[Report This]Date: December 01 2016 5:09 AM Title: The Tomboy Gets Her Revenge
Soo glad you finished this! I will start off by saying I thought it seemed a little rushed the closer it got to the end, but overall I really really liked this story. The Planet Count sticking around to the end was a nice touch. Mass-shrinking micro stories always have my interest because the events of the story can affect literally billions of people, but remain a mystery to "the rest" of the world. It really makes me wonder, if an ordinary person were in the situation that these girls were in and they could do whatever they wanted with no one possibly knowing, would they behave as they always have? Or would they reveal a totally new due to the circumstances? Your story is a good example of this, and the sad fact that these shrunken-planet stories are so few makes me like this story even more.
Anyway, I hope you keep writing, either another story in this genre, another story involving Raquel and friends somehow, or just whatever the hell you feel like writing. I'm glad you stuck with this story to the end like you said you would. You're pretty good at stories on the micro-planet scale, and that's something you don't see that much.
Cheers!