[Report This]Date: February 27 2016 6:42 PM Title: A Run And A Realization
Why does Adam always pass out at the end of the chapter? Maybe next time you can try a cliffhanger. Doesn't have to be the next chapter, but it will be cool to try it out.
Gym would be interesting, but Adam won't see anything from his position. Amanda just likes stepping on him from school to the gym to her home.
Well, let's get this workout started. I can't wait for the next chapter! (Next chapter title could be titled "workout" if you can't think of one.)
Author's Response:
Adam has passed out the last two times we've seen him because lack of signicant oxygen supply. I don't like doing it, and I won't do it often.
Yeah. Next chapter Is going to have switching perspective between Amanda and Adam to show what's going on. Amanda has only been running her warm up lap. So Adam is bound to wake up. That tape win;t hold forever.
And It probaly will be.
Thanks for your review, Have a Great Day!
[Report This]Date: February 27 2016 11:30 AM Title: A Run And A Realization
Excellent.
Amanda coult put it in your underarms.
Make a tattoo.
Author's Response:
Hey thanks for your review.
Unfortunately, not sure exactly what your asking? I'm sorry, but If you could make your message more clear id love to respond in a more informative manner.
Thank you however, Have a Great day!
Date: February 27 2016 8:11 AM Title: A Run And A Realization
With deepest thanks--and humblest apologies--to the Outsiders. :-)
[Report This]Date: February 27 2016 8:07 AM Title: A Run And A Realization
Well, here in the real world it's already Saturday! So, I guess the old song is true.
"Time won't let him...HOLD ON!
Time won't let him...HOLD ON!
Time won't let him...off that fast."
Date: February 27 2016 7:57 AM Title: A Run And A Realization
it will be cool if Adam could give an epic speech about how he doesn't have to be punished and how he's changed, and makes the reader go "damn this kid". Might not work on Amanda, but maybe it will lol
Author's Response:
Very true, it will be, but would Amanda listen? Protest=Stomp. But there will be something like that. Eventually.
Thanks for your review, Have a Great Day!