Date: October 09 2021 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 17
"Always feeling sad even when everything in my life was going right. I wasn’t a star on the wrestling team, I was good but not great. But I was friends with everyone on the team, we were like brothers to each other. My grades were a little above average, I’ve performed at open mic night at school a few times. But it would never leave me alone. The fact that I couldn’t say I was happy about anything, and I’d always ask what was wrong with me."
This extract is something so real. Feeling empty when you should be happy, having a huge lack of motivation. Achieving milestons but not feeling anything. Getting a present that you wanted, but once you get it you feel nothing.
At the end, one has to try to apreciate everything. Just stopping and enjoy the moment. Only think about what you can change. If it doesnt depend on you, then try to not think about it.
Date: February 18 2018 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 17
Hmmm, as a guy with depression myself, I don't necessarily think all suicides are selfish, at least not in the sense that a depressed person should stay alive just to keep other people happy. That seems selfish on their part honestly. People should have the right to live, AND die as they choose to, and not stay alive out of guilt or feelings of obligation for other's mental health..(What about the depressed person's mental health??)
Eh, not quite sure how to feel about this. On one hand, everyone has different reasons for being depressed, so I empathize with Pete, on the other hand, he did positively impact people's lives and his reasons for why he was so depressed seem illogical, (but depression itself is illogical by nature), so I can understand how the girls feel too...
Date: August 17 2014 3:37 PM Title: Chapter 17
Not into magic myself, simply because the Bible warns that God doesn't like it.
That said, I'm very much into giantess vore. Could you point me to any suitable chapters in this story that you think I should read, where women/girls try to eat guys, or even succeed?
Author's Response:
I my self was raised Catholic and I am still a believer. But considering how magic is not truly possible for humans I think I'm ok.
I'm sorry to say that there is no vore in my story, I'm more into feet. Sorry.
[Report This]Date: August 14 2014 12:37 PM Title: Chapter 17
If only Robin Williams could've read this chapter.
Bravo! :-)
Date: August 13 2014 11:40 AM Title: Chapter 17
Woah! I had no idead it had tried to commit sucide before. Some very deep stuff here.
No you were not stupid for throwing magic in. I use magic in a lot of my stories.
Date: August 13 2014 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 17
I've got to say, I did not like this chapter. I was expecting something completely different to happen. I liked the build up and his suicide attempt. He has gone through some major mental trauma while being shrunken and made some very good points about how insensitive the girls were being to his situation. His suicide attempt seemed to be their fault on several levels
But you just glossed right over that. By giving him a history of depresion you ignored the very good reasons he's had to be depressed since shunken and made it seem like something that happens all the time.
I expected the girls would be the ones to apologise when he woke up. I mean do you remember what happened before the suicide attempt? They played a prank on him with a toy spider after he almost got killed by a spider!
Thats like pretending to rape a rape victem then wondering why their so upset about your joke. And now this chapter is like having said rape victem apologise for overreacting! It makes no sense!
So all in all not a fan of this chapter. I would say take out talk of depression. Don't focus the story on things that happened before he shrunk that we never saw, focus it on things that happened after, he has plenty of trauma since your story started to explain a suicide attempt. And don't put everything on him. The girls have some apologising to do too!
[Report This]Date: August 13 2014 3:45 AM Title: Chapter 17
Gotta say I liked this chapter a lot more than the last one. I'm totally on board with magic as the root cause. The reason I would rank the last chapter lower is because it seemed out of place in relation to your other chapters. It almost felt like it answered too many questions to quickly. One of the reasons I've enjoyed this story so much is how every time we learn something minor we also are faced with more questions. It's the constant curriousity and the charaters who feel like real people that sucks you in.
The other reason why I'd rank this chapter higher is because it's dealing with some really major issues and you do a great job of giving a glimps of what it's like to deal with major depression. Both for the patient and those around them.
And what do you mean cheesy story lol? This has been my favorit story on this site since you started posting it. One chapter is too soon to be saying goodbye to these charaters lol. If there is only one more chapter though, i can't wait to read your next story.
Author's Response:
I guess I tried to emulate Robert Jordan. If you've ever read The Wheel of Time series Jordan amassed a dozen new questions for every one answer. But towards the end of the fourteen book series, maybe the tenth or eleventh book Brandon Sanderson (the author who took over after Jordan's death) did the exact opposite. And he did that because that's what Jordan wanted to happen. He created an entire room of maps and notes for how he wanted the series to be finished. So yeah, that's what I tried to do myself.
And thank you for taking notice of the way I addressed depression. I do not suffer from it but a very close friend of mine does. I wanted to really show what it's like, invisible. People go out of their way to hide depression so I tried my best to be subtle yet honest.
My next story might not be up for a while though. It's going to be the sequel to Who's Really The Bigger Person Here. And I'm going to take time to create a much bigger plot (no pun intended)
Date: August 12 2014 11:10 PM Title: Chapter 17
This wasn't too bad. One more chapter though? I hope you can wrap it up efficiently. Cause a conclusion can make or break a story. Also, do you plan to do another story after this? Cause you're one of my facourite gts authors.
Author's Response:
I'll try my best not to make it seem like deus ex machina when I wrap it up. But just in case I would like to remind you that it was explained to Peter that his returning to normal size would all depend on him completing a certain task.
As always thank you so much for your support of my writing. This piece actually meant a lot to me.
And yes, my next story will probably be the sequel to Who's Really The Bigger Person Here.
[Report This]Date: August 12 2014 10:52 PM Title: Chapter 17
Hmmm. I don't know how I feel about suicidal Peter. Maybe I missed the foreshadowing...
I still kind of feel like the girls should apologize for screwing with Peter so much because without this new information we got about why Peter was ACTUALLY depressed, I was thinking that it was the fact that hes shrunk combined with all the crazy near death stuff with spiders and such, and also the teasing from the girls that caused him to stress out and commit suicide. Basically in my mind, the girls shared some of the blame, but that was just MY interpretation before you gave us Peter's backstory.
Ahh, whatever. Overall I had fun with this story! Really! It was a good read regardless. I think this ending stuff could have been handled better (maybe clearer foreshadowing?), but overall it was a good tale! I'm looking forward to how you wrap this all up, since it looks like were at the end now!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your words of encouragement as well as your constructive criticism. I agree the foreshadowing could have been laid out a lot better.
I'll make sure to have an official apology in the next chapter since, now that I look at it, the girls do owe it to Peter.