[Report This]Date: November 26 2014 7:13 PM Title: Chapter 23: 'The Mission'
I was pleasantly surprised with how utterly enthralling I found this story! Each chapter was very fluidly connected and ended on a point that left me content, yet giddy to continue on to the next!
I loved the characters and their chemistry with each other, their thought processes and assumptions came with good reasoning. The circumstances rarely if ever felt forced, and the story moved at a comfortable steady pace.
While I wish it would continue, I understand the reason that it was concluded from your chapter notes. I actually was led to this story after being impressed with your more recent works! I look forward to reading more of your stories. :]
Date: August 11 2014 3:25 AM Title: Chapter 23: 'The Mission'
First i have to say i really do like this story, its a pleasure to read :)
What i would like more to read is some more butt action (yeah i am a buttman^^) Perhaps even Kai discovers kind of a buttfetish toward Tris, requesting to spend some time in the back of her panties, in her crack?
As for this chapter, i am glad Serena is save again and all but probably the rescue from the orphanage went a bit to fast and easy..i dont know. That could be a whole chapter on its own.
Author's Response: Thank you :) As for finishing the chapter pretty fast, the story was coming to an end so I didn't want to dwell on the chapter too long. My new story will be out soon so look out for that. :)
[Report This]Date: August 10 2014 6:46 PM Title: Chapter 23: 'The Mission'
Well, I didn't think that 23 chapters was too long. I still can't believe how fast you cranked out this tale! The mystery of what actually caused this phenomenon, still remains, And,... it seems that the 'real story' would just be begining!
You have everything in place for another 26 chapter continuation...
You have a real knack for the 'narrative parts', and your discriptions are very simalar to my own,...I notice some of the very same words that I use, and I have to stop and reread that part again just to compare how 'you' used IT.
I hate to see this adventure ending so abruptly, but at least it ended on a good note!
Look forward to the next tale, and hopefully it'll be much longer than this one ;`)
Author's Response: Thank you! I have noticed from reading your stories that there are some similarities in the way we write. I'm sorry that the story ended so abruptly, and sadly with the ending that it did. But it's only my FIRST story. EVER. So I'm just glad it got a good response. Thank you for all of your reviews wildcatman, I enjoyed reading all of them and I hope to see you in the reviews of my next stories. You helped me a lot through the story with your insightful reviews :)