Reviewer: zephilia Signed [Report This]
Date: December 24 2014 10:14 AM Title: Underneath the Mistletoe

Great chapter to end a story. Love that Cat ended like all the other people she killed. I hope you keep writing, you have real talent. Have a Merry Christmas.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! and Merry Christmas to you too!

Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: December 24 2014 9:36 AM Title: Underneath the Mistletoe

Oh my /': I dont even know where to start, or what to say to express myself about how much in love I am with this final chapter. It is mostly the best chapter youve ever written on here, and it's such an amazing and well fitting finish to this story. I hoped so much for this would happen, that Cat would accidentally get shrunken and end being swallowed unknownigly, a great fitting ending for her. And oh my, am I in love with both the charcters Tommy and Jenny. Please promise me, you wont ever let them die, please. It's so great now Tommy having a gf again. My head is so tumbling right now, I cant decide where to start of what I liked the most about the chapter. I mostly liked the most, how Simon and especially Tommy "got over" the "loss" of Francine so easily and just forget about her in an instant, making her death seem so humiliating, that even her close friends mostly wont ever think of her anymore again, and all because of the hormones of the two boys. Loved how the "greaf" of Francine vanished in an instant because of Tommy and Jenny standing under the Mistletoe, and Tommys brain and mostly his boner letting him all forget about her so easily, and even feel nice because it's Christmas and Jenny gave him a kiss, so damn great. The whole writing style of this chapter is again at your best. You used so greatly the irony and sarcasm, for example how Jenns burped before giving Tommy a kiss, “Merry Christmas to all, and all a good night!” Simon jokingly called after them, “Well, we did lose Francine. But I’d say finding new love and getting the shrink ray back is a pretty good deal,” Simon said, Tommy was still stargazing. “Yeah, at least we..., that mostly was my favorite part, of how the two boys all were interested in that moment were their new gfs. “Singing Jingle Bellies in Jenny’s stomach,” Tommy said. loved that sentence so much!! The whole part with the cups was epic, how Tommy went through them and got it all wrong, thought Cat lied about it, and went up again, how his friends were looking at him if he's crazy and be like, uhm youre ok? And how he came up with that lie himself, because he thought it wasnt that important and he could handle it all by himself, because hes a clever boy right ;) I love the style so much you put in the male characters like Tommy, him around like the age of 16, how boys that age havent the best kind of logical mind, and get themself and especially others in lots of troubles, it works so great with "oops" moments, or they getting it all wrong even thinking they are clever, things like "oh well", "whatever", "yeah I guess youre right", or in this case Tommys brilliant act of goign through the cups, and getting it all wrong, and even mostly think in his teenager brain he did a great job in protecting his friends, or did something in their favor, where it's the complete other way around, and he even did things worse. And here comes the little sad part of me and the chapter. I hoped so damn much Simon would had gulped down Bobby without even knowing, that would has made the chapter 10 times better and I would had, if possible, given it 20 points from 20 :') If theres something I could wish for, I hope youll write on of course, because youre a damn brilliant author, and youre already my favorite author on here now, and 2nd, it would just be the best thing ever happening, if the next chapter focues around Tommy and Jenny. What if Tommy comes up with the clever idea of the shrink ray having in his custody. And while Jenny is making out at Tommys home Jenny finds the shrink ray but doesnt know what it is, and somehow accidentally shrinks Bobby, Simon (and a new member of the shrink club), where they maybe wanted to visit Tommy because they had new clues about the shrink rays origin. Jenny and Tommy wouldnt have noticed the three got shrunken to ant size, and would now have to get help to get to normal size again. Tommy was even annoyed his friends came to his home because he wanted to get all private his his gf. So because of Jennys actions the three get shrunk mostly while in the kitchen, before Tommy opened the door and the three just came in but Tommy was really annoyed of this and be like dudes, Im busy right now cant you see, and while Tommy goes to the bathroom annoyed and comes back, it's just Jenny again, and Jenny thought the three left, and even tells Tommy that, who would just be oh good. Tommy and Jenny would have some time sharing first watching a movie and hahing snacks, and later on get more and more private. I know it's Christmas, and if theres anything I could wish for, it would be if maybe Bobby this time could get swallowed by Tommy himself where he before fell in his coke cup, the new (or even two) club members, or even just two friends of Bobby or Simon which were with them, get vored by Jenny, and of them inserted while Tommy and Jenny having butt sex. The story could end just Simon being alive and the size of an ant near the floor, cowering in fear just near a table foot, sitting crying there next to a dust piece or some tiny bit of bread crumb. So it could be open for another story where Simon gets back to normal, even can happen at the end of the story. I had so many more ideas already, but I just have to come to an ending :) I hope it wasnt annoying reading so much text. It is just, I like giving reviews, of chapters I love. And hell did I love this one. It was such a fantastic story ending chapter. Phew... I am wishing you a hopefully nice Christmas, even if you broke up with your gf, I hope youll have some nice time. Thank you again so so so much that you still wrote the chapter. You did such a great gift to me with this, and I am sure to lots of other readers <3 Merry Christmas!!!

Author's Response:

Really glad you liked it! Hearing this kind of feedback is a great christmas gift on it's own! I haven't completely thought out where my Valentine's Day story will go yet, but I do know it will focus on Tommy and Jenny (I also have no plans of killing them off) and Simon and Claudia, and maybe a new love interest for Bobby. It will have lots of unaware vore and I'll start planning it out soon, but probably no male vore (no offense, I'm not really into that stuff).  Plus, my gf and I got back together so hopefully itll be a good Christmas after all! Thanks again for reading and reviewing and have a happy holiday!