Date: April 10 2016 6:48 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
yesss, you're back!
excited to continue reading :)
[Report This]Date: December 01 2015 12:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
I thought for sure at least one member of the basketball team would try something with Vick. I have a feeling I know how Vick is gonna make Aruna pay and it would be perfect!
Author's Response: Well you'll have to let me know if you're guess was right in the future ;)
Date: November 11 2015 2:24 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
Always a pleasure to catch up!
Author's Response:
Gald you liked it.
Date: October 24 2015 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
I totally don't like Aruna. Selfish bully and totally not fun to hang out with. A bad and untrustworthy person. I would never want her as a friend or girlfriend. I love intelligent giantesses who are fun to hang out with and who makes you stronger as a person.
Date: October 24 2015 8:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
Oh man, so excited for the next chapter! Thing are going to get really interesting.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! And thank you for the review. The upcoming chapters will definitely be interesting!
Date: October 11 2015 11:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
great concept! may i just mention that at 15 inches he has to look up to see the knees of all these girls, esp Aruna. that is an incredible view for both him and the girls.
second, if he sat on the palm of any of the girls, but esp someone 6'8, his feet would not reach the end of their fingers. and Aruna's pinky would be longer than...
would also be great if there were scenes with his family, perhaps esp a yonger sister.
this is a really powerful story. dont lose that sense!
keep up the great work!
Date: September 28 2015 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
The opening paragraphs implies Vick does not have primordial dwarfism. This is interesting. Given that dwarfism is uncommon (but not rare), I believe many lessons from their lives could be applied to Vick. And he should have received of media attention and not live the sheltered life you suggest. Unless, of course, Vick was kept a secret. I don't want to dwell on this anymore though, because the possibilities are really starting to confuse me.
Second paragraph introduces a nice premise. With it in mind, I think it could be a cute story. Third paragraph is a little strange to me though.
Four bedrooms for a fifteen inch person seems rather excessive. What reason could they have for giving him such a huge amount of space? He only uses half a room.
Secondly, if Vick has good reasons for only accepting females as room-mates then the college being female only becomes largely irrelevant (because there wouldn't be any males anyway). I get that you want to have a nice harem going, or something similar, but I have never heard of female only colleges in the Western world, or at least where I'm from.
You stated this story is set in California – a famously liberal state. This is California, not some backwards oil rich country! And to then describe it as “an elite Feminist school”? What does that even mean? Are there "elite masculinist schools" in this world too?
Also, I don't think your reasons for only accepting are sound. It implies that males aren't safe. By reading the applications I think he would get a good idea of whether they'd be safe to be around. There are lots of unsafe females (criminals) I can name.
Vick seems to view the world in a very black and white fashion. Why not just say: "Vick happened to only pick fermales" or have the female only college thing as reasoning. I can understand perfectly if he wanted to keep lodgers all the same gender, and that's nowhere near as outlandish as "Feminist colleges".
Author's Response: I appreciate but am also appalled by your extreme critical reading of the story. I write to simply create a world of fantasy, not a world of realism, where people can relate or at least have an understanding of the world I'm creating. So if you don't' like the world that's being created because it's not sound, then by all means don't read it. I write for entertainment, not to become a best-selling author. Thanks for mentioning things you find odd, but maybe make your criticism more constructive. Thanks for reading.
Date: July 09 2015 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
Keep it up... An AMAZING start!
[Report This]Date: July 09 2015 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
Liking this allot so far. Interested to see how things progress
Date: July 08 2015 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
This is a great story, hope you plan to update it! I also hope Aruna isn't just a 1 dimensional asshole, everyone's being reasonable excep ther!
Date: July 08 2015 1:26 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
Just read all three chapters. I have to say inrather enjoy this story. Please continue it. I actually like where this is going.
Date: January 29 2015 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates
I like this storyline, I think you should continue it.
Author's Response: I plan to switch to this story eventually, but unsure of how I want to do this storyt. Plus I've committed my time to my other story. I'll add a chapter for you though :)