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Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: October 29 2017 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 1: Notified

Cute story. Kari should have left him small.

Author's Response: Shrunken people need food and water shrunk to their proportionate scale, so he would've died of thirst if she left him small

Reviewer: Frizzlenidifizerizid Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 25 2017 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 1: Notified

There's some punctual mistakes you made that caused me to become confused whether the sentence was meant to be a statement, or a question. Also, native americans have heredity black and dark brown hair, so the only way she could be bleach blonde was if she dyed it, just something to try and go into detail a little more.

Other than that, I'm assuming this is a short one chapter story. Kinda funny, with a silly plot. Was an interesting read. 

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