Date: April 22 2015 4:42 PM Title: The Find
Hmm, it looks OK so far, but it could be more descriptive. It just seems a little... too quickly paced. Try to add more though!
Date: April 10 2015 6:07 AM Title: The Find
nice setup!!!! but one thing tho please do not make katie have big muscles... it just doesnt look right to me anyway
Date: April 10 2015 12:16 AM Title: The Find
Feels rushed and hyperactive, wherever it's going, it's going in a hurry but can it keep it up the whole story? It will have to either be very short or fall flat. Also intro is garbage and your charecters have no depth, just because you choose to write sexual fantasies doesn't mean you shouldn't expand
Date: April 09 2015 5:16 PM Title: The Find
I halfway thought about taking this on, but since you did I guess I won't. Unless, can you have 2 stories to the same challenge at once?
Author's Response:
You should try it if you want to. It'd be nice to see someone else having a go!