Date: August 15 2018 3:16 PM Title: Ended
I have to say I really enjoyed the story the whole way through up until the very end. The ending I found very lack luster and seemed pretty blan compared to the other ways characters were killed off. To be honest I though it was going to end with Mary accidentally sitting on him or the device and breaking it leading back to the title of "Babysitting Unaware". Even though the story was very good it was just the ending didn't seem like your best compared to the other chapters. And I am not trying to be negative I just wanted to give my opinion on one of my favorite stories on this site and I am just slightly bummed that was how it ended.
Date: January 09 2018 6:11 PM Title: Burned
I really liked this chapter! I am a fan of the most cruel situations and death scenarios, so this idea of him liquefy alive by some bug spray was awesome! I have to say I dont like the whole baby plot though. Hope you write more !! Sadly cruel sadistic unaware plots are so rare! Would love to see the protagonist actually have her boyfriend come over and him interacting with the "bugs" too in some very unfortunate way for the tiny insects. Keep it going!
Date: May 29 2017 10:45 AM Title: Babysitting
Writing is very good, but I'd much prefer we moved away from Mary the baby. I'd love to see someone taken out of the house with Sara when she goes out. I do like Marissa using her sisters to get rid of bugs, but I'd prefer she slipped them onto Sara. Like maybe she drops them into Sara's shoes before she put them on or she dropped one into Sara's exposed crack when she bent over or something.
Date: May 28 2017 11:10 AM Title: Canned
Incredible! I haven't read a great baby plot like this since "A Daycare Story" 3 years ago! I especially love how Marissa dropped Becca in Mary's diaper instead of Mary herself. Can't wait to read more!