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Reviewer: PA McFalls Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: July 14 2014 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

Not bad, but quick question how is it possible for you to make this chapter this short in the first place?

Reviewer: PA McFalls Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: July 14 2014 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 1

Not bad, but quick question how is it possible for you to make this chapter this short in the first place?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: July 21 2008 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 2

Yes! Hit the "enter" key (aka the "return" key) whenever you want to separate your paragraphs and/or separate your character's quotes from the main narrative. And, for each time you hit the key, you get an additional space.




Author's Response:

Thank you I will input paragraph spacing in my stories next time.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: September 06 2007 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 2

Sorry, dude. This was even worse than the first chapter!

Author's Response: What do you mean? Can you give me more of a detailed response. I really appreciate it.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 06 2007 5:44 PM Title: Chapter 1

You need to separate the characters' lines from the narrative portion. If only to avoid a mess that sounds and looks like it was rushed too much.

Author's Response: Question. . .  How do I do this?

Reviewer: Doom Signed [Report This]
Date: June 19 2007 7:36 AM Title: Chapter 1

Hmm.  A bit short.  Way too short.  Hard to properly judge it based upon this small excerpt.

Author's Response: Thank you for your comment I will try to keep this in mind when I write future stories.

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