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading. I think you’ll find the next chapter quite enjoyable, and I’m sure you’ll like what I have planned for Shannon.
[Report This]Date: August 06 2019 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 49
Personally, I like all the unaware stuff, it's why I keep coming back to the story. Not that I discourage being aware at all either, but you write unaware scenarios so wonderfully. However, I do understand what the people want lol Good story so far, can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Well, thank you for you kind words and for keeping with it. Unaware scenarios are probably my favorite interaction, and most likely all of my stories will involve it to some capacity. I just need to remember to write for my audience.
Date: August 06 2019 12:56 AM Title: Chapter 49
Whoa! I can’t believe I missed your reference to my suggestion! You gave me a hint, and I completely overlooked it! I’m so glad you mentioned rereading the Mrs. Carson parts.
So I was reading the parts of Mrs. Carson this chapter and I didn’t notice anything while she was taking out the recycling. However, later in the chapter when Rachel finally came home, I just now realized that Mrs. Carson was sitting in her “favorite chair” in the living room!
Not only that, but she was reading a romantic novel which I can only assume was turning her on in that chair while wearing that nightgown. Imagine if she was reading a book about a sexy giantess playing with a little guy. I’m getting excited as if I’m unraveling a mystery.
Chris is with Sue Ann now, but after reading that scene again with Mrs. Carson, I kinda want Chris back in Rachel’s house again. Haha. I’m just imagining Chris finding that chair, most likely the butt imprint still visible on the seat with a wet spot in the middle. Whew! I’m getting flashbacks to that suggestion now.
Thank you so much for pointing that out to me! I try to mention everything in each chapter that stood out, but for some reason, that moment didn’t click in my head.
Now I’m super excited for what you have planned for Mrs. Carson next chapter!
Author's Response: I’m glad you skimmed the chapter again. Just pay attention to Mrs. Carson and what she does and says in the next chapter. I hope all will come to fruition by Labor Day. Until then, stay tuned. 😉
Date: August 05 2019 10:30 PM Title: Part I—Chapter 1
Wow. Haha. I took so long to write that review that I now see the other responses to the reviews just now.
So, I see you stated that you have the rest of the story all planned out. I’m curious. Does this mean you know what happens each chapter, or does this mean which path does Chris take? No need to give me every detail, but I had the impression that you are going to make this story longer and that’s why Chris wasn’t discovered or grown yet.
Now you mention that it’s almost over which makes me worried a bit. Will there be action scenes with a bigger Chris? Or will he be tiny at this size the rest of the way and grow back to normal at the end? It’s just, I remember a while back (I think over a year ago), I made a suggestion about a scene with Mrs. Carson and Chris while Chris was at 2 ft tall. You then asked permission to use it which I approved and since then Chris hasn’t grown even close to 2 ft or even 1 ft tall. So now I wonder if that scene will even happen.
You also mention that you want this story to be finished as soon as possible, but part of me wants it to last forever. (Lol, I think we all want erotic stories to last forever).
I don’t think people want this story to end, but rather to get to the good parts. You say you have competed the story, but I think you can squeeze in some sexy chapters here and there.
Well, that’s what I believe you are telling us in this previous responses. If it is indeed going to end soon, I hope it ends with a bang, literally. Let’s have Chris bang someone for the finale. Lol.
I would like to know your thoughts, that’s all.
Author's Response: I don’t know the exact details of the remaining chapters, but I know the major plot points that will be hit. I won’t give away anything right now, but I have made some changes along the way, with some major ones yet to come thanks to reviews and suggestions. Don’t worry, there’s plenty of good stuff to come!
There’s still plenty to come, but I’m pretty sure the remaining story will be less than 10 chapters at the most, hopefully. As far as Mrs. Carson goes, you might want to reread the parts where we see her in this chapter, and pay close attention to what she’s doing in the next one as well, but that’s all I’ll say for now.
I have other erotic stories I want to get to, with new and interesting characters and scenarios, so I want to move on from this story.
[Report This]Date: August 05 2019 9:59 PM Title: Chapter 49
Well, well we’ll. Another chapter, another person that Chris has a chance to get intimate with. I will say, Sue Ann is someone that I have been hoping Chris gets to be with for a while now. However, I kinda forgot how she looked and such. I’m aware that Chris likes her, but I kinda forgot her age, body and demeanor.
Hold up, so Chris just bounced out of that trash bag? I thought Rachel tied it up tight last chapter. Perhaps Chris was so tiny, that he got through the opening? I’m not sure. But knowing Chris and his “lucky bounces” he tends to escape situations and get stuck into other problems often.
Love the drawstring aspect when Chris was hanging on to Rachel’s pjs and bouncing onto her crotch. I wished that was Janet in her nightgown instead that Chris was bouncing off, but we know Chris has an eye for Rachel.
So Sue Ann is back. I remember when the only girls were just her and Shannon. Back then, Sue Ann was easily my favorite giantess. Now.... not so much. I mean, there are plenty of good options here. We got Noreen who has a gym body, then Janet who is a sexy milf, and then Sue Ann who is the hot baby sitter. I’m a big fan of all 3, but I’m not really sure who is my favorite. I haven’t seen any of these ladies actually talk to the tiny Chris, so it’s hard to say. It’s all about personality at this point and with the story mostly unaware, that’s hard to decide. Maybe since Sue Ann seems to be alone in her own house, she might be able to be the first one besides Shannon to be aware of Chris and then she can keep it all a secret from everyone including Rachel, her new spy buddy.
But back to this chapter. So Sue Ann is stalking Shannon, but since Shannon isn’t really doing much other than planning Chris’s capture, I doubt Sue Ann will gain any intel. Rachel won’t either since she won’t see anything while Shannon is inside and is even “banned” from Chris’s house.
Hmm. Shannon has a tracker on Chris.... doesn’t she? So did she track Chris traveling from Rachel’s house to Sue Ann’s?!!! Now that would be crazy! Battle of the babysitters!
So there could be a few ways things can go down where I can predict. I could see Chris remains unaware, Shannon shows up, demands Sue to tell her where is Chris, Sue Ann is confused and thinks Shannon has him, Shannon then could realize that Sue Ann is telling the truth and waits for Sue Ann to leave the house, or Shannon explains that she can track Chris and accuses Sue Ann for kidnapping.
I’m sure there are other ways it could play out which I can’t think of at the moment, but those would be my best guesses.
So Sue Ann tells Rachel about her plan and then initially refused to let Rachel help her. Lol. What’s the point of telling Rachel everything when you don’t want her involved? Of course Rachel will be interested after hearing her plan. That sequence could be re-worded in my opinion. I liked how Sue Ann finally lets Rachel join on with her plan. Basically a spy for Sue Ann. Nice!
When Rachel crushed that “bug”, cmon, we all knew that wasn’t Chris. Lol. You still didn’t make him grow did you? He has been the same minuscule speck that has been carried like a bee carrying pollen. Would love to see Chris grow to that “bug” size.
Chris then winds up inside Sue Ann’a car, alone with his sexy babysitter. The whole journey where Chris tries to get to Sue Ann in the car was unnecessary in my opinion. We could just have Rachel swipe Chris off, and he lands at Sue Ann’s feet by the pedals. While I do like Chris’s adventures, reading about him walking around a car isn’t really that sexy compared to Chris trying to climb the leg of a giantess. I appreciate the details of the layout of the car, but I would rather have Chris gaze at Sue Ann and describe the layout of her figure, if you know what I mean. ;)
One small detail I liked which was random was when Rachel told her mom that she going to get dressed and Janet said “hunh” in response. I really could picture it. I think it’s more of a “huh” but I guess it doesn’t matter. Point is, I really felt that scene play out in my head.
So Chris’s next adventure is now with Sue Ann. I remember when Chris was with Noreen and Shannon came back looking for him. If Shannon doesn’t track him right away, no one will look for Chris leaving Sue Ann to toy with Chris herself. Now that would be fun. The fact that Sue Ann earlier said she wasn’t brave enough to stomp on a bug barefoot is clearly foreshadowing when Chris becomes big enough to be a bug sized human at the feet of Sue Ann. While I’m not exactly the biggest feet fan, I’m really excited for Chris growing to this bug size that is referred to a lot in this chapter.
I can’t help but agree somewhat of what the other reviews are saying. There is a lot of Chris doing random stuff with the environment, but not much action with the giantesses which I believe is what most people want to see and read about.
During the Shannon chapters, Shannon was constantly humiliating Chris and playing with him and never letting him out of her sight. You know I’m not the biggest fan of Shannon, but the stuff she did was way more entertaining than Chris climbing through grass, interacting with a dog, getting stuck in a drain, and then ending up in a trash bag. We could replace that with climbing through public hair, interacting with Janet, getting stuck in her panties, and then getting stuck in Rachel’s boobs. While some of that stuff I mentioned happened, it feels like Chris spent more time with the environment rather than actual people these last few chapters. (For example, when Chris was exploring Sue Ann’s car.)
So the story is going longer that we expected, right? So let’s have some chapters where a giantess interacts with the tiny consistently at his current size to make it entertaining. I’m sure most people read this wanting to feel turned on rather than actually knowing the story. Yes, the story is important, but the sexy stuff is what sells and makes people go “wow! That was hot!” Even I had a feeling like that here and there in this story. Last one was when Janet used Chris on her dildo. Seriously, that was amazing!
I can see you like to keep Chris at this small size still. It’s hard for me to think of how a giantess can interact with a tiny at this size which is usually why I like them bigger. However, if you do intend on keeping Chris this small for a few more chapters at least, then maybe we could get some sexy Sue Ann body exploration scenes or something. At that size, she must be a goddess to him.
In addition, I see you also want to keep it unaware. This doesn’t have to result in Chris being on the floor calling for help all the time. (Chris has called for help way too many times recently. Lol.) Chris could somehow wind up on Sue Ann’s person and she won’t even notice due to his size. If you make Sue Ann aware of him, we could get some sexy dialogue back. One thing I loved about the Shannon scenes were when she was telling Chris what she will do to him for punishment, when he escapes and so on. If Sue Ann could pull something like that, then that would be new and sexy. I imagine her to be the more gentle giantess, but since we are just meeting her officially, you could make her have any personally you want.
While others are requesting for more story progress, I think it’s more of them wanting you to get to the sexy parts as soon as possible. Last sexy scene was the Janet scene and that felt like a while ago. (Months ago). It’s like watching porn, but you just see the foreplay, and then the next upload is more foreplay and so on. Most stories that I favorite on this site are usually ones that have a chapter that I find irresistibly sexy. There has been 2 chapters in this story like that for me, but they happened a while back ago.
The last big story progression moment was Shannon inviting her ex, shrinking him down, and getting more of the shrinking potion. This was just one chapter. It was new, exciting, and strangely a turn on to know that there is a potion to keep Chris small forever. I loved this chapter and that chapter wasn’t even a sexy one! Now imagine a sexy chapter that happens to be that deep. You have the potential, I just think you need more erotic chapters with that level of detail.
Right now Chris is in the lovely home of a sexy babysitter that he has a crush on. Take advantage of this and create a sexy chapter for us to enjoy. No need for another “climbing to get attention” chapter. Let’s change it up a bit and go full throttle with Chris at the mercy of this hot woman. Chris, could grow a bit, Sue Ann could be aware of him. These are just two factors that could make this chapter and the next few chapters even better.
I really like this story. Right now it’s around an 8.5/10 for me. However, you could bring back that spark that this story started off with by adding a surprise sexy chapter next time. It’s clear you are slowing down the story to add more details, so why not add another sexual encounter with another sexy giantess. It doesn’t have to advance the plot, but I’m sure others wouldn’t mind some erotic action.
So my tip is to have something sexual that readers can look forward to. Chris traveling from a trash bag to Sue Ann’s car isn’t that much to enjoy. Its a great setup if Sue Ann’s house is some sort of sex dungeon. Actually....that’s not a bad idea. Just have Sue Ann accidentally carry Chris down to her basement and we get Chris’s reaction to see her dungeon. There could be all sorts of tools, chains, locks and kinky items there that could make Chris’s innocent eyes go wide. It doesn’t change the plot much, but it would be hilariously entertaining. Its random, but hot. It might give the readers the idea that Sue Ann is a freak in the sheets which makes Sue Ann finding Chris a much more exciting moment.
Sue Ann is basically a new character. I may have mentioned this before. (Wow, this review is long, but I love discussing this story!) Since we don’t know much about her, you can make her character any way you want. To me, sexier the better.
I hope Chris gets some action next chapter. I swear, if he is on the floor by her shoes calling for help... (sigh)... well, I might have a chuckle, but it would be another redundant theme in this story.
Your plot twists are great, especially that Shannon scene where she shrinks her former boyfriend. (I keep praising that scene.) Now let’s combine a plot twist like that with Sue Ann. Let’s say Sue Ann is actually the current girlfriend of the guy that Shannon shrank. Sue Ann knows that her boyfriend gave Shannon some of the shrinking potion and is actually spying on Shannon, not just for Chris, but also on her boyfriend to see what happens. Meanwhile, at her house, Sue Ann actually has her own share of the potion and used it on some unfortunate guys that she met. She explains how some of those guys harassed her and she shrank them to be her slaves/pets and keeps them locked/tied up. Chris grows to (let’s say) and inch and he discovers some of these shrunken guys all tied up. They are all shrunken like him, but they are a double his height, about 2 inches each. He talks to them and they beg him to free them. Chris gets scared and backs up and spots a boy around his age on a separate table. The boy, also tied up, begs Chris to free him. Chris listens to the boy’s story as he explains how his friends made a bet with him to spank Sue Ann’s ass. He did it, and immediately, she tugged him by the ear around the corner of the next building where none of his friends could see. By the time his friends came around the corner, all they saw was Sue Ann. The shrunken boy, stuck in Sue Ann’s cleavage called for help when his friends showed up. However, his friends got scared when they saw their friend missing and didn’t even attempt a rescue or even ask Sue Ann about him. Chris feels sorry and decides to free him. The boy gets free and thanks Chris. Chris smiles, but then screams as the boy tackles Chris and ties him up. Chris was no match to the boy who was twice as big as him. Chris was tied up and left exactly where the boy was originally and yelled at the boy to untie him. The boy left the table, leaving Chris alone with his thoughts. That’s when Sue Ann’s footsteps made their way into the basement. She glances at the two tables of men and smiles, glad that none escaped. From her perspective, an inch difference isn’t much to Sue Ann and Chris knew it when she walked over to him with a grin on her face.
I don’t know about you guys, but I got excited from that little tale I just wrote. I guess I have a new tip for you. Write something that turns you on, and it probably will turn us on. (Ok, that sounds weird, but you get my drift.)
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: First and foremost, I want to say how much I appreciate all your reviews, suggestions, and feedback over the course of this story. If I’ve never said it before, it’s YOUR reviews that I’m always on the lookout for whenever I post new stories/chapters. I’m taking your latest suggestions to heart and will definitely keep them in mind in future stories and chapters, and I didn’t realize how long it had been since something juicy happened. Hm, I might have some adjustments to make in the next chapter.
Now, as far as Sue Ann goes, she’s more of a kind, gentle giantess type. I don’t see her character as being cruel to Chris if she should find him at this or any small size. Rachel, being a teenager, might find the situation somewhat amusing, but ultimately, she really cares about Chris wouldn’t do anything to purposefully hurt him. I actually think the alternate chapter I posted with Rachel gives a pretty accurate description of her character and demeanor. I really wish I wouldn’t have had to split up the last chapter with the next, there’s so much coming! But I won’t spoil it. I think you’ll be very happy with how it ends, so keep checking back. As always, thanks for reading!
Date: August 05 2019 7:09 PM Title: Part I—Chapter 1
As one of my previously-favorite stories on the site, I'm disheartened. Please take all the criticism you've been recieiving in stride but know that next time, these extraordinarily long arcs with no sensible direction are very frustrating and should be avoided in the next story. All I've wanted for the past ... 25 pages is for rachel to have discovered chris and do a continuation of the glimmer we say in the alternative chapter 10.
Your writing is wonderful, your scenery is vivid and exciting, but your plot development leaves me out of breathe to read any further.
Author's Response: Yes, I understand I’ve let you down. Right now, it’s too late to change anything, and I’m not planning on revisiting or revising this story one it’s completed. This story has made me rethink my writing in future projects moving forward, and I have certainly learned a lot from this experience. I implore you to check back and read future chapters as we are approaching the end, and things are going to change from here on out. I was hoping to have a major plot twist this week, but the chapter started getting long, so I cut it short. Thanks for reading.
Date: August 05 2019 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 49
All right... I like your writing and how you discribe the scenes and Chris perils a lot. But, I am not gonna lie, it's very frustrating that after months of waiting, he just waltz out of the Carlsons house without being noticed when everything worked in that direction - the dog and Rachel dreams. Chris was noticed before and with less than half the effort we saw in this arc. Moreover, even if he gets noticed now by Su Ann, it will not be the same, because I (and probably others) have waited in suspence for the characters to grow (no pun intended kkkkk) as to move the plot and that didn't happen. This chapter was anti-climatic.
That said, in past comments you pointed the importance of Rachel and her mother for the plot as well as Chris development. So, I will trust you know where the story is going.
Do you think the story will end this year? Please, don't get demotivated. Keep up the good work and thank you for all the effort you put in describing the scenes.
Author's Response: I know things are getting long in the tooth, and I do apologize for that. I guess I just had so many encounters that I wanted to put into this story, that I sacrificed the plot to do so. This project has been a learning experience in many ways, and moving forward, my stories won’t be written like this anymore: I prefer to have the main character be noticed at least a good portion of the time. I think the biggest problem now is having so little time to write over the past several months, but I’m back to writing a bit more often now.
As far as the story goes, this chapter was supposed to be a major turning point in the story, but it got to be so long that I felt I had to break it up. I’m getting SO close to the end that I hope the number of chapters left is limited, but we have just a little further to go. Thanks for reading, and check back at the end of the week for more.
Date: August 05 2019 10:36 AM Title: Chapter 49
Can we PLEASE have Chris discovered already? This is dragging on forever!
Author's Response: Yes, I’m well aware. As I’ve stated on other responses, I wasn’t expecting this story to be so long, and my outline has been finished for some time now; deviating too much from it would’ve extended this story potentially indefinitely. From the feedback I’ve received, I’ve decided that this will be the last story of this length that I write like this, where the main character remains undiscovered for the majority of the story. I’m still going to post/publish stories, however, but try to leave myself more open to changes if needed. I can assure you that I’m approaching the end of the story, and I really want to get it finished and move on to other projects.
Date: July 20 2019 11:02 AM Title: Part I—Chapter 1
Seems like we've been here before, Chris yelling and screaming, being in dangerous situations and no one able to hear (but Chloe the dog and no one is really paying her any attention either).
It does seem Rachel does have feelings for Chris and that Mrs. Carson is worried about him as well, but it seems like there is a BRICK wall beteewn that worry and actual action against Shannon. Every benefit seems to go Shannon's way...
Hoping Rachel and Chris get a happy ending and that for once on this board Karma is repaid to the story's villian.
Thank you.
Author's Response: You aren’t the first person to comment on the repetitiveness of several of these past few chapters, but I assure you, things are soon going to come to fruition. We are definitely approaching the end of the story: the week is winding down and Shannon is already under suspicion from several people. She can’t keep up her charade forever, nor will Chris stay small for much longer. It’s only a matter of time before the truth comes out, possibly even sooner than you think. I’m sure that most readers will enjoy the ending, and the other surprises I have in store.
[Report This]Date: July 19 2019 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 48
Lemme guess. Chloe sniffs the trash and scratches the bag, letting Chris out. Otherwise, I don’t see how Chris gets out. Or maybe Rachel doesn’t realize how heavy the trash bag is and accidents drops it. It lands on something sharp and a small rip is present. Then Chris escapes from that.
Basically Chris went from stuck in a drain, to stuck in a trash bag. I actually thought one of them would find him, but it’s back to square one but in a different location.
When the cereal dropped, I thought Rachel would scoop them back up into the box because she doesn’t want to waste food. Then we get a scene where she pours out Chris into a bowl, pours milk in him, and then we get a close call with her swallowing him.
I felt as though this chapter was a bit dialogue heavy. Last chapter had lots of dialogue but there was progress as she shrink that other guy. This chapter, not much happened while Chris is shouting for help.
Also, I’m pretty sure Chris should be growing a little bit, haha. It’s also a new day. I forgot what size he is. 1/8 of an inch still? I understand the small size helps make unaware believable, but that could happen with 1 inch also. Instead of Mrs. Carson and Rachel hearing a “buzzing noise”, they could maybe think they saw a bug, and shrug their shoulders doubting themselves.
It’s funny how all the reviews seem to want different things. I’m riding the Mrs. Carson train, one other person wants Rachel to be aware of Chris, and another wants a giantess Shannon. Not sure how you can appease everyone, but I think in general, some action would help in the next chapter.
My favorite part this chapter was when Janet was checking the laundry and Chris basically got an up skirt view of her. Then he had some intimate thoughts about how good looking she is. I love that, and I’m wondering how he would react if Mrs. Carson catches him peeking. Haha.
Right now, I just hope he gets out of the trash and back into the house. Chris literally traveled everywhere in this house and somehow didn’t get found. I think something must change or maybe Chris grows a bit, so it feels different next time.
Either way, I still love where this story is going and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: First off, I want to tell you how much I look forward to reading your reviews; you always give me the best feedback on my work and I really appreciate. Secondly, I also want to tell you how much I appreciate your honesty in your reviews. I’m not perfect by any means, and constructive criticism is always helpful moving forward. In fact, to show my appreciation, I’ve got something very special in store for you, but that’s all I’ll say for now. 😉
Now, on to your review:
I know that sometimes Chris seems to just go from one situation to another, and that it can get a little bit repetitious; there’s just so much I want to fit into the story that it sometimes seems to go on and on. My issue currently is that I’ve already finished the outline for the story, and with the end in sight, I’m trying to set up for certain important plot points, some of which have been planned out for over a year. Because I want to reach the end, it occasionally makes it difficult to go from one plot point to the next, and what unfortunately happens is scenarios tend to run together. I really want to finish this story and move on to other projects—I’ve been working on it for almost a year and a half— but at the same time, I also don’t want to don’t want to sacrifice the overall quality of the story. As I’ve stated previously, if I’d known how long this story was going to be when I started, I’d have done things a lot differently.
I’d thought about a vote scene with Rachel in this chapter, but since I technically did that in the alternate chapter, I opted for something different. Being swept into the trash is going to set up the next couple of chapters, and I do hope you like the outcome.
I agree there were a lot of details in the last couple of chapters, and if you’ll notice, the last two chapters have been a little longer than others. This is primarily due to me wanting to move things along and get through the rest of the week in the story. I try not to make the chapters too long, but I also don’t want to drag things out into multiple chapters if I don’t have to.
I’m glad you liked that little scene with Chris ogling Mr. Carson. FYI: that wasn’t just for effect.
Lastly, I can assure you things are going to change in the next couple of chapters, but you’ll just have to wait. Thanks for the review!
Date: July 19 2019 7:33 AM Title: Chapter 48
Awesome chapter, but still can't wait for Shannon to find Chris! Even better, I can't wait for Shannon to find a way to grow into a giantess herself! Hopefully we get another chapter before too long!
Author's Response: I’m actively working on chapters, and posting them as soon as they’re finished. It’s been slow going lately, but I hope to be finished soon. For now, my outline for the rest of the story is complete. Thanks for reading.
Date: July 19 2019 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 48
I love your very descriptive writing and you know how to make suspense. I am invested in the story, dying to see how everything will play out. I just BEG, please make Rachel aware of Chris! So painfull to see he pass through all these ordeals and not have a rest. Please, Chris deserves to be noticed by her already TT_TT
Thank you very much for all the effort you put in writing these long and detailed chapters. I am quite literally begging you for more XDD. You are, in my humble opinion, one of the best authors in the site :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words! It’s nice to receive positive feedback from the readers; it makes the effort worthwhile. I know that Chris has been through a lot, but there were a lot of encounters I wanted to include in this story. I promise that things are building up to a conclusion; We ARE close to the ending, we’re just not quite there yet. I can assure you, however, that Rachel is integral to the outcome of the story’s events.