some mighty fine wordery. some good humor, too, which I feel is a strength of yours. I even enjoyed the ending where Rob lived. at first I was like aw man no hawt death, but you made it work.

Rob finding out his fantasy wasn't all it was cracked up to be was interesting, but I very much enjoyed Ann going through the highs and lows of her fantasy-come-true, and how complex it can be for someone with cruel and sadistic yearnings. also, Ann's complicated connection with her body, and finally having her fantasies realized and thus getting to be herself in them - really enjoyed that dynamic.