Date: March 19 2018 3:50 PM Title: The Second Name
Happy to see this updated. I love how extreme you went with the shrinking as it is one of my favorite ranges and doesn't get a lot of content. I do prefer your works in third person though. I also think if you want to continue this story it needs more motivation from the main character beyond getting out of a bad situation. It doesn't kill the story for me but it makes the shrink scenes feel less built up and more random. All in all I do hope to see more of your stuff (the Elite 50 was straight up everything I could want from a story).
Thanks for the comment. It has been a while since I went with shinking of that scale in a story so I decided to just go for it. As for the prespective I find it more fun to write first person. It flows alot better for me and I like getting a feeling of the situation fully from a characters eyes. As for shrinking motivation I would take what you wrote to thought, but this was intentional on my part. There is no prior build up to the shrinking because it is not what she wants to do. Unlike in lets say a story like the elite 50, where the protagonist is a sadisitc murderer on a vengence spree. This protagonist would prefer not to kill and is shoved into situations that force her into doing something she would consider horrible and test her as a person, especially at the end of this chapter since she is seeing an appeal from her two killing experiences. I persoanlly feel she is the most human character I have written since she can be somewhat relatable unlike my past characters who are boarderline psychopaths(which I love).
Date: April 29 2017 12:33 PM Title: First Name
Well I could at least say Abigail is way more easy to sympathized that Light Yagami. I'm more of a third person reader but you did a great job with the first person. We really got a good sense of Abigail's life from her eyes. I hope you keep this up, it's promising. 5 rabbits! 🐇🐇🐇🐇🐇
Thanks! I am personally a third person writer, but recently fell in love with writing first person. I enjoy it more and the story flows alot easier for me, when it comes to writing. I hope to bring out more chapters soon. I already have ideas for about 2-3 more chapters in mind.
Date: April 27 2017 2:53 PM Title: First Name
This kind of feels like a cross between death note (obviously) and future diary (another anime). Well, looking forward to more.
Thanks, I thought it would be fun to add a death game scenario to it such as future diary or platinum end (another manga created by the death note team). I hope to bring out some more chapters soon and even incorporate some more anime references.