[Report This]Date: August 04 2020 9:15 PM Title: A Sole-Crushing experience, featuring V-D and Erika!
It's not often I see such a great balance between Mia's confident attitude and the little dere-dere breaks in it; Erika's ditzy, carefree demeanor and her genuinely terrifying skills; the interplay between the two; genuine attempts for a "shrinkee" to escape, offset by their powerlessness; and a description of feet that feels erotic without exaggerating their shape or smell.
If anything, I feel like it could use a little more of that dialogue - just because you've nailed down the character relations so much, it feels like a shame to have some of their discussion described so generally.
But in all, it makes me flash back to being a teen and first discovering the fetish. Great work.
Author's Response:
Wow, I got a great review from a fellow writer! (though calling myself a writer is a bit much since I've only done a few short stories in private for people lmao)
Thank you for your kind words, I'm glad I was able to bring back a shadow of those nice memories you had, and I'll take your advice and feelings on the dialogue into account for any future chapters.
I'm also ecstatic that you thought I captured their personalities well with it. I feel like that's pretty difficult to do when handling characters one didn't create on their own; I feel like I've really accomplished something when you say as much about it.
I was a little worried about how I did on the dialogue but I suppose it was misplaced! Thanks once again for the review, its ones like these that encourage me to continue writing at all.
Date: August 04 2020 3:49 PM Title: A Sole-Crushing experience, featuring V-D and Erika!
I would definitely welcome more stuff like this.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed!